[求助]希望高手帮忙指点一下作文

shine19

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

The government should require all young adults to perform some kind of national service, such as service or social work?

Nowadays, many young people use their time to learn some new skills like computer technology, languages and etc to further themselves. That’s a great thing that those young adults have positive attitudes of their life. However, when during this process, most of them neglect to do some kind of national service, such as volunteers, social work and military. Therefore, I agree that young adult should do some national service.

 

First of all, doing social work can help them make the sense of dedication. With the development of society, we find more and more youngers neglect the value of dedication. Even some of them think it’s natural for them to get some knowledge and information frome others and from the soceity. They don’t know they are taking other’s labors. Therefore, by doing social work, they can not only get somethings from the society but also devote themselves to the society to aid someone eles.

 

Moreover, young people’s social responsibility can be strenghened by participating social service. For example, young people can be the volunteers to take care of the olds. From that, they can understand it’s not only some one’s duty to look after senior citizens, but also the whole society’s duty to care all of the elders and even those diaabled persons. Hence, young people will gradually have the strong conciousness of social duty.

 

Last but not least, working social service can help youngers build up team work spirit. We know in most cases, it can’t be the only person to do those services, but a groupe. During this work, once young adults face problems, they need to cooperate with each other and conquer those problem together. In that circumstance, youngers will recognize the importance of team work, which is also good for their career development later.

 

In the conclusion, young adults should do some national service when they have time to improve themselves and devote themselves to the society. While the government also need issue some regulations to fulfill that system.

希望高手们多多指点，中觉得自己的作文没有太多的变化，特别是用词用句方面，感觉像高中生写出来的一样。和大家一起交流一下吧，任何 建议我都不胜感激。

超级老虎

你要学会用同意词替换，不要重复用一个词。