Issue高频题~~求批改！

greenfish7

Colleges and universities should require all faculty to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach.


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As the society advances, it is more required than ever that professions from different fields should be fused to construct a more developed world. Recently, controversy surrounds the question of whether faculty of colleges and universities should spend time with courses outside the field they teach. Admittedly, a more comprehensive knowledge is helpful for whomever in the education system or even the whole society; however, it should be stressed that these activities should be conducted under proper conditions, guaranteeing the quality of education and academic researches.


With the explosive development of science and technology, things are becoming more and more complex and comprehensive. This calls for more talents that are capable of tackling problems involved in several different professions. Examples are not far to see. As is known to all, archaeology is a difficult course that needs all of the knowledge encompassing geology, chemistry, and history etc. It is hard to imagine how an archaeologist could work well in his/her own field without any information relevant to these external courses. It is also a significative affair for our earth that experts from environmental science, atmosphere science and other professions come together to deal with the problem of global warming. Without understanding of different fields of knowledge, the experts may fail to absorb the opinions from disparate directions. No wonder that interdisciplinary courses such as biochemistry, supply chain finance, and mathematical computation are prevalent in contemporary society.


In addition, which is crucial for the entire education system, as for the teacher, spending time with the courses outside a professor’s field will in turn give him/her a better understanding of the field and thus students can learn more efficiently by taking the professor’s course. From a perspective that is wider, the professor is more capable of disseminating views that are more practical and systematical. Thus, the students, who are comparatively unfamiliar with the course and its rationale, can gain the gist more quickly and then know how to apply what they have learned. In a society requiring fast learning, this ability set up in the process of learning is indispensable even in their lifetime.


However, it cannot be ignored that if the student or the professor lacks the energy or interest in those courses required to be taken, this recommendation may turn out to be counterproductive. For example, if a student majoring chemistry has exhausted his/her energy in working with homework and research paper, he/she will be reluctant to attend a biology course, which is to some extent relevant to chemistry. As a matter of fact, as the faculty of the colleges and universities are all individuals that can make decisions themselves as well as be responsible for their choices, it is unnecessary to require, but rather to provide these options for both the students and professors.


On balance, as the society advances, the power of knowledge to a certain degree is determined by how well it can solve problems, which requires different professions to strike together. However, it is unjustifiable for colleges and universities to require the faculty to work outside their major courses, but they should just offer the options, leaving them to make the decision.

竹林中人

最后两段写的没有前面好，倒数第二段你这儿写出这么一句很突兀的观点，没论述没说明，最后下结论段开头however没用好，它表明你前面说的都是非重点，这样你这文章就相当于没重点了。however这词要用对地方

greenfish7

明白了，非常感谢！