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题目92. The following is taken from an editorial in a local newspaper.

“Over the past decade, the price per pound of citrus fruit has increased substantially. Eleven years ago, Megamart charged 5 cents apiece for lemons, but today it commonly charges over 30 cents apiece. In only one of these last eleven years was the weather unfavorable for growing citrus crops. Evidently, then, citrus growers have been responsible for the excessive increase in the price of citrus fruit, and strict pricing regulations are needed to prevent them from continuing to inflate prices.”

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The conclusion endorsed in the argument is that the increase in the price of citrus fruit is caused by citrus growers and thus that strict pricing regulations should be made to keep the growers from continuing to lift prices. To bolster the conclusion, the author provides the facts that in the past 11 years, the price of lemons raised from 5 cents apiece to over 30 cents apiece, what’s more, weather condition is not responsible for this increase. This line of reasoning, however, is unconvincing due to the insufficient and oversimplified claims. A careful examination of this argument would review how groundless the conclusion is.

 

A threshold problem is that the author provides no evidence to claim that lemons can represent all citrus characteristic. One kind of citrus ---- lemon is logically unsounded to establish a general conclusion. In fact, it is more likely that the price of other kinds of citrus, such as orange,
                                    grapefruit，declined during the preceding 11 years. Unless it can be shown that lemon is representative of all citrus , it is fallacious for the author to draw any conclusion at all.

 

In addition, the author falsely depends on an oversimplified analysis about the factors contributed to the price increase. Except for the weather conditions and the behavior of artificially inflation can explain why the rates for citrus raised, there are many other factors may lead to the increase. for example, perhaps monetary inflation is the main reason why the price increases, or perhaps increased labor and facility costs are responsible for the rise of price. Since the author fails to address these factors, the conclusion is highly suspected.

 

Moreover, the author unfairly claims that in order to prevent the continuing increase in price of citrus, a strict pricing regulations on growers is indispensable. While government intervention is a seemingly effective way to curb the behavior of inflation prices, it is hardly the only required solutions. This assumption overlooks other means, for example, seeking for substitutes and thereby decreasing the demand of citrus. Without accounting for other potential methods, the author makes the conclusion too hastily.

 

To conclude, this argument is not persuasive as it stands. To make this argument logically acceptable, the author would have to show that the price of citrus has really increased a lot, and monopoly power is responsible for the increase. In addition, he should demonstrate that strict pricing regulations will be the best way to keep the price from going up. Only with more convincing evidence could this argument become more than just an emotional appeal