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楼主
发表于 2005-6-1 10:41:00 | 只看该作者

AA013 好困……

13. The following appeared as part of a campaign to sell advertising time on a local radio station to local businesses.


“The Cumquat Cafe began advertising on our local radio station this year and was delighted to see its business increase by 10 percent over last year’s totals. Their success shows you how you can use radio advertising to make your business more profitable.”



According to the argument, the author illogically concludes that advertising on local radio station will lead to more business profits. The major assumption underlying the claim is that the advertising on radio station contributes to Cumquat Cafe's profit increase. The author's recommendation, however, is biased for the following reasons.



To begin with, the author hastily concludes that the advertising causes profit increase only because the former happens occasionally before the latter. The evidence provided, however, is insufficient to establish the causal relationship between them. Many other factors may also help to explain Cumquat Cafe's success. For example, the profit may increase because of Cumquat Cafe's superior service, or perhaps Cumquat Cafe provides a new favor that is very popular. Without ruling out these possibilities, the author reaches an unwarranted conclusion.



Second, the author commits the fallacy of "all things equal", implying that cafe businesses and other businesses are analogous in all respects. Granted that the advertising on local radio station is responsible for the cafe's profitability, the strategy can not guarantee a same triumph in other business. For example, it is possible that the tactic works well in cafe business, but it is not useful in publishing business because people who like reading rarely listen to radio. Or perhaps the tactic can not help automobile business because people intended to buy cars generally dislike to car advertising on radio. These potentialities, if true, would greatly undermine the success rate of the advertising strategy.



In addition, the triumph of radio advertising last year does not necessarily indicates that the trend will continue this years. If there is an apparent tendency that the number of people who listen to radio will go down this year, then it is unwise for other businesses to apply this strategy. As it stands, the author’s easy conclusion is entirely unfounded.



Last but not least, the author cites the result of Cumquat Cafe to solidify his conclusion that sell advertising on radio is instrumental in stimulating profits. The representativenss of the result is open to doubt because only one cafe was investigated. Unless the author can offer more evidence to convince us that the cafe represent all other cafe businesses in this region, we can hardly evaluate whether the radio advertising is helpful in profit increase.



To sum up, the argument is not persuasive as it stands. To bolster his conclusion, the author has to offer more concrete information to convince us that the cafe business is analogous to many other businesses, and the strategy used by cafe business can also guarantee a same triumph in other business such as automobile. Moreover, the author needs to broaden his sample to provide a more representative result.



字数又凑不齐了……

沙发
 楼主| 发表于 2005-6-1 10:42:00 | 只看该作者

红色部分是后来加的。


觉得自己的表达真的,真的相当平淡………………这样子的层次购了吗???

板凳
发表于 2005-6-1 19:22:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用小女公子在2005-6-1 10:41:00的发言:

13. The following appeared as part of a campaign to sell advertising time on a local radio station to local businesses.



“The Cumquat Cafe began advertising on our local radio station this year and was delighted to see its business increase by 10 percent over last year’s totals. Their success shows you how you can use radio advertising to make your business more profitable.”






According to the argument, the author illogically concludes that advertising on local radio station will lead to more business profits. The major assumption underlying the claim is that the advertising on radio station contributes to Cumquat Cafe's profit increase. The author's recommendation, however, is biased for the following reasons.





To begin with, the author hastily concludes that the advertising causes profit increase only because the former happens occasionally before the latter. The evidence provided, however, is insufficient to establish the causal relationship between them. Many other factors may also help to explain Cumquat Cafe's success. For example, the profit may increase because of Cumquat Cafe's superior service, or perhaps Cumquat Cafe provides a new favor that is very popular. Without ruling out these possibilities, the author reaches an unwarranted conclusion.





Second, the author commits the fallacy of "all things equal", implying that cafe businesses and other businesses are analogous in all respects. Granted that the advertising on local radio station is


这是一个固定用法吗?我觉得应该是The author grants that


responsible for the cafe's profitability, the strategy can not guarantee a same triumph in other business. For example, it is possible that the tactic works well in cafe business, but it is not useful in publishing business because people who like reading rarely listen to radio. Or perhaps the tactic can not help automobile business because people intended to buy cars generally dislike to car advertising on radio.


去掉


These potentialities, if true, would greatly undermine the success rate of the advertising strategy.





In addition, the triumph of radio advertising last year does not necessarily indicates that the trend will continue this years. If there is an apparent tendency that the number of people who listen to radio will go down this year, then it is unwise for other businesses to apply this strategy. As it stands, the author’s easy conclusion is entirely unfounded.





Last but not least, the author cites the result of Cumquat Cafe to solidify his conclusion that sell advertising on radio is instrumental in stimulating profits. The representativenss of the result is open to doubt because only one cafe was investigated. Unless the author can offer more evidence to convince us that the cafe represent all other cafe businesses in this region, we can hardly evaluate whether the radio advertising is helpful in profit increase.





To sum up, the argument is not persuasive as it stands. To bolster his conclusion, the author has to offer more concrete information to convince us that the cafe business is analogous to many other businesses, and the strategy used by cafe business can also guarantee a same triumph in other business such as automobile. Moreover, the author needs to broaden his sample to provide a more representative result.



字数又凑不齐了……


字数可以了呀。没有加那个红色的段就差不多400了呀。个人觉得三个逻辑错误就可以了。每段再说点废话呵呵就够了。个人觉得后补充的那个错误比那个不能代表整个咖啡店的要好。

要注意代词人称和动词的匹配有几个地方都错了要小心哦。sc有没有这个问题呀?


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