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发表于 2004-3-22 07:40:00 | 只看该作者

我的作文,模版丢了,看作文吧~

我的模版被我删了,用模版写的作文还在,大家将就着看吧~~~



我第一次考试的时候TWE那了4分,后来用了MR红的模版,自己又改了一点,然后的了~5.5~~哈哈哈~~开心~~~


以前写的经验:


这个是我的老大难~~考了第2次就是为了这个,第一次拿了4分,第2次拿了5.5分。总分减了3分。我觉得最重要的是联系,考试只前练30篇最近考过的就足够了。但是练不是拿了作文就写,那样没什么帮助。写好前几篇要找人帮助改,听听别人的意见,然后看看适合不适合,如果适合就记住~下次写一定要注意。还有就是模板,我推荐REDPASSION的模板,但是不能全抄~改点自己的东西,让自己写着舒服。。。最后就是错字的问题,我自我感觉我的第一次考试就死在这里了,练习作文的时候千万不能用WORD。。要用写字板,可以看自己写的错字,还有简单的语法错误有多少~~练到最后保持只错3个左右就差不多了,考试的时候打字不快的GGJJ们,要多练习。一定要用DESKTOP,LAPTOP的键盘和考试的时候的键盘根本不一样~~第一次我也犯了这个毛病。总之写作就是STRUCTURE, REASON, EXAMPLE 和GRAMMAR都没什么问题了,你就READY TO GO了~~最后可以到WAYABOARD去给自己评个分,看看能得多少~`呵呵~~



最后的TIPS~~考试的时候,你休息回来以后纸什么的就给你放桌子上了,你回来以后先别开始或者耗在TUTORIAL的地方,就开始写你的模板和14条万能理由。然后写好了。开始做阅读,防止一会忘记了~然后等作文开始了,做好心理准备再按开始,然后上来先想好2理由,然后开始打模板~~把结构弄出来,快的7分钟也就完了,然后开始填理由段~随便给他扯就行~~理由新颖一点比较好~~


最后说一点TWE不能说明一个人的写作水平,他太机械了,是个体力活,多练就成~~呵呵


下面是我的作文。就贴我写的第一篇吧~~模版痕迹还比较重~~呵呵






#29 some people believe that the Earth is being harmed (damaged) by human activity. Others feel that human activity makes the Earth a better place to live. What is you opinion? use specific reason and examples to support your answer.



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When it comes to the issue whether the Earth is being harmed by human, different people hold different point of views due to their past experiences. If I were faced with this issue, I would probably say that human activities have harmed the earth. In the following discussion, I would like to present few of the important reasons to support my viewpoint.







The most important reason is that human has polluted the Earth since the industrial revolution. For example, we produce millions of cars each year in the past century just to grant the demand for consumers. Every family in North America has at least one car and some of big families even have four or five cars. The carbon dioxide produced by all these cars every year is one of the main sources of air pollution. In some big cities, the colour of the sky has turned from blue to gray. Oil leakages from the ships during transportation pollute the ocean and kill animals living in it. Factories release untreated toxic water into the environment, which kill wildlife. Don't you think the examples quoted above are very persuasive?







Over exploring resources on the Earth harms the Earth is another head and chief reason that I have chosen to put here. As we all know that many resources provided by the earth such as coal, oil, and other mines are finite. If we use them wisely, it can support human for an unlimited period of time. But according to a recent report, we can only use them for another 50 years with the current rate of exploring. We are taking them out of the underground way faster than we should. We are damaging the Earth by attacking its natural resources. If you can understand this, you can understand my viewpoint more deeply.







Admittedly, some human activities have tried to make the earth a better place. For example, we have planted trees in the city to help carbon dioxide absorption; we have created programs to save endangered animals. Nevertheless, we take more from the Earth than we give to the Earth and make our environment horrible, so the most striking conclusion is obvious.







To sum up, given all the reasons discussed above, we can safely reach the conclusion that human activities have harmed the Earth. If we just ignore the reality, I think you can predict what is going to happen to human race in return. In order to change the current situation, the government should establish laws with tougher sentence to protect the environment。



    



#125 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? All students should be required to study art and music in secondary school, Use specific reasons to support you answer.







When it comes to the issue whether all students should be required to study art and music in secondary school, different people hold different views. If I were faced with this issue, I would probably say this is not required. In the following discussion, I would like to provide few of the important reasons to support my viewpoint.







