【Questions】Acme Publishing Company VS Speed Reading Course

麻倉枼 · 发表于 2012-12-21 12:13:28

新的一篇Argument写出来了。。卡了两天，看着题目害怕到连键盘都不敢碰，最后承受着压力写出来了。。
状况：
1. 提纲是看了攻略再写出来的，偏抄袭，因为没写过Questions型的提纲；
2. 作文脑中模拟了很久才写的，看了一遍OG 上的 5分作文给出的灵感。。

其次想请教的是：
1. 真的国内JJ上的的题目在北美会考到么？就目前看过的JJ来分析，北美的全是碰到冷门题目，而且都是没重复题材不同问题的（这点倒挺好）。如果碰到例如猴子那道的题目岂不是要认命了？那真心难。。
2. 目前找不到questions型和alternative explanation型的范文。。请问有介绍么？谢谢。。最近又生病了。。

3.虽然是看了范文，可是写的时候依然是根据自己的写法说法想法去做，请问目前我的情况要怎么提升。。4分足以，5分目标。。

普渡哥 · 发表于 2012-12-21 14:04:53

选几篇陌生的，不看范文。写了之后再改，改四五遍，感觉就来了。

麻倉枼 · 发表于 2012-12-21 22:53:42

选几篇陌生的，不看范文。写了之后再改，改四五遍，感觉就来了。

-- by 会员普渡哥 (2012/12/21 14:04:53)

我每次写完后就立刻改，可是我改不出什么特别的来啊。。说改的话是改grammar，还是内容，还是什么其他的？
我说的攻略是因为在别的论坛里有人写了每一篇argument的攻略，这篇对我来讲比较特别，不知道questions型的要怎么写提纲才看的。。

另外我也要开始写issue了，请教一下第一步要怎么做？

竹林中人 · 发表于 2012-12-22 00:28:38

Acme Publishing Company VS. Speed-Reading Course

(33min 18sec, 573 words)

The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company.
"Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a 500-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read would cost Acme only $500 per employee—a small price to pay when you consider the benefits. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, to improve productivity, Acme should require all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.

  While it may seems seem the recommendation 这句话不完整啊from the personnel director necessary that Acme Publishing Company should propose every employee to take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course.By taking the不要the close scrutiny of the recommendation, I found it is rife of with flaws in its assumptions, and there are many questions that the author must be answeredanswer in order to prove its reliability.credibility.
  First of all, the author provides two examples of people gaining their success to tell that the course is useful and effective. However, the assumption is full of flaws and it is unclear to me. For example, the graduate who reads 500 pages in two hours fails to provide the information of what kind of book he/she is reading; perhaps the book is in elementary level that each page only contains few lines. 前面这个例子题目的意思在于这个课程是有效的，能够增加rendering阅读速度的，因此有一个比较的问题，但在这里并没有交代，所以你最直接的质疑是关于比较的问题，有比较才说明问题The other example is even more nebulous to me – perhaps the person is successful because he is excellent in managing the company, or perhaps he obtains special skills that nobody has in the company. The example thus shows that the author must answer this question: how is the quality of the course? If the author doesn’t provide specific information（如果你能对这个specific information举出一两个小例子就比较好） to answer this question, the recommendation will not be persuasive.
  Secondly, the author thinks that faster reading will allow people to obtain more information, thus people increase their productivity in work. However, the faster a person reads, the higher chance that the person miss misses important information，argument中不要有个人认知方面的语句，即使要写，最好不写成肯定句，最好是带有探讨性口气的，比如possible等，这里题目认为是读的速度跟信息摄取能力相关，你提的问题就是是否必然相关，需要什么样的信息才可以说明.; the author overlooks the fact that understanding the contents and absorbing useful information is more important absorbing every bit of information. In this case, why is the course important to people? In what area that is related to work does a person improve from having this course? The author must provide specific detail about what materials the course will teach, and how the course enhances people’s ability for their work, and what kind of work will have better benefit from learning fast reading. Otherwise, I will not support author’s recommendation based on that.
  At last, the author provides an assumption that all employees from the company should take the course, when the price is $500 per employee. It may seem exciting that if everyone learns the skill, then it will be beneficial to the company. However, as I mention above, this assumption also fails to realize the fact that not everyone is necessary to take the course. This fact comes with another the other questions: if everyone is necessary to take the course, what will happen to the company during the period when everyone is out of work and having the class? Is the course really beneficial to the company? How many people will be taking the course? Will it be possible that because of the uncertainty of the quality of the course and large number of employees who take the course, the company faces a deficit? The author must answer these questions and provide reliable data such the number of people in the company who need to take the course, how will the company gain advantage from this course, etc. in order to strength his assumption. Otherwise, this assumption will only undermine the author’s purpose.
虽然是关于question的题目，但也不要太多问题，一段里面两个足以，然后给出自己举出的可能性的回答。
  It is good to let employees to learn a new skill for the company, as the author proposes, the faster reading course may be useful. However, the recommendation is ambiguous and full of flaws, not only these reasons undermines the purpose of the author, but also telling people that this recommendation is only for commercial processshould not be considered. The author must answer the above questions, so that the recommendation will be even more convincible.

