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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication, such as letters, email, or telephone calls. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Face-to-face communication is better than other types of communication, such as letters, email, or telephone calls. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

At the very beginning of human society, talking by face to face seemed the unique way to share and spread information among people .But while with the advent of many modern forms of communication like phone calls ,e-mails ,and letters, which have extremely changed the whole world and significantly accelerated the development pace of our society, it should never be considered that face-to-face communication still carries the most weigh in our everyday life.

The first and foremost reason is that people live and work in a far quicker pace of life than ever before ,they have no sufficient time to talk with friends and relatives presently, needless to say an appointment. This situation is fairly common, the best and convenient way to communication is via letters ,e-mails or telephone calls which at the same time helps us not only to maintain the friendship and the intimacy among our pals and parents ,also to amuse our leisure time to communicate with our pals on pleasant and funny events

Furthermore , it is too time and money-consuming for two friends that live far away from each other to schedule a face to face meeting. In such a case ,using e-mails, phone calls, even net video through internet could be a convenient yet less exorbitant way no matter how far away they apart. For example , I have a brother living in US, it seems impossible for us to meet every weekend presently ,instead, we meet through internet and it is even costless and we equally enjoy the time and have fun.

In addition ,face to face communication sometimes would bring us embarrassment when we need to talk about something that is hard for us to confronting each other ,at this time ,letters e-mails and telephone calls are the first choice to respond to this case.

In a conclusion ,from what I have discussed above it is simple to admit that the advantages of communication through e-mails, letters ,or telephone carry more weight than those of face to face communication.

第一个理由说没有足够的时间，第二个理由又说费时间和钱，这就重复了。

事例少，话题没有充分展开。建议主体段落为两段，前两段合并，第三段展开，然后充分论述。

face to face这个词组等同于副词的语法地位，如果变成形容词，必须为face-to-face。

我只能说：模板的味道好浓啊。。。呵呵

有些句子，用简单句就好，不要追求复杂，我觉得每段第一句说好了就行，不要用模板上一些稍微拗口的复杂句或长句，看着头晕。。。

thanks very much ,i would pay attention to my drawback!