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强烈求拍作文啊,10天后考试,恳请各位给点建议啊,觉得自己水平还很欠缺。。

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发表于 2012-7-18 23:33:37 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
可能里面有些关于三单的低级错误,就先不管它,各位能从语言和内容上给点建议和修改,就非常好了!!!谢谢你们

名人是否更需要隐私
do you agree or disagree with the following statement: nowadays, it is much easier to achieve success with help from one's family than what is like before.
When you enjoy reading the anecdotes about oneof your favorite celebrity, have you ever thought that you violate his/herprivacy? Indeed, we are seldom aware of the importance of celebrities' privacy and quite anumber of people believe that those superstars have no alternative but have tobe examined by media scrutiny because of their different identity, which is alsomy point. There are many prerequisites that decide the fact that the everymovements of celebrity should be exposed to the public.


他们的身份的导致了他们的隐私和常人的隐私不同,他们受观众支持,所以他们有义务贡献他们的隐私
Beyond the doubt comes the first point ofpinnacle that it is the identity of being a famous person, they were naturallydeprived of right to keep their privacy. Because their popularity was upheld bythe public, no doubt the public enjoy the right to scrutinize them. In otherwords, being a famous person means that their privacy is no longerconfidential, instead of that, they have obligation to give back to the societyas a reward to the long-term support of the fans. For example, a famoussuperstar can share detail of his world-tour concert, which both satisfy thecuriosity of masses and raise his reputation.

娱乐界本身feed on gossips  名人的隐私 helpsthrive the entertainment industry and enrich the people’s spiritual world

Furthermore, in view of the fact that entertainmentindustry was virtually thrived on myriads of gossips, it makes the privacy of acelebrity become a source of concrete entertainment that serve to enrich thepeople’s spiritual world. In modern society, the more piquant the gossips are, themore prosperous the entertainment industry becomes. While people gain pleasurethrough reading magazine and anecdotes, they find a way to release their pressure.in short, For the purpose of enriching people’s life, the superstars shouldn’tdeserve


监督名人,以防他们给社会带来不良影响
Apart from that, when a celebrity plays arole of public figure, any scrutiny about his personal life should continue inorder to make sure that they didn’t abuse their reputation. After all. Seriousmistakes can be easily made as a result of being overwhelmed by fame andfortune. For example, famous singer Whitney Hustonwas accused of unlawful possession of drug after being famous, Canadianathletes Benjamin Sinclair Johnson also has drug abuse in sportscompetition. Apt illustrations indicate that it is justifiable to inspect thelive of famous people to ensures that their misdeeds will not bring negativeeffects on the whole society.



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发表于 2012-7-20 16:50:13 | 只看该作者
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