issue139和argument94

vivianian · 发表于 2012-11-11 13:50:07

I139 Claim: Major policy decisions should always be left to politicians andother government experts.

Reason: Politicians and other government experts are more informed andthus have better judgment and perspective than do members of the generalpublic.

Write a response in which you discussthe extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason onwhich that claim is based.

The speaker claims that major poicy decisons should always be left to polician s and other government experts, on the ground that these people are more informed and thus have better judgement and perspective thatn do members of the common people, at the first glance , this opinion seems to be somewhat convincing , but further reflection on that shows that it is so complicated an issue that needs a case-to-case study, and I tend to hold the view that policians and other government experts take the major responsibilty to make decisions about policy, meanwhile, the opinions of common people toward the policy making should always be paid great attention to.

To begin with,it is obvious that the policians and the common people are on the different position when they make decisions, thus they consider the policy to be adopted from totally different angle. On one hand, as the speaker claims, the policians and government experts are more informed,and they are more experienced in government affairs with much expertise in these issues,which are the solid ground for the policians to make appropriate judgement on policy making,on the other hand, the menbers of the general public are inclined to be insular and less broad perspective,when they are considering making policies, envitably they tend to involve their own interests in the policy making in that they indeed have their own demands, thus it is obvious that wise and judicious decision about policy cannot be made in this way.
However,as is known to all, it is the basic right for the common people to take part in the policy making,so, the opinions from the general public cannot be left alone , on the contray, they need closer attention and examination.Moreover, despite the obvious advantages of polician over general pablic in policy making , it should not be neglected that man errs so long as he strives, so do policians, even they take pains to make good plicy on the behalf of general public , mistakes and false decisions cannot be missed,also, there may be some policians whose intention is bad, and they tend to do bad things toward common people to gain their own interest.
Additionally, major policy making is such a complicated issue that we should pay much atention to that ,the influce of major policy is surely far-reaching, if they are rightly made, both the policians and the members of general public will be benifited, if not, the policy making will be a waste of time and money at best, because inappropriate policy will even destroy a country.
Last, in spite if the discusion above, we should note the policians and common people are not mutually exclusive in policy making,of couse they can and must coexist in that process in order to make a good policy,thus a strong and rich nation,for example, when the goverment is going to make a policy , they can make a draft of policy firstly, then opinions of common people can be obtained through many ways such as nation-wide surveys and special meetings for the policy making for common people held by government.
In conclusion, it is no doubt that policians and other government take major responsibility in making decisons about policy making , at the same time , the common people should involve themselves in policy making in that their opinions deserve to be considered carefully.

A94
In this argument , the arguer claims that they should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations, and that inatalling the software to monitor employees' Internet use will prevent employee from wasting time, thereby increasing productivity and improving overall profits.this recommendation is based on the recent national survey , which found that the majority of workers with access to the Internet at work had used company computers for personal or recreational activities, such as banking or playing cards.In addition , the arguer assumes that using electronic monitoring softare is the best way to recuce the number of hours employees spend on the personal of recreational activities.However , a careful examination of this argument reveals that this argument is rife with holes.
First of all, the argument make the conclusion based on a national survey, but does the result of national survey apply to the company of climpson? without confirming that if it is proper to apply the a national survey to a companay of limpson, the argument cannot convince us of the plausibility of the predcition.Also, we wonder that if the national survey is objectively concucted, and if it is concucted among an apropriate sample, maybe people who condcuted the survey made biased result on the purpose we do not know, and there is also a possibility that the survey was conducted among a small portion of people in a small town , without more information about the survey, the prediction made by the arguer is not persuasive enough.
Secondly, the arguer assumes that using electronic monitoring software is the best way to recuce the numbe of hours climpson employees spend on the personal or recreational activities, but is using monitoring software surley the best to way?Common sense tells us using monitoring software is not necessarily the best way to do so, maybe there is another good way to reduce the hours employees spend on personal or recreational activities, for example , the leader can make a policy that punish employees who spend work time on personal or recreational activities.Also, using electronic monitor software may be a bad way to reduce the hours spent on personal or recreational activities instead of a best one, it is likely that the employees will feel uncomfortable about the newly-installed software, thus they cannot concentrate their mind wholy on their work , so their work will be disturbed.
In addition , the arguer predict that installing software to monitor employees' Internet use will prevent the employees from wasting time, therebdy incresing productiviy and improving overall profits, is it really so? the answer is no really,even though the employees do not spend hours on personal or reactional activities on the internet because of the monitor software, it is likely that these employees will turn to other personal or recreational activities which are not thorough Internet, such as chatting with their friends on the phone and eating snacks. And even assume that employees do not spend hours on personal activities , however, the arguer cannot conclude that the productivity will increace , as is known to all , so many factors influence the increasing of productivity, such as the working emvironment of the company and the ability of the employees, so it is hasty for the arguer to conclude that the productivity will increase. and even assume that the productivity will incrase , while the overall profit will not necessarily improving because of the same reasons, many factors influence the overall profits,and productivity plays only a minor part.
In conclusion , the arguement is not persuasive as it stands, to make it logically acceptable, the arguer has to demonstate that the national survey is scientifically conducted,and that there is not any other good way to prevent the employees from spending hours on personal activities,additionally, the arguer has to provide evidence that all the employees are highly qualified and responsible for their work, and that the company is well organised and managed.

