179. In a blow to those who still harbored the illusion that E-mail exchanges are private, a watchdog group recently uncovered a trick for enabling an interloper to rig an E-mail message so that this person will be privy to any comments that a recipient had added as the message is forwarded to others or sent back and forth. A. who still harbored the illusion that E-mail exchanges are private, a watchdog group recently uncovered a trick for enabling an interloper to rig an E-mail message so that this person will be privy to any comments that a recipient had added 应该说those who是个不错的结构,但是这里的tense有问题,haebored 和are 有冲突,trick for enabling不清楚,最后的had added和分句中的will差的太远 B. who had still been harboring the illusion that E-mail exchanges are private, a watchdog group recently uncovered a trick for enabling an interloper to rig an E-mail message so that this person was privy to any comments that a recipient might have added. those who是个不错的结构,但是这里的tense有问题, had been harboring 和are 有冲突,trick for enabling不清楚,最后的have added和分句中的was有距离 C. who still were harboring the illusion that E-mail exchanges are private, a warchdog group recently uncovered a trick enabling an interloper to rig an E-mail message so that this person is privy to any comments that a recipient would add. those who是个不错的结构,但是这里的tense有问题,were harboring 和are 有冲突,trick enabling不太好,但是分词修饰的也不错,但是和之后的so that 联系不起来,因为如果enabling作为分词修饰了trick,那么句子就是这样的“uncover trick... so that...”逻辑意思连不上, D. still harboring the illusion that E-mail exchange are private , a watchdog group recently uncovered a trick that enables an interloper to rig an E-mail message so that this person will be privy to any comments that a recipient might add 这里有一点好,虽然没有who但是避免了事态的冲突,我发现在perp和GWD中,越来越倾向于使用从句来修饰一个词达到清楚的效果,这里的trick that就似乎一例。 E. still harboring the illusion that E-mail exchanges had been private, a wathchdog group recently uncovered a trick that will enable an interloper to rig and E-mail message so that this person was privy to any comments that a recipient might add.这里的had been private有两点错误1.事态没有根据,2.似乎在说这样的幻觉已经不存在了;这里的will 也有一定问题,一般现在时比较合适,最后的was和之前的will有冲突
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