[求批改]issue 63 求批改 多给意见 不胜感激

hsloner

Topic:
63. There is little justification forsociety to make extraordinary efforts—especially at a great cost in money andjobs—to save endangered animal or plant species.
特别是考虑到花费代价和精力，对于任何社会，投入巨大的努力拯救濒危的动植物是不合理的。
Write a response in which you discuss theextent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain yourreasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting yourposition, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might nothold true and explain how these considerations shape your position. Position:disagree.

Outline:
  这个判断是不准确的，每个物种都是地球上重要的一份子，我们应该尽力去拯救那些濒临灭绝的物种，尽快我们会因此话花费大量的财力，保持物种的多样性是值得的
  单单从成本分析来看的标准来看，人类似乎没有必要为拯救濒危物种付出太高的代价。第一，我们完全可以把用来拯救濒危物种的巨大物力财力那去救济更多需要帮助的人，生产出更多的产品，为人类创造更多的就业和财富。第二，完全可以假设在人类出现在这个星球之前就已经有大量物种消亡了。也许消亡的物种的数量比新生的物种还要多。第三，即便我们付出巨大的努力，部分物种仍然会灭绝，我们的努力因此显得有些徒劳。
  但是，基于人类对自己行为的负责以及对自身安全的考虑，拯救濒危物种又是必要的。具体而言，第一把用来拯救濒危物种的巨大财力物力拿去救济更多需要帮助的人，生产更多的产品，创造更多的就业机会等等，看来是节约了资源，但是有些救济是无用了，生产更多的产品也不一定都能被使用，可能引起产能过剩，就业机会不是靠金钱砸出来的，而濒危物种需要这些资金。第二，对于消失的物种人类并不像自我想象的那么无辜。科技的进步不仅改善了人们的生活，同时也增强了人类干预和破坏自然的能力。或许已经给部分生物物种带去了致命的威胁，我们只是没有意识到，或者有意的忽略了而已。第三，即便部分物种的灭绝是个自然的过程，但这个过程已经危及人类自身的生存的话，人类采取行动对这个过程进行干预也是自然的。
  拯救濒危物种的理由可以很简单：那就是，人类对生命的敬畏和对自己知识的谦卑，所有地球上的生命就像我们自己一样有生存的权利，并且他们直接或者间接的促进了人类的繁荣。而人类却因为自己有限的进步沾沾自喜，有意无意的放弃了对其他生命的悲悯、敬畏、责任。人类最终的悲剧不在与无知，而在于自负。


Text:
  This judgment is not correct. Every species is an import role over theearth, we should take our best to save endangered animal or plant species. Itis worthwhile to do so for retain the diversity of the species, although itwould spend a great cost in money and jobs
  It seems needlessly to save endangered species under a great cost of moneyand jobs. First, we can relieve more people who need help by means of the greatmoney and jobs, we can use it to product more commodity, we can apply it formore employment and wealth. Secondly, we can presume that there were a large amountof species died out before human appear. Maybe the amount of the extinction ismore than the amount of the new generation. Thirdly, part of species also becomesextinct as usual even though we make extraordinary efforts—especially at agreat cost in money and jobs. Therefore, it looks like fruitless for ourefforts.
  However, It is indispensable to save endangered species on the base ofbe responsible for human behaviors and human safety. In practical terms,firstly, it seems economize resource to use the great cost of money and jobs tosave endangered species to help more people, yield more production and createmore chance for employment. But, a part of help is useless, the moreproductions is not mean of the higher use rate of this production, and theemployment is less relative to the more money and jobs. Nevertheless,endangered species need this money and jobs, it can make them survive. Then, humanis not innocent like they image towards the die out of the species. The advancedtechnology not only change people`s lifestyle, but also strengthen people`sability to intervene and damage nature. Perhaps this kind of interpose hasbroken fatal threat to animal or plant species. That we has not been aware ofit or we omitted it intentionally. Thirdly, even if is a natural process forpart of species died out. Human should take action to intervene this process ifit has jeopardize human themselves safety.
  Actually, the reason to save endangered animal or plant species isspecial simple: that is, human awe to life and human humble to themselvesacknowledge. All of lives in the earth own the same right to subsist likeourselves. And the existence of diverse species promoted human booming director indirectly. However, human is pleased with themselves for limited progress,give up revere and responsible to other life intentional or unintentional. Humantragedy is not ignorant finally, but overconfidence.

普渡哥

Every species is an import role over the earth,

earth的e要大写吧，species应该用单数。

普渡哥

喜欢作者的论理。

mliu9

on the base of being responsible for human behaviors
至少我觉得应该是being。。。不是of be吧。。。

竹林中人

加油！

hsloner

额是的  大意了

hsloner

谢谢

hsloner

额 是啊  这个没注意

hsloner

我会的  谢谢