The most important reason is that art and music is not useful in our daily life. We speak English everyday, we calculate tips everyday, but do we sing and draw everyday. I think most people will say no. When we go out for grocery shopping; when we watch TV at home; when we chat with our friends, do we need music or art? I think the answer is definitely no. If we will never use it after we take the course, why bother? It is just a waste of time. If you can understand this, you can understand my viewpoint more deeply.







Another head and chief reason that I have chosen to put here is that taking music or art course in secondary school does not help you with university admission. Let's get real. Getting into the desired program in the university you want to go is the most important issue in your secondary school career. If you are going into fine art or music, luckily, these marks count. What about the rest of us that is going into English literature, Engineering, Life Science? We waste the whole semester for nothing. The mark means nothing and the universities do not even look at it. Therefore, it is not necessary to require all students to take it. Don't you think this example is very persuasive?







Admittedly, there are some advantages of taking an art or music course as well, such as you can meet some new people and explore a new field. Nevertheless the disadvantages of it carries more weight than advantages of it, thus, the most attractive conclusion is obvious.







To sum up, given all the reasons discussed above, we can safely reach the conclusion that it should not be required for all students to study art and music in secondary school. But I think it is necessary for everyone to study English literature and math since they are so useful and are required for admissions in universities.



        



112 some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age and should spend most their time on school studies. Others believe that young children should spend most of their time playing. Compare these two views. Which view do you agree with? Why?







When it comes to the issue whether children should begin their formal education at a very early age, different people hold different viewpoints. If I were faced with this issue, I would probably say that young children should spend more time playing. In the following discussion, I would like to present few of the most important reasons to support my idea.







The most important reason is that playing is fun. When we are young, we don not need to worry about anything at all. All we know at the time is play. Why? Simply because it is fun. Playing is something that a child will enjoy doing. This can let them know that life is interesting. In addition, we get the rest of our lives to study, why hurry for these couple of years?     If you can understand this, you can understand my point more deeply.







Children can learn during playing as well is another head and chief reason that I have chosen to put here. Nowadays, companies develop all kinds of games for young children, such as 3D tic-tac-toe, Playdough, Lego and so on. You can learn a lot while you play them. For example, when young children play three-dimension tic-tac-toe, they establish the idea of the three-dimension in their mind. They not only think things on one plane, but also on numerous planes in all directions. This could be very helpful with future education in math, and the child may be interested in a study in math later on. Don't you think the above example is very persuasive?







Admittedly, there is an advantage for children who start learning early, which is getting ahead start. Nevertheless, the advantages of playing during early childhood carries more weight than the advantages of studying, so the most attractive conclusion is obvious.







To sum up, given all the reasons discussed above, we can safely reach the conclusion that playing is a better choice for young children. I think young children should play with their friends and play some meaningful games such as the ones mentioned above.


    



182 many people have a close relationship with their pets. These people treat their birds, cats or other animals as member of their family. In you opinion are such relationship good? Why or why not? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.







When it comes to the issue of having a close relationship with a pet, different people hold different views. If I were faced with this question, I would probably say that a close relationship with a pet is not good. In the following discussion, I would like to provide few of the important reasons to support my opinion.







The most important reason we cannot neglect is that pets carry diseases. If we have a very close relationship with them, it is very likely for us to get the disease as well. For example, my friend had a dog that got mad dog disease before. He loves the dog so much, and the dog even got on his bed sometimes. There is a big chance of getting the disease for him. Eventually, he gave up on his dog after listening to the doctor's advice. So it is dangerous to have such a lose relationship with pets. If you can understand this, you can understand my point more deeply.







Another head and chief reason that I have chosen to put here is that having a close relationship with a pet can lead to lack of communication with your family members. If you like your pet so much, you will do a lot of things such as feeding, take them for a walk everyday and so on. Since these things are very time consuming, you may not have enough time to chat with your family, go out for dinner together, or even go on a short vacation with them. Don't you think the above example is very persuasive?







Admittedly, there are advantages for having a close relationship with a pet such as you will never be alone, and they will be loyal to you all the time. Nevertheless, the disadvantages carries more weight than the advantages of it, so the most attractive conclusion is obvious.







To sum up, given all the reasons discussed above, we can safely reach the conclusion that having a close relationship with a pet is not good. I think that people should have a close relationship with their family members or friends instead.



    



When it comes to the issue of having a close with a pet, different people hold different views. If I were faced with this question, I would probably say that a close relationship with a pet is not good. In the following discussion, I would like to provide a few important reasons to support my opinion.







