ISSUE作文，大家帮看看有逻辑没？

庄小然 · 发表于 2012-1-30 09:35:00

题目：Some people believe that college students should consider only their own talents and interests when choosing a filed of study .others believe that college students should base their choice of a filed of a study on the availability of jobs in that field.

（这是我第一次写issue，一点头绪都没有，感觉很糟糕。大家多给些意见~正在努力看官方范文，希望会有帮助~谢谢大家啦 ~）

The statement claims that some one think that college students ought to select a filed of study be based on their own talent and interests. On the other hand others consider that college students should think the availability of jobs in their study field. Is that enough for college students when choosing their study field only considering interests and their own talents or the availability of jobs? I consider this problem in two aspects. One is the study field the college students choose must be fit with students’ own character. Another is that the field has job future that students could live with it.

1 talents and interest is one aspect, fit with their own character. Such as office work, outdoor work, different field need different personality. The trait will influence students in their career. Introvert will fell comfortable if they are engaged in some fields where do not need much their social ability. On the other hand, extrovert will show their great communicative competence when they are working in the outdoor jobs.

2 however, the college students need take living into account. One country will not survive without development of economic, a family will not happy without economic, also, one person will not live without economic. Consider that, college students should think twice before they choose their study filed. So, the availability of jobs is one important factor. But future is unconcern, so no one knows the correct trend of our society’s need.

In sum…(结尾懒得写了。。）

普渡哥 · 发表于 2012-1-30 11:12:56

我也没看明白。。。这是GRE作文吗？
你的观点跟题目的观点完全一样。。。。

庄小然 · 发表于 2012-1-30 13:14:11

我也不知道写的什么东西啊。。完全乱套了。。

竹林中人 · 发表于 2012-1-30 13:46:58

建议你看看OG上的范文，还有之前的北美范文

庄小然 · 发表于 2012-1-30 20:31:56

好吧。。谢谢

lukebrehm · 发表于 2012-1-30 23:07:27

1. that some one (people) think that college students ought to select a filed (field) of study be based on their own talent(s) and interests.
2. should think (consider) the availability of jobs in their >field of< study field (omit FIELD).
3. could live with it (omit IT).
4. Talents and interests are one aspect, fit with their own character, for example indoor or outdoor work because different fields require different personalities. -NOT- talents and interest is one aspect, fit with their own character. Such as office work, outdoor work, different field need different personality.

5. I really think the most important thing for you is to keep on learning what your learning, keep on posting but more than that is to read good books written by good writers (and I don't mean english books written by chinese people). This is by far the fastest way to get a good grasp of the flow that you need to have to write well.

good luck

竹林中人 · 发表于 2012-2-1 17:09:52

好吧。。谢谢

-- by 会员庄小然 (2012/1/30 20:31:56)

建议你这么开始一片作文，首先你得明确自己的观点立场态度，可能会出现比较模糊都可以的情况，你就要选择自己更容易写的，减少自己的思维量，然后再布置结构，就是你从哪些方面论证自己的观点。大家更多地都是以三段论的形式写

庄小然 · 发表于 2012-2-25 16:41:25

thank you~ 这篇是我第一篇issue吧。现在写了好多了，感觉比之前好了，但是现在又bug了。遇到瓶颈啦。怎样能再提高呢？自我感觉现在issue就是3 或者2.5的水平。。

竹林中人 · 发表于 2012-2-25 17:07:31

thank you~ 这篇是我第一篇issue吧。现在写了好多了，感觉比之前好了，但是现在又bug了。遇到瓶颈啦。怎样能再提高呢？自我感觉现在issue就是3 或者2.5的水平。。

-- by 会员庄小然 (2012/2/25 16:41:25)

语言关，表达方式的多变和词汇的变化，这很增分的。内容关，能不能在一个比较全面的或者比较高的角度去看待每一个题目中的观点，不要太局限于题目。我觉得瓶颈或许在这里，当我们知道怎么写了，而且能够按照模板很好写出来之后，我们要追求的就是属于自己的与众不同的东西

庄小然 · 发表于 2012-2-26 19:20:10

恩恩。明白啦！thank you very much !

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