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fern · 发表于 2004-1-28 23:10:00

249. Bluegrass musician Bill Monroe, whose repertory, views on musical collaboration, and vocal style were influential on generations of bluegrass artists, was also an inspiration to many musicians, that included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from his own.
(A) were influential on generations of bluegrass artists, was also an inspiration to many musicians, that included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from
(B) influenced generations of bluegrass artists, also inspired many musicians, including Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia, whose music differed significantly from
.OG解释 In A, that included Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia improperly modifies many musicians.
修饰musicians有什么错吗, including Elvis Presley and Jerry Garcia又是修饰什么呢?

tianwan · 发表于 2004-1-29 22:56:00

A的错误很多：
1.逗号后为非限制定语从句，that不可以引导。
2.Bill Monroe ... was also an inspiration,人不可以是inspiration.
3.'were influential on' is nonidiomatic.

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