Two examples is not correct;
Faster reading is not good than understand info
Everyone need to take it? Price? Deficit?
作者对语言的运用还是略显生疏，很多地方显得比较生硬，不知道作者准备作何补救，虽然ＡＷ并不直接考察语言，但语言表达的高低肯定会影响分数的

麻倉枼 · 发表于 2012-12-22 02:25:43

Acme Publishing Company VS. Speed-Reading Course

(33min 18sec, 573 words)

The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company.
"Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a 500-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read would cost Acme only $500 per employee—a small price to pay when you consider the benefits. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, to improve productivity, Acme should require all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.

While it may seems seem the recommendation 这句话不完整啊from the personnel director necessary that Acme Publishing Company should propose every employee to take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course.By taking the不要the close scrutiny of the recommendation, I found it is rife of with flaws in its assumptions, and there are many questions that the author must be answeredanswer in order to prove its reliability.credibility.
First of all, the author provides two examples of people gaining their success to tell that the course is useful and effective. However, the assumption is full of flaws and it is unclear to me. For example, the graduate who reads 500 pages in two hours fails to provide the information of what kind of book he/she is reading; perhaps the book is in elementary level that each page only contains few lines. 前面这个例子题目的意思在于这个课程是有效的，能够增加rendering阅读速度的，因此有一个比较的问题，但在这里并没有交代，所以你最直接的质疑是关于比较的问题，有比较才说明问题The other example is even more nebulous to me – perhaps the person is successful because he is excellent in managing the company, or perhaps he obtains special skills that nobody has in the company. The example thus shows that the author must answer this question: how is the quality of the course? If the author doesn’t provide specific information（如果你能对这个specific information举出一两个小例子就比较好） to answer this question, the recommendation will not be persuasive.
Secondly, the author thinks that faster reading will allow people to obtain more information, thus people increase their productivity in work. However, the faster a person reads, the higher chance that the person miss misses important information，argument中不要有个人认知方面的语句，即使要写，最好不写成肯定句，最好是带有探讨性口气的，比如possible等，这里题目认为是读的速度跟信息摄取能力相关，你提的问题就是是否必然相关，需要什么样的信息才可以说明.; the author overlooks the fact that understanding the contents and absorbing useful information is more important absorbing every bit of information. In this case, why is the course important to people? In what area that is related to work does a person improve from having this course? The author must provide specific detail about what materials the course will teach, and how the course enhances people’s ability for their work, and what kind of work will have better benefit from learning fast reading. Otherwise, I will not support author’s recommendation based on that.
At last, the author provides an assumption that all employees from the company should take the course, when the price is $500 per employee. It may seem exciting that if everyone learns the skill, then it will be beneficial to the company. However, as I mention above, this assumption also fails to realize the fact that not everyone is necessary to take the course. This fact comes with another the other questions: if everyone is necessary to take the course, what will happen to the company during the period when everyone is out of work and having the class? Is the course really beneficial to the company? How many people will be taking the course? Will it be possible that because of the uncertainty of the quality of the course and large number of employees who take the course, the company faces a deficit? The author must answer these questions and provide reliable data such the number of people in the company who need to take the course, how will the company gain advantage from this course, etc. in order to strength his assumption. Otherwise, this assumption will only undermine the author’s purpose.
虽然是关于question的题目，但也不要太多问题，一段里面两个足以，然后给出自己举出的可能性的回答。
It is good to let employees to learn a new skill for the company, as the author proposes, the faster reading course may be useful. However, the recommendation is ambiguous and full of flaws, not only these reasons undermines the purpose of the author, but also telling people that this recommendation is only for commercial processshould not be considered. The author must answer the above questions, so that the recommendation will be even more convincible.

