刚写的作文,有劳德克版主和XDJM们指点一下.感激不尽~

看了德克版主的帖子觉得很受启发,写了一篇,不知道水平是不是差很多,有劳版主和大家在百忙之中看一下,要考了,很需要大家的帮忙,谢谢了!

题目o you agree or disagreearks should limit the number of visitors because it is too crowded there. 

Parks might be the optimal choice for most people in their leisure time to relax themselves from stressful jobs, and a multitude of people believe that they are places providing the temporary peace to get away from the pressure and tension. Nevertheless, recently, some of them are aware of the situation that this perspective is likely to fail to stand on its ground due to the noisy and dirty atmosphere in the national park. From this point of view, I definitely support the limitation of the amount of people entering the park simultaneously.

    Like the statement above, people go to parks seeking a relatively tranquil environment, allowing them to enjoy a short moment for thinking or recalling or a valuable period of time to stay or chat with their family members who have been a little neglected for nearly a week. Imagine what a pleasant and comfortable time sitting in the swing and sharing the joyful things with the sweetheart it is! However, the reality in the park makes them extremely disappointed when a scene of countless people gathering together represents in front of them .Thus, it is time also the obligation for the officials of the park to make the limitation as a rule to guarantee the fun time the park brings to people and their family or friends.

   Also, the historical remnant and the facilities might, to some extent, are in danger of damaging by visitors deliberately or carelessly when too many people assemble at the same time There is one terrible instance just happened in my town that can exemplify this view. A fridge across a big lake was suddenly collapsed one day owing to the overburden, at the prize of 10 casualty, which is a bloody lesson calling the public’s attention. Safety is the issue worthy of the serious emphasizing anytime and anywhere. Consequently, apart from solidifying the construction, cutting down the travelers is also a essential avenue. 

Furthermore, the crowded visitors in the park, most of whom are out of supervision of the guard, might add to the park management more trouble, say, the conflict between two aggressive young men merely because of a small crash might incur the disorder. In addition, the weariness coming from the citizens who have experienced this scaring trip might have an adverse effect on the park’s revenue. From the park's respect, hence, reducing the number of visitors can maintain the normal order of the park and the stable income.

     To sum up, it would benefit both the visitors and the park if a new entry policy is enacted. And before long, the park will become the paradise for both old and young again!

大家帮帮忙吧 快考了,谢谢大家了!!!!! 觉得很茫然