第六题，求拍~

gloryming · 发表于 2012-10-28 09:43:37

A nation should let all of its students to study some same nation curriculum until they enter college in the meantime they also need to offer some other options to the students. To ensure all the students get same level education a nation should set some curriculums as national curriculum. On the other hand, every schools should offer optional curriculum to students in developing their own interest.

As we known, education and technology are leading the development of a country so a nation should pay more attention on its education, especially elementary education. In this way a nation should require its students to study some nation curriculum until they pursue higher degree. In different cities the average education level lead to different development of construction and economy. So it is very important to let all the students in a nation get the same level education. But in some rural area because of the financial limitation, students can not get the same education as other cities' students. Then the critical thing is giving these rural area financial support to ensure the students can recive the same education.

Setting up the same curriculum teachers will never worry about preparing the class, because one time they finished preparation they can use it forever. And teachers will lose the enthusiasm to learn more new knowledge, thus students can not get better knowledge from teachers. In the meantime students may lose creativity or the ability of independent thought. It is not good for students' future and the prosperity of nation. On the other hand, students have the right to choose the curriculum they like. In this way, not only can they pursue the thing they like but get some different ability from others. Otherwise it is so boring to do the things students don't like all the day. Moreover it can have bad influence on the daily routine just because they have to attend the class they don't like.

So it is no necessary that a nation require all of its students to study the same curriculum until they enter college. Instead they can establish some common curriculums and offer some other different options in the meantime. More options can lead a better future not only for students but the whole nation.

gloryming · 发表于 2012-10-28 09:45:33

求各路大神拍拍

普渡哥 · 发表于 2012-10-28 11:41:22

第一段里最好有引用以下题目的观点，然后表达自己的意见。

gloryming · 发表于 2012-10-28 15:21:08

第一段里最好有引用以下题目的观点，然后表达自己的意见。

-- by 会员普渡哥 (2012/10/28 11:41:22)

其他地方呢，有什么问题么？

竹林中人 · 发表于 2012-10-28 17:33:47

A nation should let all of its students to study some same nation curriculum until they enter college in the meantime they also need to offer some other options to the students. To ensure all the students get same level education a nation should set some curriculums as national curriculum. On the other hand, every schools should offer optional curriculum to students in developing their own interest.

As we known, education and technology are leading the development of a country so a nation should pay more attention on its education, especially elementary education. In this way a nation should require its students to study some nation curriculum until they pursue higher degree. In different cities the average education level lead to different development of construction and economy. So it is very important to let all the students in a nation get the same level education. But in some rural area because of the financial limitation, students can not get the same education as other cities' students. Then the critical thing is giving these rural area financial support to ensure the students can recive the same education.

Setting up the same curriculum teachers will never worry about preparing the class, because one time they finished preparation they can use it forever. And teachers will lose the enthusiasm to learn more new knowledge, thus students can not get better knowledge from teachers. In the meantime students may lose creativity or the ability of independent thought. It is not good for students' future and the prosperity of nation. On the other hand, students have the right to choose the curriculum they like. In this way, not only can they pursue the thing they like but get some different ability from others. Otherwise it is so boring to do the things students don't like all the day. Moreover it can have bad influence on the daily routine just because they have to attend the class they don't like.

So it is no necessary that a nation require all of its students to study the same curriculum until they enter college. Instead they can establish some common curriculums and offer some other different options in the meantime. More options can lead a better future not only for students but the whole nation.

-- by 会员 gloryming (2012/10/28 9:43:37)

语言上问题不大，只是内容略显少，中间只有两个段落，不知道能不能加上一点，另外第三段说的不太清楚，你要说的应该是所有都采取一种课程安排会带来的坏处，所以需要明确下

gloryming · 发表于 2012-10-28 18:14:34

A nation should let all of its students to study some same nation curriculum until they enter college in the meantime they also need to offer some other options to the students. To ensure all the students get same level education a nation should set some curriculums as national curriculum. On the other hand, every schools should offer optional curriculum to students in developing their own interest.

