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maomao的作文处女秀!有史以来第一篇自己练习的托福文章(求各位大神教导,拍砖,更改)

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发表于 2012-8-1 22:42:07 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
因为第一次自己正式意义的练,感觉写起来还是有点吃力。。。。希望大神给予指导。。。谢谢!!!(总共400字)自己感觉结尾写的不好,同时段内内容不是太逻辑,还有些空洞!希望大神能给予指导!!!谢谢!!!
1. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.

Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.




         As far as I am concerned, not only are classes and libraries essential to us, but sports and social activities also play an important role during our daily life. One of the great people once remarked: All work and no play make Jack a dull boy. So bringing study in the university into harmony with outdoor activities is vital to us, and it is also necessary for us to balance the expenditure on both sides.

First of all, it is better for someone who takes good advantage of knowledge to strengthen his body every day because usually doing proper sports outdoor enables people to be vigorous. Only under such circumstance can we pay full attention on our study. Moreover, learning is not quite simple but complicated. When we face arduous problems in our assignments or heavy burdens in our university life, patience is really significant for us. Because sports are the natural way to train us to be more patient, we can learn better with the aid of sports.

In addition, besides intelligent quotient, high emotional quotient is another necessary element of success. We must learn how to communicate with others, how to cooperate with others, and how to share with others. So we need to participate in social activities to fulfill the above perspectives. For example, though Obama, the American president is good at study because he was a graduate of the Harvard University, he might be not as prosperous as himself today without taking active part in the social activities, such as being a community organizer.

Admittedly, sports and social activities are worthy of our money because there is no such thing as a free lunch. For instance, sport parks appealing to many people possess good ambience of athletics, but they are not free. If we want to reach the best effect, we must pay admission without hesitation.

All in all, both recreation and study are weighty for us. It is recreation that helps us own sturdy body and use skills about how to get along well with others. Meanwhile, study encourages us to make progress. They are also in close connection with each other. Strong body is able to support us to study more efficiently and we can also learn many things from our friends, such as study methods, to assist ourselves in making improvement. In addition, expending apt money on recreation and study is really imperative.


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 楼主| 发表于 2012-8-1 23:34:22 | 只看该作者
由于本人愚笨!!这里互相批改的规则没有看懂。。。望大家见谅!!!!不好意思!!!!
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