The most important reason we cannot neglect is that pets carry diseases. If we have a very close relationship with them, it is very likely for us to get the disease as well. For example, my friend had a dog that got mad dog disease. He loved the dog so much, and the dog even got on his bed sometimes. There was a big chance of him getting the disease. Eventually, he gave up on his dog after listening to the doctor's advice. Hence, it is dangerous to have such a close relationship with pets. If you can understand this, you can understand my point better.







Another very important reason that I have chosen to put here is that having a close relationship with a pet can lead to a lack of communication with your family members. If you like your pet so much, you will do a lot of things such as feeding, taking them for a walk everyday, and so on. Since these tasks are very time consuming, you may not have enough time to chat with your family, go out to dinner together, or even go on a vacation trip with them. Don't you think the above example is very persuasive?







However, there are advantages of having a close relationship with a pet such as you will never be alone, and they will be loyal to you all the time. Nevertheless, its disadvantages carry more weight than the advantages of it. Therefore, the most striking conclusion is obvious.







To sum up, given all the reasons discussed above, we can safely reach the conclusion that having a close relationship with a pet is not good. I think that people should have a close relationship with their family members or friends instead.    


    



119 do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People behave differently when they wear different clothes. Do you agree that different clothes influence the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your opinion.







When it comes to the issue whether different clothes influence the way people behave, different people hold different views. If I were faced with this question, I would probably say clothes do influence people's behaviour. In the following discussion, I would like to present few of the important reasons to support my opinion.







The most important reason that we cannot neglect is that we wear certain type of clothes for certain events. For example, we wear black suits when we are attending an interview; we wear jeans when we are in a club; we wear T-shirt when we are playing basketball in the gym. We definitely behave different. How can you run around the room like you do in a basketball court, when you are really in a middle of an important job interview. You should be sitting on a chair and answering questions. I am usually a tomboy during normal school days. I wear athletic jersey and baggy pants. In my high school convocation last year, I was wearing a dress. I could not run around like I usually do, because the dress warned me that I was in middle of a formal ceremony. Hence I sat down on a chair and chatted with the girl next to me quietly. Don't you think the above example is very persuasive?







Another head and chief reason that I have chosen to put here is that the clothes you are wearing identify who you are. When you are wearing a wedding gown, you are a bride; when you are wearing a short skirt and a tank top, you are a cheerleader. It is like you are putting a tag on your head that tells others who you really are. When you are in position of someone, you have to behave like it. If you can understand this, you can understand my view better.







Admittedly, there are some circumstances that clothes may not affect your behaviour, such as when you are washing dishes at home. At this moment, what you are wearing does not matter that much. Nevertheless, in most cases, clothes influence the way people behave, therefore the most striking conclusion is obvious.


    


To sum up, given all the reason discusses above, we can safely reach the conclusion that clothes people wear do influence the way they behave. I think whenever you go out, you should wear proper clothes that match the place you are going, because they affect your behaviour.    



#155 Plants can provide food, shelter, clothing or medicine. What is one kind of plant that is important to you or the people in your country? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.







When it comes to the issue of an important plant to the people in my country, different people hold different views. If I were faced with this question, I would probably say tree is the important plant. In the following discussion, I would like to provide a few important reasons to support my viewpoint.







The most important reason that we cannot neglect is that trees are economically valuable. Trees can be used for making furniture such as bed, desk and chair; trees can be used for paper production; trees can also be used for producing learning tools such as pencil. All these products are essential to our life. We not only need them as part of our daily life, but also people can get money if we export them. As businessmen, just exporting timber to US alone every year could earn them a good amount of money. Don't you think the above example is very persuasive?







Anther head and chief reason that I have chosen to put here is that tree can improve our environment. During daytime, trees take carbon dioxide from the air and change them into oxygen through a series of chemical reactions. When we go the park where you can see a lot of trees, you generally feel the air is a lot fresher. This is because trees clean that up for us. They can make the air we are breathing in much clearer which is good for human health. If you can understand this, you can understand my viewpoint better.







Admittedly, there are many other plants that are very important to people in my country as well. For example, flowers can make our cities look more beautiful; people can eat onions. Nevertheless, advantages of trees carry more weight than that of other plants. Hence, the most striking conclusion is obvious.







To sum up, given all the reasons discussed above, we can safely reach the conclusion that trees is a very important plant to the people in my country. I think we should plant more trees than any other plant in my country, because it is so beneficial in many ways.    



156 You have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks. Which country would you like to visit? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.







