[求助]well上篇没人看，我再发一篇，希望有人还有德克版主老师来稍微看看~

第二段没来得及写完，已经稍作三处修改

10. “When people succeed, it is because of hard work. Luck has nothing to do with success.” Do you agree or disagree with the quotation above? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position.

As known to all, success involves many factors, such as the guide from the tutor, the encouragement from parents and friends, and the most important, hard working. Another factor, always ignored by most people, is luck. Luck may never be a determinative factor but always can help a lot to a success（好像不太对）.

From the perspective of an individual, luck may be appreciated by many people for their successful actions(好像不太对）. Think about the Brazil, the hometown of many famous football players who are very lucky to be discovered. As a matter of fact, in Brazil there exist numerous teenagers who are talent in playing football, but not everyone of them have enough luck to be famous. For example, those boys living in the small town could have little chances, all through their lives, to display their skills to a football teacher who can bring him to a well-known football club. This is not rare in other fields as well. People who are ingenious need luck to demonstrate them.

History has brought us plenty of inventions and discoveries related to luck. Take the discovery of the Americas for example. Because of this great attainment, Columbus gained honor and changed history. But before the discovery his goal is to find India and he had took the New World for India until his death. 没总结……没时间

Of course on one can rely on luck, which can never be controlled by people. But hard working can be. The best thing for those being eager for success to do is, and is only, to be diligent. On the one hand, hard working brings us an through understanding and grasp about what we learn, which is the ultimate criterion to judge a person. On the other hand, only by hard working can we have complete preparation to grasp good luck and make full use of it.

In conclusion, luck, if well utilized, do have something with success. It can helps people a lot. But it can be never paid too much attention, for that no one can tell when and where it will act.

还有请问下德克和大家，每段开头用一般的to begin with / first/...等等好不好呢？ 我喜欢在第一段用，其他的不用直接写中心句，自然感觉的，会不会不好？

还有转折的时候，一定要用，though i think...I also admit...这样的句子吗？可不可以直接说admittedly...开始说对方的好处呢？

谢谢