[AWA模板] 关于作文的一奌心得及模板 (6.0)

回顾了一下自己的作文复习历程，希望能对正在准备作文的朋友有奌借鉴作用。

所用材料
黄金80篇范文，800分作文，作文区小安整理的经典模版，JJ，还有官方题集。

我的作文复习过程

• 看了一遍800分作文（不包括范文），这是我首推的复习资料。
• 看了十几篇黄金80篇的范文
• 写了两篇半AI（第一篇写不出来），3篇半AA（有一次模考写了半篇，没写完）。
• 综合高分模板，稍微改了改，形成自己的模板。
• 将当月JJ的AI高频题要么是看了范文，要么是写了提纲。
• 将当月JJ的AA高频題看了题干。
• 临考前将模板背熟。（我将打印下来的模板带到了考场，在开始考试之前温习了10分钟）
• 实战时两篇文章大概都将近300字, 27分钟写完，剩下时间做补充和修改

我的经验和体会

• 早奌动手练习，最后冲刺背模板。
• 模板一定要准备，头尾要能背熟。将已有的高分模板略做修改即可。我不认为用常见模板会对分数有影响。一些用了常见模板但分数不高的朋友可能是模板以外的内容写得不太好。
• 用当月的JJ题多写几篇文章。多写多练习的重要性已经被牛人们强调过很多次，诚不我欺。
• 当月的高频题（三次或三次以上）AA一定要认识，AI要准备一下提纲。如果可能，建议把所有的AA题都看一遍。（我连当月JJ的作文题都没全看，只看了高频题）
• 另外我觉得打字要熟练. 有机会从现在开始练，每天半个小时，抄一遍黄金80篇的范文，有一个星期应该就有明显进步，如果在打字方面耽误时间会很可惜。（我打字大概是70字/分）
• 字数不需太多，我实战顶多写了300字。（我很景仰那些能写500字以上的朋友，300字基本达到了自己的极限……）
• [强烈推荐]GMAT作文复习指引 by anchoret

我的模板

AI

9/16/2006 12:00 AM (写不出来的第一篇)

36. “Businesses and other organizations have overemphasized the importance of working as a team. Clearly, in any human group, it is the strong individual, the person with the most commitment and energy, who gets things done.”

Working as a team has been continually emphasized by businesses and other organizations. Someone argued that it is overemphasized because strong

Agree that strong individuals can contribute more to the team especially when the work requires more creative effort. Give an example of Perelman who won the Fields Prize this year.

Yet in majorities of business and other organizations …

Argue that a team may contains people who are roughly equal in commitment and energy

Further Argue the importance when a team contains multiple strong individuals.

In sum

9/19/2006 1:55 PM

29. “Too many people think only about getting results. The key to success, however, is to focus on the specific task at hand and not to worry about results.”

What do you think this piece of advice means, and do you think that it is, on the whole, worth following? Support your views with reasons and/or examples drawn from your own experience, observations, or reading.

On which should people focus in order to achieve success, the specific task at hand or the results? Some people believe that accomplishing a detail task is more important to success, while others argue that the result is the ultimate goal and therefore has higher priority. I agree that focusing on the specific tasks is important. Nevertheless, keeping track of results at a high level and adjusting plan accordingly is more critical to success.

Firstly, adhering to results can provide a high level and clear direction. When people are concentrated on certain detail tasks, they are likely to get lost in the detail activities and forget the final goal. Finishing the specific tasks right does not necessarily lead to success if the tasks are not well planned or when the tasks contribute little to the goal. Fannie Mae, the biggest company in the secondary mortgage company, asked PricewaterhouseCoopers (PWC) in 2001 to rebuild its internal core business system for greater processing capability and flexibility. Each member of the project team was assigned certain tasks and finished them on time. However, the team failed to deliver the system partly because the tasks, when created, did not align up the original goal, and partly because of the extreme difficulty to assemble all the tasks together as a whole.

Secondly, reviewing the results of detail tasks with the ultimate goal ensures that people are staying on the right track toward success, and alarms people to take appropriate actions and mitigate risks at an earlier stage that would otherwise be more costly and/or problematic at a later time. When IBM consulting group developed the flood map information system for Federal Emergency Management Agency after hurricane Katrina, it encountered continuous changes in terms of schedule, resources, and requirements. Without adjusting detail tasks according to the final goal and addressing various issues dynamically, the success of the project would be unimaginable.

Many may argue that success is nowhere if detail tasks can not be completed. I agree that success is not a building-in-the-air; instead, it is built from the many detailed tasks.  However, it is the desired result that instructs how the pieces should be built and brings the small pieces together.

In sum, focusing on the right results is the most critical factor to success because it ensures that details activities are toward the right direction, and potential issues can be addressed promptly.

31. “Financial gain should be the most important factor in choosing a career.”

Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the opinion stated above. Support your views with reasons and/or examples from your own experience, observations, or reading.

What is the most important factor that people should take into consideration when choosing a career? Some might favor that financial gain is the most important one. I agree to some extent that it is not un-important, but I believe a balanced consideration of other cared prospects play a bigger role than financial gain does.

Besides financial gain, there are a lot of other important factors that affect one’s decision in selecting a career. Just namely a few, commute, company’s culture, and self-interest may take higher priority. A new dad or mom is understandable more preferring a job that is within a few miles away from home than a job that requires travel all the time, even with a more competitive salary and bonus. People who work as volunteers for non-profit organizations surely make their decision not based on money since they work for free. Many other people also subordinate economic prospects to their desire to live in a comfortable location.