vivianian · 发表于 2012-11-11 13:53:29

对于argument,我有一个疑惑就是，Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation. 对于这个instruction，是像我上面A94那样的提问式回答么，因为一直没有看到这样的范文；

自己的单词和局势都掌握的有限，多多提宝贵意见啊

竹林中人 · 发表于 2012-11-11 21:12:44

The speaker claims that major policy decisions shouldalways be left to politicians and other government experts, on the groundthat these people are more informed and thus have better judgment andperspective than do members of the common people. At the first glance,this opinion seems to be somewhat convincing, but further reflection on thatshows that it is so complicated an issue that needs a case-to-case study, and Itend to hold the view that politicians and other governmentexperts take the major responsibility to make decisions aboutpolicy, meanwhile, the opinions of common people toward the policy makingshould always be paid great attention to.

To begin with, it is obvious that the politiciansand the common people are on the different position when they make decisions,thus they consider the policy to be adopted from totally different angle.On one hand, as the speaker claims, the politicians and government experts aremore informed, and they are more experienced in government affairs with muchexpertise in these issues, which are the solid ground for the politicians tomake appropriate judgment on policy making, on the other hand,the members of thegeneral public are inclined to be insular and less broad perspective, when theyare considering making policies, enviably they tendto involve their own interests in the policy making in that they indeed havetheir own demands, thus it is obvious that wise and judicious decision aboutpolicy cannot be made in this way.
However, as is known to all, it is the basic rightfor the common people to take part in the policy making, so the opinions fromthe general public cannot be left alone .On the contrary, they needcloser attention and examination. Moreover, despite the obvious advantages ofpolitician over general public in policy making, it should not beneglected that man errs so long as he strives, so do politicians, even theytake pains to make good policy on the behalf of general public,mistakes and false decisions cannot be avoided, also,there may be some politicians whose intention is bad, and they tend to do badthings toward common people to gain their own interest.
Additionally, major policy making is such acomplicated issue that we should pay much attention to that. Theinfluence of majorpolicy is surely far-reaching, if they are rightly made, both the politicians and themembers of general public will be benefited, if not, the policymaking will be a waste of time and money at best, because inappropriate policywill even destroy a country.
Last, in spite if the discussion above, weshould note the politicians and common people are not mutually exclusive inpolicy making, of course they can and must coexist in that process inorder to make a good policy, thus a strong and rich nation, for example, whenthe government is going tomake a policy , they can make a draft of policy firstly, then opinions ofcommon people can be obtained through many ways such as nation-wide surveys andspecial meetings for the policy making for common people held by government.
In conclusion, it is no doubt that politicians andother government take major responsibility in making decisions about policymaking , at the same time , the common people should involve themselves inpolicy making in that their opinions deserve to be considered carefully.
这篇文章的缺陷是缺少具体的举例分析，这个比较大的话题，能有例子辅助分析就很好说明了，而不完全是自己观点的陈述了。比如政府制定土地征用的赔偿标准的时候，要考虑到市场的实际情况，也要考虑到征地对象的利益诉求。
你的观点都是不错的

