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TWE002 please help me to check it,thanks

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楼主
发表于 2005-7-11 08:24:00 | 只看该作者

TWE002 please help me to check it,thanks

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 615


   Do you think parents are the best teachers? Nowadays, there is a hot and important controversy centering on this topic. Different people have different opinions because of their past experience, emotional concern and different education. A fair proportion of people believe that parents are the best teachers because they can do anything for their children, other people, nevertheless, advocate the opposite opinion instead. If I were faced this question, I am and will probably always be one of people who maintain that the latter one is more reasonable. Of the countless reasons or factors that can strengthen my viewpoints, I would like to reason and provide concrete evidences to support my standpoints as follows.


   Certainly no reason in my decision is more significant than that parent may be too close to their children. Sometimes they can only see their children through protective eyes. To illustrate this, there is an appropriate example that is persuasive. Parent always do not encourage their children to visit some unacquainted cities, they would rather go with their children to a new place because they think it will be danger for them to an unfamiliar city by themselves. But the instructor always support the idea that some of their students travel to the big city, such as Beijing, by themselves. They think it will benefit for the students future lives. By doing these things they can cultivate the ability of thinking about something by themselves, the ability to adapt the new environment and the ability to cooperate with other people. All these abilities is the key words of our time, a man without these, many of us believe, is an unfortunate victim of adverse circumstances, deprived of one of greatest twentieth-century opportunities. According this reason I would tend to vote for the latter opinion.


   Furthermore, to speak frankly, there is one more practical reason can be seen by most people that parent may expect their children’s interests to be similar to their own. They can’t seem to separate from their children in their mind. For instance, if parents are artists, they will assume their children also will want become an artist as a matter of course, they always want to cultivate their children’s interests in art. But if their children want become a business man or want to repair the cars, what they should do? Different generation has his own ideality, it is important for children to do some thing they like do! Hence, as far as I am concerned, the latter opinion is better choice.


   The last but not least reason why I think parent are not the best teacher is that parents are usually eager to pass their values to their children, but should children always believe what their parent do?


   Finally, as a proverb says, “each coin has two sides.” Parent is an important role during the process that children became adult from baby. They teach us a lot of things such as how to read and how to distinguish what is right. In spite of these benefits we can receive from our parents, I still think the disadvantages of idea parents are the best teachers are more obvious.  


   Taking into account all above factors, we can find out that the benefits of the latter opinion outweigh those of the former. From what I have discussed, we may safely draw the conclusion that parents are not best teacher is a rather wise choice.


沙发
发表于 2005-7-11 14:54:00 | 只看该作者

只提一下自己的看法, 感觉不是很流畅,句子与句子之间有些牵强, 不过本人作文不好, 上次只考了4分, 所以要再考一次.主要语法问题:


If I were faced this question, I am and will probably always be one of people who maintain that the latter one is more reasonable. 前面用虚拟语气后面用一般时,


. But the instructor always support the idea that some of their students travel to the big city. 主谓


All these abilities is the key words of our time,主谓


. According this reason,  according to


their children also will want become an artist. want to become


as far as I am concerned, the latter opinion is better choice. a better choice


I still think the disadvantages of idea parents are the best teachers are more obvious.  有语法错误, disadvantages作第一个are的主语,其实parents是are 的主语, disadvantages作第二个are的主语.                我认为可以这么改, i still think the disadvantages of ideal parents as the best teachers are more obvious


主谓达配问题还有几处, 应多注意


若有不正确的地方请指正

板凳
发表于 2005-7-11 21:04:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用marinezheng在2005-7-11 14:54:00的发言:

只提一下自己的看法, 感觉不是很流畅,句子与句子之间有些牵强, 不过本人作文不好, 上次只考了4分, 所以要再考一次.主要语法问题:


If I were faced this question, I am and will probably always be one of people who maintain that the latter one is more reasonable. 前面用虚拟语气后面用一般时,


. But the instructor always support the idea that some of their students travel to the big city. 主谓


All these abilities is the key words of our time,主谓


. According this reason,  according to


their children also will want become an artist. want to become


as far as I am concerned, the latter opinion is better choice. a better choice


I still think the disadvantages of idea parents are the best teachers are more obvious.  有语法错误, disadvantages作第一个are的主语,其实parents是are 的主语, disadvantages作第二个are的主语.                我认为可以这么改, i still think the disadvantages of ideal parents as the best teachers are more obvious


主谓达配问题还有几处, 应多注意


若有不正确的地方请指正




提得很好哇。你什么时候再考?相信你一定可以过关!

[此贴子已经被作者于2005-7-11 21:05:50编辑过]
地板
发表于 2005-7-12 13:44:00 | 只看该作者

我八月二十日考,我上次死在听力和作文,总分617, 但听力只有54分,好多学校不能申请,作文也只有4分. 这次状况一样,听力和作文都没提高, 工作还很忙,不知怎么办.

5#
发表于 2005-7-12 19:58:00 | 只看该作者
Cheer up! Do you jobs and you will score!
6#
 楼主| 发表于 2005-7-16 13:12:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用marinezheng在2005-7-11 14:54:00的发言:

只提一下自己的看法, 感觉不是很流畅,句子与句子之间有些牵强, 不过本人作文不好, 上次只考了4分, 所以要再考一次.主要语法问题:


If I were faced this question, I am and will probably always be one of people who maintain that the latter one is more reasonable. 前面用虚拟语气后面用一般时,


. But the instructor always support the idea that some of their students travel to the big city. 主谓


All these abilities is the key words of our time,主谓


. According this reason,  according to


their children also will want become an artist. want to become


as far as I am concerned, the latter opinion is better choice. a better choice


I still think the disadvantages of idea parents are the best teachers are more obvious.  有语法错误, disadvantages作第一个are的主语,其实parents是are 的主语, disadvantages作第二个are的主语.                我认为可以这么改, i still think the disadvantages of ideal parents as the best teachers are more obvious


主谓达配问题还有几处, 应多注意


若有不正确的地方请指正





非常感谢你的宝贵意见!


我26号考!上次作文只有4.5所以还需要努力!



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