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tangowithfir · 发表于 2013-10-15 18:47:29

10月15号作文，We can learn about a person from the books and the movies that person likes.

T: Agree

S1:books和movies的内容能够反映这个人的爱好

S2：books和movies能够反映这个人的性格特点

S3：让步段，虽然这种方法来了解一个人不是很有效，但是确实是可行的，而且适用于大多数时候我们不需要深入了解一个人的时候

C

To know someone around, the best way is have a conversation. But, sometimes we don't have the moment to talk a lot.I still remember one scence of "Grey's Atonomy" Season 1, in which Meredith chooses her roommates by several questions in cluding what is the candidate's favorite movie. It might be funny in the series, but in my eyes it is a useful way to learn about a person via the books and movies he/she likes.

A person's hobbies are often reflected by the context of the books and movies he/she favors. This is easy to understand. If a person is interested in a certain object, he/she can hardly get rid of the related books and movies. For instance,  a super basketball fan would also constantly read the latest NBA news on  basketball magzines. By the way, I love cars especially sports cars, and an overwhelming evidence to support my opinion is that I have watched "Speed and Furious" from part 1 to the lately part 6.

Moreover, we're able to have a first impression about someone's personality by  books or movies that attract him/her. Since reading books and watching movies contribute to build one's mental world and set up one's personality, we can generally know that a man who is reading " Time series" would have a scientifical mind, or someone prefer classic movies can be old style in dealing with personal problems.

Admittedly, this method is neither effective nor efficient to understand a close friend. However,  there are various people in the world and we don't have to know each one very well. More often, we just need to take sides or make little judgment by a general understanding about a certain person. In this case, we can get useful information via the books and movies he/she likes.

As all above, I maintain that we can collect a great deal of information about a person from the books and movies that person likes. This is a quite convinient way to learn about someone.

tangowithfir · 发表于 2013-10-17 16:37:49

10月16日独立作文作业

Should the government support artists or should the artists support themselves?

T: Agree

S1: government is powerful and resourceful

S2: government can support directly or even indirectly

S3; Artists 自行支持可能更为灵活以及适合artist创作的方式，however，这种自发的或者是协会形式的支持力量太小

C

Since the Federal government offered tremendous support to artists last century, it has been a controversial issue that whether the artists should be supported by the government or by themselves. It’s never been easy to coordinate the unique life styles of artists and government policy. But, I still believe that artists would gain further development with the reinforcement by the government and my reasons are as follows.

To start with, the government is always associated with certain images, such as inefficiency and regulations, but we can’t deny the powerful and resourceful quality of a nation’s leading power.The financial support from a government can far outweigh what comes from several artists themselves. Not to mention the money granted by the Federal government in 1990s, even a municipal government can provide artists with considerable area of land to work and live. Nowadays the land in Beijing is really gold, but we can see how large the famous “798 art zone” is and Beijing also announced another program to promote movie development last year.

Despite the direct impulse, the ability to legislate also enable a government to help artists indirectly. We all know that tax is a powerful way to redistribute the wealth of the society, and if there is little taxation towards certain business, more money would go there and the investors would prefer these industries. So what if our nation decreases the tax towards art industries like movie or music? The answer is obvious and certain policies are already undergoing in China. Even an income tax adjustment towards artists would help them a lot.

Admittedly, artists know themselves better than any other social group. They are often so devoted to their work rather than consider the living conditions and a great number of artists even hated working for money and being regulated by the government. But their power is too limited to support themselves. Besides, most of the artists can be benefited from a government’s offerings and those minor artists I mentioned before are also benefited indirectly by those policies.

For these considering, I insist that artists should be supported by the government and they can gain a better development in both work and living.

jirou1212 · 发表于 2013-10-17 20:45:27

非常抱歉迟来的批改啊～昨天网路不能连线现在才补上 sorry
10/15
独立

To know someone around, the best way is to have a conversation. But, sometimes we don't have the right moment to start up a long talk.I still remember one scence in "Grey's Atonomy" Season 1, in which Meredith chooses her roommates by several questions in cluding what is the candidate's favorite movie. It might be funny in the series, but in my point of view it is an useful way to learn about a person via the books and movies he/she likes.

A person's hobbies are often reflected by the context of the books and movies he/she favors. This is easy to understand. If a person is interested in a certain object, he/she can hardly get rid of the related books and movies. For instance,  a super basketball fan would also constantly read the latest NBA news on  basketball magzines. By the way, I love cars, especially sports cars. I have watched "Fast and Furious" from 1st episode/volume  to the latest one, 6th episode/volume.This background knowledges can strongly supported to my opinions in cars.

Moreover, we're able to have a first impression about someone's personality by  books or movies that attract him/her. Since reading books and watching movies contribute to build one's mental world and set up one's personality, we can generally know that a man who is reading " Time series" would have a scientifical mind, or someone prefer classic movies can be old style in dealing with personal problems.

Admittedly, this method is neither effective nor efficient to understand a close friend. However,  there are various people in the world and we don't have to know each one very well. More often, we just need to take sides or make little judgment by a general understanding about a certain person. In this case, we can get useful information via the books and movies he/she likes.

As all above, I maintain that we can collect a great deal of information about a person from the books and movies that the person likes. This is a quite convinient way to learn about someone.

架构完整的文章
我觉得你提出的论点要再有更多连结性还有许多的用字其实不一定要很艰深有逻辑的句子反而更能有力的表达

krystalgo · 发表于 2013-10-17 21:18:37

写的真挺好，不好意思改晚了，因为我没看到你占座的那个回复就有作文，一直以为你还没写完~最后才看到~

tangowithfir · 发表于 2013-10-18 17:16:02

10月17日独立作文

Should parents spend more time on playing games or sports with children together or use the time to do something related to the children's study?

TM Streec $

Team&trust

Mind&Skill

Socialization& Competition

Tenacity& Pressure

Rights& responsibility

Environment&health

Employment&Efficiency

Culture & Tradition

Money& Enjoyment

The competition in our modern society has become increasingly firce, thus parents are inclining to provide their children with further assistance on their children’s study. But, few adults see the significance of growth beyond knowledge for adolscents. I suggest that parents spend more time on sports and games with children, since what really counts for a kid is not only the scores but also a healthy personality.

To begin with, participating in games and sports can foster a sense of community and team spirits. Unlike working out assignments by independently thought, children are more aware of the importance for communication and cooperation during sports and games with parents. I can still remember what my father told me when we played basketball for the first time----“You can’t win by yourself only. You should learn to trust your teammates.” And these social ability are virtually critical for a smart young man to succeed in real world.

Another fact is the pressure on these young generations has become overloaded year after year. Not to mention the suffering senior year for high school students, even primary students in China are taking extra classes after school nowadays. So, when they come home, why not help your children relax? By the way, a large proportion parents works during the day, and I think it’s a mutual benefit for a family to play some games to release the pressure and talk about the daily life.

Admittedly, children may perform better in exams with the help from parents. More “A”s may ensure a better college. But these aren’t everything, a knowledgible person without healthy personality won’t gain progress in our society. Time has obsured too many talented students on campus, however we can see few successful persons come from those winners in national exams,according to a survey by CCTV.

I think it’s vital for parents to share more time with children in playing games and sports, not only for what we are concerned above, but also for your love to children. When your eyes moves away form the scores, I’m sure you can hear more from the inner heart of your kids.

yagiliang · 发表于 2013-10-18 22:18:03

不好意思，改晚了

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