竹林中人 · 发表于 2012-11-11 21:33:49

竹林中人 · 发表于 2012-11-11 21:34:56

In this argument, the arguer claims that they should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations, and that installing the software to monitor employees' Internet use will prevent employee from wasting time, thereby increasing productivity and improving overall profits. This recommendation is based on the recent national survey, which found that the majority of workers with access to the Internet at work had used company computers for personal or recreational activities, such as banking or playing cards. In addition, the arguer assumes that using electronic monitoring software is the best way to reduce the number of hours employees spend on the personal of recreational activities. However, a careful examination of this argument reveals that this argument is rife with holes.在第一段中你就开展推理了，不太好吧

First of all, the argument make the conclusion based on a national survey, but does the result of national survey apply to the company of climpson? 不要开头就是问题，先最好交代下题目有什么依据想得到什么结论，再去问存在的问题Without confirming that if it is proper to apply the a national survey to a company of climpson, the argument cannot convince us of the plausibility of the prediction. Also, we wonder that if the national survey is objectively conducted, and if it is conducted among an appropriate sample, maybe people who conducted the survey made biased result on the purpose we do not know, and there is also a possibility that the survey was conducted among a small portion of people in a small town, without more information about the survey, the prediction made by the arguer is not persuasive enough.还是之前强调过的，we wonder that if the national survey is objectively conducted, and if it is conducted among an appropriate sample, maybe people who conducted the survey made biased result on the purpose we do not know,这句话如果你能具体的说一下就很好了，比如，民众会因为什么而隐藏什么样的信息，这样你的推理就具有说服力，否则只是浮于表面，能把这几句话可以适用于所有的调查类题目，那么文章的档次一下子就到四分以下了

Secondly, the arguer assumes that using electronic monitoring software is the best way to reduce the number of hours climpson employees spend on the personal or recreational activities, but is using monitoring software surely the best to way? Common sense tells us 在反驳质疑题目的推理的时候，尽量避免用这种字眼，避免个人的经验和认知带入进来，你可以完全以假设的或者反问的语气说同样的内容而且显得你思路缜密using monitoring software is not necessarily the best way to do so, maybe there is another good way to reduce the hours employees spend on personal or recreational activities, for example , the leader can make a policy that punish employees who spend work time on personal or recreational activities. Also, using electronic monitor software may be a bad way to reduce the hours spent on personal or recreational activities instead of a best one, it is likely that the employees will feel uncomfortable about the newly-installed software, thus they cannot concentrate their mind wholly on their work, so their work will be disturbed.

In addition , the arguer predict that installing software to monitor employees' Internet use will prevent the employees from wasting time, thereby increasing productivity and improving overall profits, is it really so? The answer is no really, even though the employees do not spend hours on personal or reaction activities on the internet because of the monitor software, it is likely that these employees will turn to other personal or recreational activities which are not thorough Internet, such as chatting with their friends on the phone and eating snacks. And even assume that employees do not spend hours on personal activities, however, the arguer cannot conclude that the productivity will increase, as is known to all, so many factors influence the increasing of productivity, such as the working environment of the company and the ability of the employees, so it is hasty for the arguer to conclude that the productivity will increase. And even assume that the productivity will increase, while the overall profit will not necessarily improving because of the same reasons, many factors influence the overall profits, and productivity plays only a minor part.
我觉得，在提出了对题目依据的疑问之后，不要给出肯定的答案，而是继续推理，比如说如果问题的答案是什么，就会怎么样，反之，如果是另外那样，又会有什么结果等

In conclusion, the argument is not persuasive as it stands, to make it logically acceptable, the arguer has to demonstrate that the national survey is scientifically conducted, and that there is not any other good way to prevent the employees from spending hours on personal activities, additionally, the arguer has to provide evidence that all the employees are highly qualified and responsible for their work, and that the company is well organized and managed.

vivianian · 发表于 2012-11-11 23:37:49

哇好贴心详细的修改啊 ^^

竹林中人 · 发表于 2012-11-12 08:02:10

哇好贴心详细的修改啊 ^^

-- by 会员 vivianian (2012/11/11 23:37:49)

LZ要好好看看哦，那么多的红色和蓝色都是有问题的地方，红的我已经改了，蓝色的我还没改，没看明白

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