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第一次写作文啊,里面肯定有很多错误,求大家批改啊,谢谢啦

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发表于 2012-12-7 16:50:41 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today are more likely to help others than young people

Do you find,recently,that many homeless children come back to their hometown?do you know,nowadays,that numerous poor preson live more happiness?do you hear,lately,significant students help others?young people,currently,help others more likely than young in past.

Young person help a homeless child back to their hometown.in this year,a young person found a homeless child,which native place is not here,lie down on the street. He communicate with him and contacted to his parents. It is extraordinarily happy to parents to know where their child is.the parents thank for the young person and come bak.young’s behaviour makes family replace to happiness.

The young man,increasingly,who is rich devote their money to help poor preson. in recent years.according to maslow’s need hierarchy theory.when people lives happiness,they will realize their self volue.so this is a reason why rich young man helps others.in our city,when a rich young man travels in a small village ,he finds that there is no electricity and no convenient water.he thinks it is inconvenient to villagers.thus,he devotes money and changes villager’s life.

By the high of education,more and more college students pay attention to public welfare.they practice the commonweal organization to help people who need help.i am a volunteer in Xinjiang Real Commonweal organization.our form has a large volunteers from differentuniversities.we always go to Nursing homes,played chess with them or chatted with them,that makes them happy.

In the past,young people constantly help others,like help other carry water,help other clean the house,help other baby-sit the child.however,people,nowadays are more likely to help others than before.as the more education young peoople have,the more help the will do.in addition,the the rich men continually grow so they also will do help other!


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沙发
发表于 2012-12-7 17:04:48 | 只看该作者
嗯,推荐楼主先去背点范文
这样写起来会更快更好
板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2012-12-7 22:13:00 | 只看该作者
好呢,谢谢你噢
地板
发表于 2012-12-8 00:44:14 | 只看该作者
咱们一组,你要抓紧写12.7的作业了哦
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