曼哈顿语法中关于修饰语的问题

poorcat · 发表于 2014-3-5 10:59:18

2)Avery short predicate falls between, shifting avery long modifier back.

Right: Anew CEOhasbeen hired who will transform the company bydecen-
tralizing authority to various division heads while increasing their
accountability through the useof public scorecards.

The alternative construction is confusing, because the modifier is extremely lengthy:

Awkward: Anew CEOwho willtransform the company bydecentralizing author-
ity to various division heads while increasing their accountability
through the useof public scorecards hasbeen hired.

求教为什么错句awkward？

yakev6 · 发表于 2014-3-5 11:29:08

好久没来了，上来看看，顺便替嘟嘟回答个问题哈

话说一切句子都为了表意，何以表意？靠的是主谓宾，一般情况下出现了主语后读者会期待出现动词，可是出现的却是很长的形容词成分，这会让读者挠墙的感觉。

kiwifoodtown · 发表于 2014-3-5 12:30:31

主语修饰部分过长，让读者反感。所以解决的办法就是把修饰部分扔到后面去。

poorcat · 发表于 2014-3-5 18:05:48

谢谢各位啦，明白了

曼哈顿语法中关于修饰语的问题

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