【小P作文要满分】 NA题每天两篇

Ryan_za · 发表于 2013-4-17 19:50:56

一战作文26 二战求满分

这是第一篇练习~ 求狠批~！
题目 2012/12/02/NA
Compare to people live in the city, people who live in the village and farm are more satisfied with their lives.
提纲：
less compitition
better environment/ no pollutant 、fresh organic food 、 genuine neighbor
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no convienence

正文：

Some, maintaining that metropolitans generally lead a delight life, claim that the urban public facilities and traffic systems can provide citizens with piles of convenience and entertainment in their daily life. I concede this opinion. Nevertheless, from my perspective, living in the ranch or outskirt virtually take precedence over staying in the city all the time, because of the relaxing and cozy pace of life as well as better circumstances in countryside.
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Initially, one issue that encourages me to hold this viewpoint is that, free from strains and tiredness, living in a village can perennially benefit our mental health. Dwelling in metropolitans, citizens there barely been influenced by the high pace of lifestyle and accumulate stockpiles of stress and pressure from whole day's undertaking, which has relatively considerable possibility for them to sink into mental maladies, such as autism and psychosis. Over a hundred studies carried out in the ten major cities of the US over past decades have revealed that people residing urban areas, especially programmers, bank managers and surgeons, can achieve a higher suicide ratio (1.32%) than those in the suburb. Dwelling in countryside, on the contrary, has the ability to soothe us grossly through the picturesque scene and cozy lifestyle.
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An additional factor involves this recognition that living in a ranch or village extremely profits one's physical health. To illustrate, villages, without great quantities of off-gas from automobiles, have fresh and clean air, which is of enormous significance to the health of people's lungs and circulatory systems. Similarly, with handy access to the fresh and organic food, we can not only assimilate much beneficial nutrition but also enjoy the origin taste of vegetables and fruits. Perhaps more importantly, chatting with the genial neighbors can assists us free from worries and strains, maintaining our blood pressure and avoiding heart diseases as well.
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Nevertheless, if all the factors are contemplated, the idea that residing cities completely possesses no disadvantages brings certain problems. Not having convenient transportation such as bus or subway can result in rustic people's staying home all the day, leading to a comparatively tedious life. In addition, supermarkets are seldom built in the countryside, which gives people their inconvenience in purchasing and limited varieties of goods to buy. However, these merits can't match with the mental and physical benefits by living in places far away from strains and pollution.
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Judging from the evidence above, we can arrive at the conclusion that despite the convenience of urban life, setting home in a serene environment, with fresh air relaxing lifestyle and hospitable neighbors, can comparatively supply people with more satisfaction and happiness.

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亲们也可以把你们作文贴个传送门给我~让我拜读一下求积累好词好句~~=w= 自己写永远死水一潭~

shiwen5006 · 发表于 2013-4-17 21:05:18

楼主写的挺好，学习了。
感觉美中不足的是，长句有点多~

Ryan_za · 发表于 2013-4-17 21:09:06

shiwen5006 发表于 2013-4-17 21:05
楼主写的挺好，学习了。
感觉美中不足的是，长句有点多~

诶难道这是我的误区吗？
我个人来说很偏向整篇写长句的~ 然后XDF老师说每段最好四句话一句话30词~

能举个例子看看怎么修改吗？~【虚心求教了】

Ryan_za · 发表于 2013-4-17 23:29:35

这篇好难T^T 严重超时想不出来思路啊啊
所以写的估计结结巴巴的~
求狠批~！

另外这篇我试着写了许多短句子不知道是不是好一点

2012/11/17NA
Use specific reasons and examples to support your response. One can learn a lot about another person from books and movies that person likes

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no

genre of books limited/mislead
personality is multiple/not overall
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can reflect part of one' taste