Two examples is not correct;
Faster reading is not good than understand info
Everyone need to take it? Price? Deficit?
作者对语言的运用还是略显生疏，很多地方显得比较生硬，不知道作者准备作何补救，虽然ＡＷ并不直接考察语言，但语言表达的高低肯定会影响分数的

-- by 会员竹林中人 (2012/12/22 0:28:38)

因为我没背模板，所以没有用到特殊的语句，基本上是用自己的话去写。所以显得不够专业。

有一个comment我看不懂：
前面这个例子题目的意思在于这个课程是有效的，能够增加rendering阅读速度的，因此有一个比较的问题，但在这里并没有交代，所以你最直接的质疑是关于比较的问题，有比较才说明问题。
这里你想我怎么改？根据之前的那句话好像连不上你这句comment，所以想问问。

竹林中人 · 发表于 2012-12-22 12:32:15

Acme Publishing Company VS. Speed-Reading Course

(33min 18sec, 573 words)

The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company.
"Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a 500-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read would cost Acme only $500 per employee—a small price to pay when you consider the benefits. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, to improve productivity, Acme should require all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.

While it may seems seem the recommendation 这句话不完整啊from the personnel director necessary that Acme Publishing Company should propose every employee to take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course.By taking the不要the close scrutiny of the recommendation, I found it is rife of with flaws in its assumptions, and there are many questions that the author must be answeredanswer in order to prove its reliability.credibility.
First of all, the author provides two examples of people gaining their success to tell that the course is useful and effective. However, the assumption is full of flaws and it is unclear to me. For example, the graduate who reads 500 pages in two hours fails to provide the information of what kind of book he/she is reading; perhaps the book is in elementary level that each page only contains few lines. 前面这个例子题目的意思在于这个课程是有效的，能够增加rendering阅读速度的，因此有一个比较的问题，但在这里并没有交代，所以你最直接的质疑是关于比较的问题，有比较才说明问题The other example is even more nebulous to me – perhaps the person is successful because he is excellent in managing the company, or perhaps he obtains special skills that nobody has in the company. The example thus shows that the author must answer this question: how is the quality of the course? If the author doesn’t provide specific information（如果你能对这个specific information举出一两个小例子就比较好） to answer this question, the recommendation will not be persuasive.
Secondly, the author thinks that faster reading will allow people to obtain more information, thus people increase their productivity in work. However, the faster a person reads, the higher chance that the person miss misses important information，argument中不要有个人认知方面的语句，即使要写，最好不写成肯定句，最好是带有探讨性口气的，比如possible等，这里题目认为是读的速度跟信息摄取能力相关，你提的问题就是是否必然相关，需要什么样的信息才可以说明.; the author overlooks the fact that understanding the contents and absorbing useful information is more important absorbing every bit of information. In this case, why is the course important to people? In what area that is related to work does a person improve from having this course? The author must provide specific detail about what materials the course will teach, and how the course enhances people’s ability for their work, and what kind of work will have better benefit from learning fast reading. Otherwise, I will not support author’s recommendation based on that.
At last, the author provides an assumption that all employees from the company should take the course, when the price is $500 per employee. It may seem exciting that if everyone learns the skill, then it will be beneficial to the company. However, as I mention above, this assumption also fails to realize the fact that not everyone is necessary to take the course. This fact comes with another the other questions: if everyone is necessary to take the course, what will happen to the company during the period when everyone is out of work and having the class? Is the course really beneficial to the company? How many people will be taking the course? Will it be possible that because of the uncertainty of the quality of the course and large number of employees who take the course, the company faces a deficit? The author must answer these questions and provide reliable data such the number of people in the company who need to take the course, how will the company gain advantage from this course, etc. in order to strength his assumption. Otherwise, this assumption will only undermine the author’s purpose.
虽然是关于question的题目，但也不要太多问题，一段里面两个足以，然后给出自己举出的可能性的回答。
It is good to let employees to learn a new skill for the company, as the author proposes, the faster reading course may be useful. However, the recommendation is ambiguous and full of flaws, not only these reasons undermines the purpose of the author, but also telling people that this recommendation is only for commercial processshould not be considered. The author must answer the above questions, so that the recommendation will be even more convincible.

