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daisyrong · 发表于 2012-11-24 20:17:18

在下daisy，初来乍到，希望大家多多指教好像看到论坛里也有一大牛叫daisy，希望能沾沾她的运气，福气……哈哈
从今天开始加入写作小分队，水平有限，希望能和大家一起努力，加油

daisyrong · 发表于 2012-11-24 20:19:11

TPO 14 Integrate task

Both the reading passage and the lecture concentrate on the practice of salvage logging, which is a controversial method to help forests recover after a destructive fire or storm. Contrary to the belief in the reading, the professor argues that salvage logging would actually pose some serious environmental damage in the long term and the economic benefits are questionable. Then he raises three specific points to demonstrate his idea.

First of all, salvage logging offers room for fresh growth by removing the remains of dead trees. However, the professor claims that instead of creating necessary right conditions for tree growth, the rapid removal of dead trees will lead to the shortage of essential nutrients for growth. In fact, the natural process of wood decomposing will enrich the soil, making it suitable for the growth of future generation of trees. This part is exactly the opposite of what the reading indicates.

In addition, decaying wood is a designable habitat for insects, which can cause damage to trees. The lecturer casts doubt on the damage effect of those insects. The case of the spruce bark beetles, which have lived in the forest for hundred years without inducing any major damages, serves well to illustrate this point. Indeed, removing dead trees destroys the habitat of other species, like birds. Consequently, it threats the long term health of forest.

Lastly, salvage logging could bring some economic benefits. Regardless of the brief hold by the passage, the professor points out that those economic benefits are small and cannot last long. The vehicle used to recover damage is too expensive to maintain. Besides that, the job vacancies suggested by the reading is only temporary and often filled with outsiders who have more experience and skills than local resident. This is another point that the reading does not account for.

daisyrong · 发表于 2012-11-24 20:46:31

11.24 It's impossible to be completely honest with your friends

Honest, as people always believe, is the best policy. And yet, in the modern society, people usually behave far from the social norm. Government officials hide what they did for the past years at year-end report; Sales men lie about the benefits of a product over another when promoting goods; students who want to get a higher grade without any real work cheat during the exam. But all of those do not mean that it is impossible to be entirely honest with my friend. On the contrary, I definitely believe that dishonesty is not inevitable as long as there is profound mutual trust.

First and foremost, honest, which means telling the truth at any time, is the building blocks of human personality, integrity and dignity. Never can a person achieve many accomplishments nor have a high prestige without the conspicuous quality: honesty. There are numerous instances closely fit the notion, just like the American president George Washington. His bravery to be honest was acknowledged by the story readers and it was no accident that he later became one of the greatest American presidents

Furthermore, as a saying goes, a friend in need is a friend indeed. Friends, some of whom are more or less sophisticated and artful, are reluctant to rectify my mistakes in fear of offending me. Things would be completely different if I am fortunate enough to have a truthful friend. Last year, I participated in an English speaking contest. Luckily, I got much applause from the judges during the preliminary round. Almost everyone was praise of me, while, my best friend stood out, advising me to be calm and pointing out some of my shortcomings. With his good intentional warning, I was able to be free from making repeated mistakes; with his hearty advice, I was persuaded to go the right way and finally won the prize.

Lastly, honesty is not only the fundamental of relationship, but also the basic philosophy to guide our behaviors. The first time of dishonesty with a friend, no matter to what extent, is the very beginning of injustice and betrayal, which will eventually lead to the end of a relationship. Moreover, when you are telling a lie to your friends, whatever a well-meant flattery or an ill-disposed trick, you also betray yourself, your soul and heart.

