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[作文互改] 恶心挤出来的issue一篇,信心大挫

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发表于 2014-6-24 23:28:39 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
5 Claim: Knowing about the past cannot help people to make important decisions today.
Reason: The world today is significantly more complex than it was even in the relatively recent past.

Start time 10:00-:08-10:39

The speaker claims that Knowing about the past can not help people to make important decision today, because the world today is significantly more complex than it was even in the relatively recent past. While I only partly agree with the a more complex world view, I think it is unconvincing to conclude that we cannot learn from the past. We can see why is that by  the following paragraphs.

First,  now matter how things have become more complex or easier or what-so-ever, it is important and necessary for us to learn from the past.  To understand this point, we need to look no further than the example of the effort we have been apply to stop and prevent bullying on our children. In the past, bullying usually happened on the school yard, where the victim is physically and verbally abused by other peers. In order to educate our whole society including especially our schools to realize the issue and fix the problem, we spent fund and other resources to help the victim to stand up for himself and seek proper help from teacher and parent. And let us see what we have achieved. According to a survey published in a recent issue of Time, the percent of students that reported have been bullied on campus has dropped significantly compared to past decade, while more student are now become concern with bullying online. It is true that internet is a more recent thing than it was a decade ago for most kids, but is there nothing we can learn from the past that will help us to better deal with the new kind of bullying? The answer is no, since we will still learn from the past how the bullied suffer tremendously now matter the bullying is happening  on line or on the campus. And we also can use the same resources to target the new issue. As we can see, learning from the past is helping us to cope with the new situation.

It is no doubt that thing has changed from the past. Some issue has become more complex.  For example,  when people were mainly dealing with the high rate of heart attack in the U.S. 50 years ago, and Adventists concluded that saturated fat and red meat is bad for our hear, today Adventists and doctors are dealing with a still high attack rate plus a thirty Recent of obese population in the U.S. . But we can also learn form the past that people have been avoiding fat and read meat, but consumed more carbohydrate since that. This change of diet may contribute to resolve our current issue of more people are overweight.


In sum, world has been changing, but learning from the past will help us to better deal with it.

吐槽:写作文写到很恶
每样都写过5篇的样子了,还是乌龟爬,有时候一个小时才写完
而且超不想回看修改,因为写的过程太痛苦了艰辛太漫长了,结果还不堪入目,都不忍心看了


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沙发
 楼主| 发表于 2014-6-24 23:34:54 | 只看该作者
给各位看客增信心:看看,这还有写得更慢更短更烂的人哩!怎么办怎么办
板凳
发表于 2014-8-5 16:23:13 | 只看该作者
不要紧,还有我这种没写只看的人呢。嘿嘿。
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