[求助]作文JJ08.3.8 麻烦德克老师和各位大侠拍一下，感激不尽~~

kawa_0721

看了德克老师批改过的一些文章，下午将自己写过的文章又修改了一遍，找出了很多问题，还想请德克老师和各位大侠帮忙修改一下。。

剩下不到一个月就要考试了，作文是我的一大恐惧，每次写作即使是不计时练习，都会很紧张，对自己写的作文也很没底，请各位指教指教。。

topic机经2008.3.8

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

At present,people spend too much time doing things for their enjoyment rather than do the things they should do.

Every one has his or her own interest. When asked about how much time do people spend to enjoy themselves these days, different people have different answers due to their distinct backgrounds and experiences. Some peole think that people spend too much time to enjoy themselves, while others maintain the opposite. If I were faced with this issue, I would like to say it is more suitable to choose the later point of view. There are many persuasive reasons why I choose this statement, now I will explore a few of the most important ones.

First of all ,the reason that can be presented to develop my point is that people are supposed to take more responsibility and obligation today, they don’t have enough time to do enjoyable things. As one plays different roles in his or her life, he or she has to be responsible to all the relative persons, events, and things. For example , a man has to go to work in order to earn money to support his whole family. Also, he has to bring up his children , providing them a harmonious atmosphere and a positive academic environment . Can you imagine that he still has to look after his parents and go on a further study to improve himself? Thus he has no vigor left to do what he really enjoy to do, such as watching his favor football show on TV.  I think these are the most impressive example to demonstrate my perspective.

Not only reponsibility and obligation ,but also the tough life determine that people have to spend more time to do things they should do. With the growth of economy, people faced with a much more fierce compition. Thus, in order not to be rejected by the society, they have to adjust themselves to the changing environment, such as spend time on studying new skills and technology and even do a job that they do not interseted in , leading an unsmoothly life with a heavy burden. If you can see , you will understand it more deeply.

Also, sometimes it’s a dissipation of vigor and time for people to do what they totally enjoy to do. In fact, one who spend the whole day playing computer games in his room , insisting on that he is releasing pressure and stress , is ,to a certain extent , consuming his energy and time. Later he may feel much more tried than before and even fail to do any work. It neither reachs the goal of relaxion, nor brings any factual value for people. Therefore, people seldom entertain themselves in this kind of uncontrolled way.

Taking into account all these factors discussed above, which sometime can interwine to form an organic whole and therefore become more persuasive , we can comfortable reach the conclusion that people in modern society always spend time to do what they should do ,in order to lead a stable, valuable and comfortable life.

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