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Music undoubtedly is very important to people's life, and they would listen to music for different reasons and at different times. Some people may think that they do not need to listen to music, because they feel that music is useless. In my opinion, I think that music is unique in my life. In the following discussion, I would like to reason and provide evidence to support my viewpoint.

The first reason why I think that music is important is that listening music is a special and nice way of entertainment. Fact witness and present many examples, school often play some music or songs in the graduation ceremony, because it can strengthen the decent atmosphere. In the wedding ceremony, people like to use some particular songs to make people feel happy. Therefore, music has many good effects, if people correctly use them in different occasions.

Another indisputable fact is that music has become an irreplaceable mode to alleviate people's pressure and relief their fatigue. For example, nowadays, students like to listen to songs after the classes. Not only because they feel it is prevalent, but also because they believe it can alleviate their suffering in studying pressure. Music is used even in the medical purpose to cure people’s mental disease. If you can see it, you can understand it more deeply.

To sum up, music has been used in many occasions for different reasons, and it effectively influences those occasional atmospheres. Furthermore, I believe that music is able to release people from their pressure, so music is very important in our life.

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