As we known, education and technology are leading the development of a country so a nation should pay more attention on its education, especially elementary education. In this way a nation should require its students to study some nation curriculum until they pursue higher degree. In different cities the average education level lead to different development of construction and economy. So it is very important to let all the students in a nation get the same level education. But in some rural area because of the financial limitation, students can not get the same education as other cities' students. Then the critical thing is giving these rural area financial support to ensure the students can recive the same education.

Setting up the same curriculum teachers will never worry about preparing the class, because one time they finished preparation they can use it forever. And teachers will lose the enthusiasm to learn more new knowledge, thus students can not get better knowledge from teachers. In the meantime students may lose creativity or the ability of independent thought. It is not good for students' future and the prosperity of nation. On the other hand, students have the right to choose the curriculum they like. In this way, not only can they pursue the thing they like but get some different ability from others. Otherwise it is so boring to do the things students don't like all the day. Moreover it can have bad influence on the daily routine just because they have to attend the class they don't like.

So it is no necessary that a nation require all of its students to study the same curriculum until they enter college. Instead they can establish some common curriculums and offer some other different options in the meantime. More options can lead a better future not only for students but the whole nation.

-- by 会员 gloryming (2012/10/28 9:43:37)

语言上问题不大，只是内容略显少，中间只有两个段落，不知道能不能加上一点，另外第三段说的不太清楚，你要说的应该是所有都采取一种课程安排会带来的坏处，所以需要明确下

-- by 会员竹林中人 (2012/10/28 17:33:47)

嗯，谢谢，这种建议对我们写作帮助很大，希望以后能继续得到大虾的指点！

竹林中人 · 发表于 2012-10-28 18:45:04

A nation should let all of its students to study some same nation curriculum until they enter college in the meantime they also need to offer some other options to the students. To ensure all the students get same level education a nation should set some curriculums as national curriculum. On the other hand, every schools should offer optional curriculum to students in developing their own interest.

As we known, education and technology are leading the development of a country so a nation should pay more attention on its education, especially elementary education. In this way a nation should require its students to study some nation curriculum until they pursue higher degree. In different cities the average education level lead to different development of construction and economy. So it is very important to let all the students in a nation get the same level education. But in some rural area because of the financial limitation, students can not get the same education as other cities' students. Then the critical thing is giving these rural area financial support to ensure the students can recive the same education.

Setting up the same curriculum teachers will never worry about preparing the class, because one time they finished preparation they can use it forever. And teachers will lose the enthusiasm to learn more new knowledge, thus students can not get better knowledge from teachers. In the meantime students may lose creativity or the ability of independent thought. It is not good for students' future and the prosperity of nation. On the other hand, students have the right to choose the curriculum they like. In this way, not only can they pursue the thing they like but get some different ability from others. Otherwise it is so boring to do the things students don't like all the day. Moreover it can have bad influence on the daily routine just because they have to attend the class they don't like.

So it is no necessary that a nation require all of its students to study the same curriculum until they enter college. Instead they can establish some common curriculums and offer some other different options in the meantime. More options can lead a better future not only for students but the whole nation.

-- by 会员 gloryming (2012/10/28 9:43:37)

语言上问题不大，只是内容略显少，中间只有两个段落，不知道能不能加上一点，另外第三段说的不太清楚，你要说的应该是所有都采取一种课程安排会带来的坏处，所以需要明确下

-- by 会员竹林中人 (2012/10/28 17:33:47)

嗯，谢谢，这种建议对我们写作帮助很大，希望以后能继续得到大虾的指点！

-- by 会员 gloryming (2012/10/28 18:14:34)

加油加油，相互学习

arui2013 · 发表于 2012-12-17 23:45:28

是不是先陈述题目的观点，然后再发表自己的看法？

竹林中人 · 发表于 2012-12-18 00:44:52

是不是先陈述题目的观点，然后再发表自己的看法？

-- by 会员 arui2013 (2012/12/17 23:45:28)

最好陈述下，对话题作适当的阐述（个人理解或者背景）

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