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A group is made up of several members and a leader. Whether is it it is better to be a member of a group than to be a leader of a group. In my point of view, to be a leader is better than to be a member of a group.

The main reason for my propensity for bring a leader is that it can practice and develop my comprehensive capability of settling many difficulties (problems). For example, when I was a leader of a group of teaching assistants, I must face up to many questions, such as helping teachers collect students' assignments together, telling teachers advice from students 这句话表达的不好,建议换一个，比如：gathering information from students，mediating the impact between students and the language school I worked for. Even though I must take responsibility to all mistakes no matter it was done by anybody, my ability has gotten greatly developed. has improved greatly.这句话逻辑不通，这里的负责任跟提高水平没有关系，建议作者再修改一下。 But if being a member of a group, my work is very easy and obviously I could not get anything except the salary.

A more essential factor is that being a leader can make more money than being a member of a group. Being the leader of a group of teaching assistant I can get 600 RMB per month from the language school for 16 working hours, in the mean time（meanwhile） every member only get 400 RMB in the same working time，前面说同时了，后面没必要再加in the some time.避免重复 Furthermore, being a leader other rather than a member of a group can cultivate person self-confidence greatly.

For the reasons presented above, it is no accident that it’s better to be a leader of a group than to be a member. Being a leader benefit to improve personal widespread ability, make more money than others, and increase self-confidence for us. 这句话表达有问题，而且逻辑也有问题，前面说提高能力了，最后又说自信，前面的能力应该已经包括自信了，In the meantime, being a member you only get nothing but money.  英语中没有这样的表达~。

上面只是个人的意见，只做参考~建议作者多看些范文，学习其中的规范表达，~还有练习一些句型的表达，读了你的文章后有好多语法上的问题，有时间的话看看语法，

关于例子，TOEFL写作最忌讳写自己的例子，所以举例最好别举自己的，首先没说服力，其二学术性文章避免个人例子，想要拿理想的分数的话作者还需在写作上话工夫。 LOL~~~希望对你有帮助