Moreover, a position that has the highest salary now doesn’t necessarily serve the best interest even from long term financial perspective. According to a recent research, a great percentage of those talented people who joined Merrill Lynch or PricewaterhouseCoopers when they graduated from business schools actually held offers with better compensation from other small companies. They believed that the working experience in the well-known companies will better position them in future career opportunities and pay off in a long run.

In sum, people should choose a career that meets their expectations best and therefore is the most attractive to them, while their expectations contain far more complicate perspectives than financial gain alone.

AA

9/13/2006 10:40PM

AA5:

The announcement of The Mercury suggests reducing the newspaper’s price in response to that the newspaper’s circulation has declined by 10,000 since a competing lower-priced newspaper, The Bugle, was started five years ago. It also predicts that the increased circulation will attract more businesses to buy advertising space in the paper. The announcement is not convincing because of the following flaws.

Firstly, the announcement fails to demonstrate compelling evidence to support the causal connection between the competing newspaper and the declination. It simply attributes the lower-priced competing newspaper to the declining of The Mercury without ruling out other possible factors that may have played more important roles. Therefore, the lacking of such evidence makes the recommended action groundless.

Secondly, the announcement does not conduct enough analysis about the outcome of reducing price. Even if the declining of circulation is related to the competing lower-priced newspaper, price is not necessarily the main reason. Other reasons, namely content and print quality, may affect reader’s preference more than price does. Therefore, reducing price is very unlikely to produce the expected outcome.

Lastly, the announcement casually assumes that the increased circulation will attract more business to buy advertising space in the paper. However, this assumption fails to realize the trend of business advertising, and faulty implies that business determines where to buy advertising space depending on the number of circulation.

In sum, the announcement has three major flaws in the recommendations. It would be very helpful in evaluating the recommendations if it is presented with more thorough analysis about the relationship between the competing newspaper and the declining of circulations, the power of price in determining reader’s preference, and the likeliness of businesses’ buying advertising on a newspaper with greater circulations.

9/20/06 10:28AM

124. The following appeared in a memorandum from the owner of Carlo’s Clothing to the staff.

“Since Disc Depot, the music store on the next block, began a new radio advertising campaign last year, its business has grown dramatically, as evidenced by the large increase in foot traffic into the store. While the Disc Depot’s owners have apparently become wealthy enough to retire, profits at Carlo’s Clothing have remained stagnant for the past three years. In order to boost our sales and profits, we should therefore switch from newspaper advertising to frequent radio advertisements like those for Disc Depot.”

The owner of Carlo’s Clothing suggests switching its advertisement strategy from newspaper advertising to radio advertisements, and the basis for his suggestion is that the music store Disc Depot on the next block, since its new radio advertising campaign started last year, has had a large increase in number of people who visited the music store. At first glance, the suggestion appears to somewhat convincing, but a thorough review of his basis reveals that the argument has several critical flaws.

First, the argument commits a fallacy of causal oversimplification. The fact that an increase of foot traffic into the store occurred after the store’s new advertising strategy does not necessarily prove that the increase is caused by the new advertising campaign. For example, the store expanded its category that now includes more types of music that were never sold in the store before. Therefore, the causal relationship between the two events is groundless unless other possible explanations have been considered and ruled out.

Second, the owner takes for granted that increased number of visitors to a store always leads to an increase of the store’s business.

Third, the argument rests on the assumption that a certain advertising strategy has the same level of effect to the business of a clothing store than to the business of a music store.

In conclusion, the reasoning does not constitute a logical argument in favor of the recommendation. To strengthen the argument and ensure that the switch of advertising strategy can produce the desired business growth, the author would have to provide evidences to prove that … (the music store does gain business growth through the newly introduced radio advertisement campaign and that radio advertisement is likely to produce the same level of benefit to clothing stores as to music stores.)

(To better assess the argument, we need additional detailed information about...so that we can establish the conclusion whether....)

9/21/06 11:46AM

10. The following appeared in the editorial section of a local newspaper.

“This past winter, 200 students from Waymarsh State College traveled to the state capitol building to protest against proposed cuts in funding for various state college programs. The other 12,000 Waymarsh students evidently weren’t so concerned about their education: they either stayed on campus or left for winter break. Since the group who did not protest is far more numerous, it is more representative of the state’s college students than are the protesters. Therefore the state legislature need not heed the appeals of the protesting students.”

In this argument, the author concludes that the state legislature does not need to heed the appeals of the protesting students who traveled last winter to the state capitol building to protest against proposed cuts. The arguer cites as evidence that the number of protesting students is far less than the total number of students. At the first glance, the argument appears to be somewhat appealing. However, a through examination reveals that instead, the argument is unconvincing for several critical flaws as discussed below.

The arguer commits a fallacious assumption that students who did not protest are either not interested in or against the proposed funding cut for college education.

In the first place, the author failed to demonstrate whether all students were aware of the proposed cuts. If only a small number of students knew the proposal, the 200 students may have already represented a great portion of them.

In addition, since the protest occurred during winter season, many students could have already planned for the winter holiday, and they may have just been unable to attend the protest even if they want to.

Finally, protesting is not the only way to object a proposal, other students who did not join the protesting may have taken other actions, such as seeking support from federal government or collecting signatures from students who didn’t join the protesting but opposed the proposal.

In summary, the argument is not well reasoned and therefore misleading. To better strengthen this argument, the arguer would have to present more concrete information about the opinions of the students who did not protest and reevaluate the percentage of objection. In addition, the arguer should provide more convincing evidence that the possible consequence is acceptable by the government and the public if the state legislature doesn’t respond the appeals.

300字，知道什么是字字珠玑了

正在担心字数呢，谢谢队长的分享！

厚厚，晚上也写一篇看看。

恭喜LZ先，另外请问，“所用材料黄金80篇范文”究竟是指什么呢？是在224范文中找出来的吗？谢谢。