I like to travel around the world. If I get the opportunity, I would like to visit every single country. But in the case where I can only choose to visit one foreign country for two weeks, I would definitely choose China. In the following discussion I would like to present a few important reasons to support my choice.







The most important reason is that China has almost five thousand years history. I am always interested in old buildings and palaces, which were built in ancient time. These architects tell us about the past and the culture of a country. I would like to visit Summer Palace in Beijing, the Great Wall in Shenyang, the ancient village in Zhouzhuang. They can bring me back to five thousand years ago and let me experience the Chinese culture. Don't you think the history of a country is very attractive?







Another head and chief reason why I would like to go to China is because it is a great place for shopping. Not only you can choose among hundreds of malls, but also you can get everything you want with a cheap price. In Toronto, you probably have to spend over 500 dollars for a suit. When you come to China, you can get the same suit with only half of the price. It is like a big fifty percent sale everyday.     You will be leaving the mall with lots of good stuff and not paying as much. Don't you think this is fantastic?







The last reason I would like to present is that you can eat yummy Chinese food there. In China, different provinces have it own way of cooking, which makes the food more diverse. You can eat the hot Sichuan food; you can taste the mild Dongbei food. These are the kinds of food that you will never get from any other part of the world. Think about those mouth-watering foods, you will choose to visit China just for this reason.







Admittedly, other countries may be very attractive as well. Nevertheless, you will definitely experience more if you choose to visit China. Therefore, the most striking conclusion is obvious.







To sum up, given all the reasons discussed above, we can safely reach the conclusion that China is where I want to visit for these two weeks. If you have never been to China before, plan to visit for the next family vacation trip. You will get more than you expected for sure.    



156 You have the opportunity to visit a foreign country for two weeks. Which country would you like to visit? Use specific reasons and details to explain your choice.


    


When it comes to the issue of choosing a foreign country for a visit, different people hold different views. Some may say they want to go to China; some may choose to go to Japan. If I were faced with this question, I would probably choose to go to US. In the following discussion, I would like to present a few important reasons to support my viewpoint.







The most important reason that I cannot neglect is that US is a great place for shopping. I have heard a lot about fashion designers such as Don Karen, Christine Dior, Coco Chanel and so on. These famous designers choose to have their biggest stores in cities such as New York and LA. If I can go there for a visit, I can buy clothes that I have always wanted. Isn't this fantastic? This is not all. Not only you can get these US brand name products, but also brand name clothes all around the world. I just know that I cannot anything close to this anywhere else. If you can understand this, you can understand my choice better.







Another head and chief reason that I have chosen to put there is that I want to see higher-level education in US. Back in my country, my teacher told me a lot about universities and colleges in the US. Professors teach students theories about a certain subject, and then let them have some hands-on experiences in the lab. I think this is a really great idea, since a lot of people are having trouble to apply theoretical knowledge into practical uses. I would like to visit universities such as MIT and Yale to see how teachers give lectures and how students work in the labs. Don't you think this is very attractive?







Of course, there are interesting things that I would like to see in other countries as well. For example, I want to go to Cuba to enjoy the beach; I want to go to Canada to experience the multicultural feeling. I want to travel around the world. Nevertheless, US is more attractive than anywhere else in my opinion. Therefore, the most striking conclusion is obvious.







To sum up, given all the reasons discussed above, we can safely reach the conclusion that going to US for my 2 weeks visit is the best choice. If you can come with me, we can shop around in New York and visit MIT in Boston together. Don't you think this will be a great experience?


    



When it comes to the issue what we should read, different people hold different views due to their perspective angles. Some may say we should only read books about real events and people; while others may agree that we should read a variety of books. If I were faced with this question, I would probably say I strongly disagree with the opinion that we should only read about real events. In the following discussion, I would like to present a few important reasons to support my opinion.







The most important reason that we cannot neglect is that real events are always very cruel. If you read lots of science fictions, you will dream about going on a space mission ten years later; If you read lots of fairy tales, you will dream about marrying with a prince ten years later; If you just read about real events, you will dream about going on a war in Iraq for their oil ten years later. Real event are very cruel all the time, it is very harsh for everyone to live with it. If we only get information about corruption in this world, it is hard for us to enjoy our short life. If you can understand this, you can understand my viewpoint better.







