请帮我看看作文吧，感谢bigskings模板！

快要考试了，今天第一次写作文，写得不好，总共写了4篇，也就这篇算是文章，但基本都用的是模板，自己的东西很少很少，正是这样让我很心虚。大家多提提意见吧，我耐挫，什么我都接受，哈哈，我觉得作文就是逻辑的实际应用，而我最近逻辑狂错，害我都开始怀疑自己是否拥有人类的思维方式了……

我写的是AWA的第35篇：

In this argument author concludes that Fern Valley University will increase the number of students attending their university and regain their position as the most prestigious university in the area by expanding the range of subjects they teach and increasing the size of our library facilities. To support this argument, the author points out that the students often cite poor teaching and inadequate library resources as their chief sources of dissatisfaction with Fern Valley. In addition, the author reasons that the decline in both enrollments and admissions applications mainly because their poor teaching and inadequate library. This argument is problematic for two reasons.

To begin with, a threshold problem is that the author provides no evidence to claim that the general group as a whole is of the same characteristic. The example cited, while supporting the trend, is insufficient to warrant that the sample is representative of the whole group. For example, I questioned that how many students accept this survey. What’s more, possibly the Fern Valley University’s resources is rich in science, however, most art students accept this survey, of course they will complain the limited supply. There, such evidence would be obviously unrepresentative. In fact, it is fallacious for author to draw any conclusion.

Next, the author unfairly assumes that a decline in both enrollments and admissions applications is solely by teaching and library applications. While teaching and library applications are seemingly important element in determining both enrollments and admissions, it is hardly the only or even necessarily required element. The conclusion overlooks other essential criteria in determining both enrollments and admissions. For example, a decline in high school students or a large amount of high school students chooses to work rather than to go on study. Without ruling out such potential factors, the author concludes to hastily that expand the range of subjects and boost the size of library facilities is the best way to achieve the goal.

To conclude, the argument is not persuasive as it stands. Accordingly, it is imprudent for the author to claim that a decline in both enrollments and admissions applications due to the poor teaching and inadequate library. To make this argument logically acceptable, the author would have to show that most of their students quote poor teaching and insufficient library applications. In addition, to solidity this conclusion, the author should provide evidence to demonstrate that expand the range of subjects they teach and increase the size of their library facilities will actually stimulate both enrollments and admissions applications.

不管写的怎么样，真的很感谢bigskings的模板，让我开始了作文的第一步！