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题目是：Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Child should not have to work or help with household tasks;their only responsibility should be to study.

It is justifiable that children should work or help with household tasks on account that they are  responsible to do favor for their parents. Possibly that someone may argue that children ought to concentrate their energy for study and need not do what belong to their parents. However, as far as I am concerned, it's unconvincing.

    First of all, there are always leisure time that children play basketball together, enjoy themselves in the computer games or watch TV, all kinds of relaxations. Maybe the children need exercise, need to have a break during their study. But how can't doing household tasks be the exercise and the relaxation ? In ancient China , a poet called You Lu considered sweeping the floor as a good way of doing exercise, and he lived for 84 years ,which was desirable in ancient times. Consequently, exercise doesn't mean sports. Doing household tasks is also beneficial for your body.

    Moreover, it is a type of study to work or help with household tasks. Although they are children presently ,however , they will become the parents of their kids someday . They need the skills to operate the household by then, which means that they have to learn about the household. And the best way of studying is practicing. Accordingly, it is vital for children to work or help with the household tasks.

     In addition, as children we should take care of our parents. We are not born to get everything prepared and to enjoy ourselves. Parents are even more tired from work, they also need take a rest. But in order to make us comfortable at playing and studying ,they give it up. When it comes to the children ,shouldn't they do something for the parents ? As children ,they can't settle a lot of things but at least they are able to help with the household tasks on account that I start washing dishes when I was 10 years old.

All in all, it is indispensable experience for children to work or help with household tasks since they benefit a lot through that .

我觉得自己写的挺烂的，希望大家能给点意见，并就我现在的情况该如何复习给点建议，不甚感谢！