第一次写托福作文求指点一下

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     During our lifetime,different individuals we encountered with are supposed to be our teachers. The poor teach us how to live happy life though basically living materials are always in shortage.The elderly give us lessons that how to cherish daily life and keep circumspect about our choices. But among these life teachers,there is no deny that parents are the best teachers for us. My reasons are as follows.
        First of all, it is parents who give us lives and love us, teach us ,take care of us,from the day when we were born to the day when they go to the heaven.therefore,they spend most of time staying with us and becoming to understand what we think about and do . Then,definitely , not only do they know thoroughly about our merits and demerits, but  they also help us to change some bad habits patiently . For example ,when I was 15 years old, I wanted to quit school because classmates teased me and teacher admonished me just as the result of my losing controlled to choke several times one hour lasting two weeks . When the teacher called my home phone and told my parents about my misbehavior on the class ,I had thought They would blame on me . However,to my surprise ,they just sit aside with me and softly asked me why I lost control over choking and told me a lot of methods to avoid choking continuously in the public. Fortunately ,with their help ,I got ride of this habit and now I become a child behavior guiding doctor in a famous hospital. If without my parents patiently help ,I must still in self-efface .
        Another factor is that as a saying goes,"parents are the first teachers we have".admittedly,I learned a lot from my parents, even about how to raise my own kids.Though my parents are not professional teacher and even they just get high school degrees, they do teach me a lot with implication . For example, every weekend ,no matter how busy they are,they still drive a long way to visit my grandparents with a lot of healthy product and chat happily with them though my grandparents are nearly deaf.From that ,I think it is vital to take some time to care about our elder relatives and both of us can achieve happiness from this.therefore,I give this suggestion to my friends and often give my parents and grandparents calls or visit to chat with them, sharing interesting or moving things with them.
         Though parents have no ability to teach us some profound scientific lessons like professional teacher,they do teach us enormous life lessons ,such as how to keep a good mood , take care about others and show the respect for the rival. From their patient lessons even implicate ones , we touch the feeling of love or even wishes ,like living a better lives ,keeping healthy and realizing our own dreams. During my lifetime, I will cherish and often look back on the lessons my parents thought me, I then pass these treasure to my own children.

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