Another head and chief reason that I have chosen to put here is that real events are not real all the time. If you have watched a lot of reality shows, you would know. As the producer say that reality shows are suppose to be real. But are they real indeed? If you have heard about Joe Millionaire, you would know what a big joke that is. The man is a millionaire in the show, but the producer tells us that he is really a construction worker with a low wage. But who is he? He is an underwear Model. I believe that we not call this reality show "real". Don't you think this example is very persuasive?







Admittedly, there are advantages for people who are only exposed to real events, such as knowing what are going on in the real world. Nevertheless the disadvantages of it carry more weight than the advantages of it. Therefore, the most striking conclusion is obvious.







To sum up, given all the reasons discussed above, we can safely reach the conclusion that only read about real people, real events and established facts are not good. I think that people should read some fantasy novels as well to brighten their world.    



110. Some people prefer to spend most of their time alone. Others like to be with friends most of the time. Do you prefer to spend your time alone or with friends?







When it comes to the issue whether we should spend most of our time alone or with our friends, different people hold different views. If I were faced with this question, I would probably say I like to spend most of my time with my friends. In the following discussion, I would like to present a few important reasons to support my opinion.







The most important reason that we cannot neglect is that you can share your thoughts with your friends. Everyone gets emotional from time to time. When I am happy because of the new dress I bought, I would like to tell my friends. They will feel exited too. When I am very upset about my recent grade, I would like to tell them as well. They will comfort me and help me to get a better grade. When my friends get something in their minds, they will call me. We always share thoughts and encourage each other on our way to success. If you can understand this, you can understand my view better.






Another head and chief reason that I have chosen to put here is that staying with your friends can help you to know more information. Everyone lives in the community has his/her own way of getting information. But sometimes, that is just not enough. At this moment, your friend will tell you more of what you need to know. Once, my friend knew about a fantastic job opportunity in the field of engineering which is my main interest. She phoned me immediately and told me where to find out more about it. I checked out the website and felt that it was the right job for me. I started applying for it. I have to thank my friend for sharing information with me. Otherwise, I may lose this great opportunity. Don't you think this example is very persuasive?







Admittedly, there are advantages for people whom like to spend their time alone. For example, maybe they can use their time more efficiently. Nevertheless, the advantages of spending with friends carry more weight than that of spending time alone. Therefore, the most striking conclusion is obvious.







To sum up, given all the reasons discussed above, we can safely reach the conclusion that spending time with friends is better than spending time alone. I would like to make a suggestion to people who like to stay alone most of the time. If you talk to your friend more and spend more time with them, you will be opening a window for your future.



    



所有的都帖出来了,有的可能写了2份,是77和LENNY帮我改过的。。呵呵~~~


有些理由很恶心。。大家看了别吐。。我也没辙。。被ETS逼的,呵呵


仅贡参考,写的比较烂。。^.&



    



有问题大家问,我能答的就答喽。。呵呵



大家GOOD LUCK哦~~~~








[此贴子已经被作者于2004-3-22 11:37:25编辑过]
沙发
发表于 2004-3-22 08:03:00 | 只看该作者
谢 谢 小 晔 子 。 贴 吧 , 我 想 看
板凳
发表于 2004-3-22 08:07:00 | 只看该作者
谢谢楼主,还是贴出来吧,相信还有许多人也需要!
地板
发表于 2004-3-22 11:11:00 | 只看该作者
我也想邀,非常感谢你!
5#
 楼主| 发表于 2004-3-22 11:14:00 | 只看该作者
恩,我给贴前面吧~~~


以为没什么大用呢。。呵呵~

6#
 楼主| 发表于 2004-3-22 11:40:00 | 只看该作者
恶心理由大家看了就当没看吧~~~


谢谢。。。

7#
发表于 2004-3-22 13:53:00 | 只看该作者
问楼主一个问题,是关于阅读前在TUTORIAL时间打摸板的事,那样子会不会算作弊呢?因为再考阅读的时候好像就已经不能动笔了,那打完摸板的那张纸能一直留到打作文的时候么 ?






[此贴子已经被作者于2004-3-22 13:55:31编辑过]
8#
 楼主| 发表于 2004-3-22 15:16:00 | 只看该作者
我考了2次都是这样的,没有人管,在TORONTO ISLINTON是没人管。。。


我觉得不算吧~~~


那张纸你可以一直保留到考试结束,出去之后给他们~~~


我觉得没问题。。

9#
发表于 2004-3-22 18:21:00 | 只看该作者
谢谢作文~~




10#
发表于 2004-3-22 22:01:00 | 只看该作者
找什么人改呢,要是找外国人改他们会不会觉得很恶心呢?
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