Some, maintaining that one's taste of certain types of books and movies can indicate his/her personality, claim that one's favorite accords with their abilities of cognition and level of education. I concede this opinion. Nevertheless, from my perspective, information delivered from one's choices of books and movies genres is grossly limited, due to the feasible misunderstanding by judging others simply on finite information and unbelievably multiple personalities that humans possess.
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Initially, one issue that encourages me to hold this opinion is that without thorough observations and understandings of others, barely can you acquire a comprehensive image of them. For one thing, genres of movies, such as comedies and romantic movies are popular and welcomed by widespread audience without much correspondence with disposition. Thus, never can you regard somebody as an optimist simply by his/her interest in, for instance, series of Chaplin’s films. For another thing, types of movies and books one fancies may vary in accordance with our mood. For instance, I may watch tear-jerkers when frustrated or downhearted, and enjoy cartoons when delight, which has possibility to exert surface and inaccurate impression on others.
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Additional factor involves this recognition that infinite types of books and movies can hardly denote relatively various personalities. To illustrate, a multitude of teenagers behave optimistically in most of the time, but turn blue and sentimental alone at night. In this case, we can hardly give a specific definition of what they should fancy, comedies or tragedies. Generally speaking, complex is people's inner world that, without perennial observation and piles of heart-to-heart conversation, others' image in your mind can always be superficial and abstractive.
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However, if all the factors are contemplated, the idea that we can't indicate any information of one's characteristics can bring certain problems. To begin with, one's personal taste partially relates to his/her major. For instance, a mechanical engineer tends to read specific magazines concerning mechanics, and a literature student would like to read more written by Shakespeare and Dickenson. Likewise, the education level can also influence one's options on a large scale. On no account will an educated and well-behaved gentleman be addicted to porn film, and similarly, will an illiterate with sparse education truly enjoy the verses by Tagore, the brilliant and famous Indian poet. Nevertheless, to perceive a person comprehensively, we are far away from the accurate impression only by acquiring one's interest.
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Judging from the evidence offered above, we can arrive at the conclusion that despite the surface information offered by one's taste of books and movies, in no way will we understand a person completely without becoming intimate friends with him.

Ryan_za · 发表于 2013-4-18 21:22:34

2012/11/16NA

Should the government support artist or should artist support themselves?

should

1 impose enormous influence on the public's level of appreciation

2 uncertainty of painters and dancers' income also deserves the financial assistance from governmental art institutions

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3 but still 大部分靠自己

Some, maintaining that artists, such as photographer and sculptor ought to earn a living on their own, claim that these occupations don't differ from others like business elites, street vendors, or ambulance drivers. I concede this opinion. Nevertheless, from my perspective, I hold the opinion that our endemic government should ration appropriate amount of patronage to support those aesthetic designers, due to the significance of the impact exerted by art and artists' unstable revenue.

Initially, one issue that encourages me to hold this viewpoint is those myriad art forms extremely impose enormous influence on the public's level of appreciation. For example, by staring the masterpiece, "Guernica" by Picasso, we can obviously feel a multitude of emotions delivered from the static painting, which can sublimate our spirit potentially. Via books, internet or even vivid materials, our souls will be touched and our emotions will be calmed. Thus, to provide citizens with more resources for increasing ability of appreciation, allocating proper amount of fund can be an effective and efficient approach, which stimulates artists' motivation on a large scale.

An additional factor involves the recognition that uncertainty of painters and dancers' income also deserves the financial assistance from governmental art institutions. For one thing, the unstable revenue has the ability to dramatically impact the life quality of artists, declining their inspirations to create new artworks. For another, as a normal citizen, with comparatively modest salary and inferior status, artists are the group which demands the government's attention and economic assistance for a better living condition. Consequently, government should financially support artists for more elaborate artworks and their better life.

However, if all the factors are contemplated, the idea that painters and dancers can make a living completely by governmental economic aids can bring certain problems. As a normal member of the society, everyone, including artists, needs continuous exertion for bread and butter, or otherwise, they will fail to develop dependable living skills and indomitable attitude, which, as a matter of fact, is a tragedy due to their weakness when facing the crisis.

Judging from the evidence above, we can arrive at the conclusion that government should allot basic financial support for artist, but they must also rely on their own effort to achieve a higher quality of life.

polyglots · 发表于 2013-4-29 15:38:54

Ryan_za 发表于 2013-4-17 23:29
这篇好难T^T 严重超时想不出来思路啊啊
所以写的估计结结巴巴的~
求狠批~！

模板化很严重，去掉模板其实干活就少了。
T的独立写作和GMAT的Issue很像，阅卷人看多了模板的写作容易生厌。
如果能简化模板，多点实际的例子和论述会耳目一新。中国学生大多死在模板上。

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