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[issue] 大家看看这篇issue有没有点进步,谢了~

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发表于 2013-1-14 14:59:14 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
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No field of study can advance significantly unless it incorporatesknowledge and experience from outside that field.


Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree ordisagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position youtake. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways inwhich the statement might or might not hold true and explain how theseconsiderations shape your position.


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The statement contributes a significant advance of study in a field to thecombination of knowledge and experience from both this specific area and someother fields. Surely we can see that recently, almost all Nobel Prize winners,especially those in science fields, corporate with others scientists who arefrom other relative areas. The ACM Turing Award, which is the highest award incomputer science, is always given by someone who works out new mathematicalalgorithms. All of these significant achievements combined with otherscientific results are changing the world recently, and we can seldom see apure work that is only restrained in one field, especially from the turn of 19century.


Although there are a bunch of examples of the successful cooperation, wecannot claim that no field of study can step a lot forward categorically. Tohave an insightful look at this issue, we have to talk about it under aspecific time period as well as a particular field.


When it is evaluated under a particular area, say mathematics, timebecomes quite an important issue. Mathematicians started doing math from apretty old era. Ancient Chinese and Indians began their mathematical toursthousands years ago. At that time, they came up with interesting math problemsin the light of daily life, say, figure out how many bucks they should pay fora good or count the number of chickens and rabbits. They had their own modelsthat are relative to trade. So they needed to consider a math problem with whatwas happening in the trade process, which means they need a combination of mathand economics. Nevertheless, when it comes to 1900s, Hilbert thought out 23math problems, and from then on, we experienced a period of time solvingabstract problems without applications. If we reckon that period of time,mathematicians are considering pure math problems, they began to do math by newtechnologies after the invention of computer. As it's easy to see, after WorldWar II, math had been developed into an unprecedented blossom, and a bottleneckis also overcome by the computers. So mathematics crashes into computer andpeople no more do math by math only from then. Therefore, math advances as timegoes by and whether it incorporates knowledge from other fields differs.


When we just set the field as the variable, this issue still depends. Withthe status quo, almost all scientific achievements, no matter natural orsocial, are dependent on computers or statistics. Physicians have to usecomputer to calculate astronomical figures. Chemists must use math to decidehow much chemical should be taken. Economists need to store and analyse datafrom census by computer. These kinds of incorporation exist a lot andscientists cannot survive in their own narrow fields. However, as for study inliterature or traditional art, writers can use a simple pen and a stack ofscratch paper to create an awesome new world, and painters can addict people intheir own spiritual world easily by a pencil or a brush. Surely some artiststoday use computer to paint or write, but sometimes computers are not necessaryat all. Without incorporating knowledge and experience from outside art,artists can still bring new study of art works to the real world. This meanswhether a field of study needs cooperation differs from fields it is in,ceteris paribus.


Fields of study today is seemingly inseparable with combinations outsidethat field, but the story isn't that absolute in the real world. Although theremight be other factors or variables, time and the specific field are quitedisturbing when we evaluate this statement carefully. Whether the statement iscorrect depends on the actual situation it is in.
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沙发
发表于 2013-1-15 20:49:39 | 只看该作者
看了半天,第三段没看太明白,可能太专业了。LZ能把自己的提纲写写不?中间两端也太长,希望能分段或者精简些
板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2013-1-16 00:44:14 | 只看该作者
第三段其实关系很简单,如果版主没看明白的话那就肯定是我没写清楚了。我想做的是把数学的发展分为三个时期,第一个是非常久远的时期,人们从生活中发现数学问题,从身边的经济学问题中抽象出数学模型,相当于是一个结合(这个其实我觉得稍微有点牵强);后来到了20世纪初,希尔伯特提出了23个亟待解决的数学难题,人们开始攻克这些数学难题,从而脱离了平常的生活以及实际意义,是一个研究纯数学的时代;到后来电子计算机发明了以后,人们开始利用计算机对一些很难的进行求解,突破了以前没有计算机时人们对计算复杂度高的问题束手无策的瓶颈,因而又是一个多领域的结合。
这一段确实有些冗长,但是表述的不是特别清晰估计是更硬的伤,希望版主给点建议!谢谢!(我这些时间一直在读一些范文,然后套这些范文的模式写作文,现在想定一个比较好的模式然后开始只用这个模式练习了,不知版主还有什么这方面的建议,虽然我语言表达上还有很多问题。。。。)
地板
发表于 2013-1-16 09:32:27 | 只看该作者
我觉得结构上还可以加强。
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 楼主| 发表于 2013-1-16 12:25:29 | 只看该作者
具体怎么加强呢?请版主指点~
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