求指点：In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contributio

竹林中人 · 发表于 2011-12-24 10:54:14

这篇以及接下来的一些作文都是CDer 的习作，传给我了，想让大家帮着指点一二，你说的不一定要很全面，但你说的肯定是你自己的思考所得，对我们其他人都会是很好的启发，因为对同一个题目，我们可以有不同的解读，不同的写法，不同的观点，不要羞于写下自己读后的暇思片语，写多了，你会发现自己其实一直在进步，如果不写，进步或许没有那么明显，我们一起进步！2. In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.

In this era of rapidly social development and technological advancement, in any field, many significant contributions promote the development of this discipline and play an ancillary role for other researches. Admittedly, a few important contributions, especially discoveries, are made incidentally in human history. However, it is no doubt that the majority of achievements that surprises people and promotes the development of society are influenced by past foundations within that field.

First of all, for almost all contributions that made by people, those past achievements laid excellent bases which cannot be underplayed. It is safe to say that the whole society, obviously, are constructed on the past achievements predecessors gained. For example, Kepler, one of the most eminent astrophysicists in the Europe, found the true elliptical shape of the orbits of planets. Nonetheless, it is Tycho, his teacher, a famous astronomer, whose observation data attributed to Kepler’s achievement that laid vital foundation for him. Thus, people cannot underplay those contributions made by the past because they clear out a series of conundrums that might hamper the occurrence of new fruit.

Moreover, these past achievements, frequently, can vitalize thinking and inspire people so that they view their researches from various perspectives which may do favors for them. In modern times, different kinds of fields have crossed a lot. This means that many researches, if conductor can regard them from other similar branches, obtain remarkable progress. Cantor, for instance, one of the most preeminent mathematicians in the 19th century, constructed his cardinal theory——set theory that has become the significant basis of modern math. Unexceptionably, it is medieval philosophy that inspired him to a certain extent. Consequently, the past achievements often play an ancillary role for the contemporary contributions.

Nevertheless, we have to concede that in spite of the contributions reaped by precursors, several discoveries and fundamental achievements were not strongly impacted by them. Undoubtedly, there are a series of independent discoveries and breakthroughs full of fortuity. For example, Alexander Fleming, a British bacteriologist, was celebrated in human history due to his discovery of penicillin. His discovery of penicillin came about accidentally in the course of research on influenza. As a result, people should not completely underestimate the power of success in the light of incident, though they seem to be difficult to predict.

In conclusion, granted that a couple of contributions trending to fortuity might be little relevant to the past, people should, incontrovertibly, realize that the majority of success is strongly affected by past achievements.

普渡哥 · 发表于 2011-12-24 15:45:18

有点偏题了。

人家题目说你不可能不受前人的影响而取得重大成就。

所以你要论证的是为什么不可能或者为什么可能，而不是去论证自己的一个假设：However, it is no doubt that the majority of achievements that surprises people and promotes the development of society are influenced by past foundations within that field.（摘自第一段）

你在论证的是the majority of achievements that surprises people and promotes the development of society（我觉得这个不能概括所有的重大发明）会受影响，而不是不受前人影响就不可能取得重大成就。

我感觉作者没有catch the point.

jannykongkch · 发表于 2011-12-24 16:37:28

我给你指出几个语法错误：
1. rapidly social development 改为rapid social development
2. it is no doubt that 改为there is no doubt that
3.all contributions that made by people中的that去掉

普渡哥 · 发表于 2011-12-24 21:45:59

作者要多练，好像很难抓到点子上。

gmf · 发表于 2013-10-31 22:34:27

学习了！！

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