Summarized what I have listed above, honesty is and will always be the main virtue of life. Please have confidence on the people we trust and open you heart to the person who deserved our 100% honesty.

lizchang1990 · 发表于 2012-11-25 12:42:44

亲，那个我晚上11点把你的作文修改贴出来，我的那个作文也那个时候贴出来，你就第二天给我就成了~因为我马上要考了，所以白天上网少了，紧张哇~~希望体谅哦！ O(∩_∩)O谢谢~~~不好意思哟！

daisyrong · 发表于 2012-11-25 18:04:42

好的，没关系，你加油啊

lizchang1990 · 发表于 2012-11-26 00:10:50

Honest, as people always believe, is the best policy.(policy这词不好在这) And yet, in the modern society, people usually behave far from the social norm. Government officials hide what they did for the past years at year-end report; Sales men lie about the benefits of a product over another when promoting goods; students who want to get a higher grade without any real work cheat during the exam. But all of those do not mean that it is impossible to be entirely honest with my friend. On the contrary, I definitely believe that dishonesty is not inevitable as long as there is profound mutual trust.

First and foremost, honest, which means telling the truth at any time, is the building blocks of human personality, integrity and dignity. Never can a person achieve many accomplishments nor have a high prestige without the conspicuous (高级词汇)quality: honesty. There are numerous instances closely fit the notion, just like the American president George Washington. His bravery to be honest was acknowledged by the story readers and it was no accident that he later became one of the greatest American presidents

Furthermore, as a saying goes, a friend in need is a friend indeed. Friends, some of whom are more or less sophisticated and artful, are reluctant to rectify my mistakes in fear of offending me. Things would be completely different if I am fortunate enough to have a truthful friend. Last year, I participated in an English speaking contest. Luckily, I got much applause from the judges during the preliminary round. Almost everyone was praise of me, while, my best friend stood out, advising me to be calm and pointing out some of my shortcomings. With his good intentional (你这个词汇不好吧)warning, I was able to be free from making repeated mistakes; with his hearty advice, I was persuaded to go the right way and finally won the prize.

Lastly, honesty is not only the fundamental of relationship, but also the basic philosophy to guide our behaviors. The first time of dishonesty with a friend, no matter to what extent, is the very beginning of injustice and betrayal, which will eventually lead to the end of a relationship. Moreover, when you are telling a lie to your friends, whatever a well-meant flattery or an ill-disposed(亮点) trick, you also betray yourself, your soul and heart.

Summarized what I have listed above, honesty is and will always be the main virtue of life. Please have confidence on the people we trust and open you heart to the person who deserved our 100% honesty.(结尾不错,有呼吁作用,受益匪浅哇~)

LZ的词汇很丰富,看得出基础扎实~本来纠结很久想挑你的论文毛病,但貌似可以,就是感觉论述太多不够说服读者.
结构很清晰!

我算鸡蛋挑骨头了哈~ EXCELLENT !

lizchang1990 · 发表于 2012-11-26 00:11:06

Both the reading passage and the lecture concentrate on the practice of salvage logging, which is a controversial method to help forests recover after a destructive fire or storm. Contrary to the belief in the reading, the professor argues that salvage logging would actually pose some serious environmental damage in the long term and the economic benefits are questionable. Then he raises three specific points to demonstrate his idea.

First of all, salvage logging offers room for fresh growth by removing the remains of dead trees. However, the professor claims that instead of (后面接句子,你这个表达不好哦)creating necessary right conditions for tree growth, the rapid removal of dead trees will lead to the shortage of essential nutrients for growth. In fact, the natural process of wood decomposing will enrich the soil, making it suitable for the growth of future generation of trees. This part is exactly the opposite of what the reading indicates.

In addition, decaying wood is a designable habitat for insects, which can cause damage to trees. The lecturer casts doubt on the damage effect of those insects. The case of the spruce bark beetles, which have lived in the forest for hundred years without inducing any major damages, serves well to illustrate this point. Indeed, removing dead trees destroys the habitat of other species, like birds. Consequently, it threats the long term health of forest.

Lastly, salvage logging could bring some economic benefits. Regardless of the brief hold by the passage, the professor points out that those economic benefits are small and cannot last long. The vehicle used to recover damage is too expensive to maintain. Besides that, the job vacancies suggested by the reading is only temporary and often filled with outsiders who have more experience and skills than local resident. This is another point that the reading does not account for.
（）综合写的很不错~这个模板不错,听力都听得很准!

语言仔细看了,没啥问题~ excellent!

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