Two examples is not correct;
Faster reading is not good than understand info
Everyone need to take it? Price? Deficit?
作者对语言的运用还是略显生疏，很多地方显得比较生硬，不知道作者准备作何补救，虽然ＡＷ并不直接考察语言，但语言表达的高低肯定会影响分数的

-- by 会员竹林中人 (2012/12/22 0:28:38)

因为我没背模板，所以没有用到特殊的语句，基本上是用自己的话去写。所以显得不够专业。

有一个comment我看不懂：
前面这个例子题目的意思在于这个课程是有效的，能够增加rendering阅读速度的，因此有一个比较的问题，但在这里并没有交代，所以你最直接的质疑是关于比较的问题，有比较才说明问题。
这里你想我怎么改？根据之前的那句话好像连不上你这句comment，所以想问问。

-- by 会员麻倉枼 (2012/12/22 2:25:43)

我的意思是你质疑的方向偏了点，最直接的是题目中没有比较

麻倉枼 · 发表于 2012-12-24 03:28:29

Acme Publishing Company VS. Speed-Reading Course

(33min 18sec, 573 words)

The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company.
"Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a 500-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read would cost Acme only $500 per employee—a small price to pay when you consider the benefits. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, to improve productivity, Acme should require all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.

While it may seems seem the recommendation 这句话不完整啊from the personnel director necessary that Acme Publishing Company should propose every employee to take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course.By taking the不要the close scrutiny of the recommendation, I found it is rife of with flaws in its assumptions, and there are many questions that the author must be answeredanswer in order to prove its reliability.credibility.
First of all, the author provides two examples of people gaining their success to tell that the course is useful and effective. However, the assumption is full of flaws and it is unclear to me. For example, the graduate who reads 500 pages in two hours fails to provide the information of what kind of book he/she is reading; perhaps the book is in elementary level that each page only contains few lines. 前面这个例子题目的意思在于这个课程是有效的，能够增加rendering阅读速度的，因此有一个比较的问题，但在这里并没有交代，所以你最直接的质疑是关于比较的问题，有比较才说明问题The other example is even more nebulous to me – perhaps the person is successful because he is excellent in managing the company, or perhaps he obtains special skills that nobody has in the company. The example thus shows that the author must answer this question: how is the quality of the course? If the author doesn’t provide specific information（如果你能对这个specific information举出一两个小例子就比较好） to answer this question, the recommendation will not be persuasive.
Secondly, the author thinks that faster reading will allow people to obtain more information, thus people increase their productivity in work. However, the faster a person reads, the higher chance that the person miss misses important information，argument中不要有个人认知方面的语句，即使要写，最好不写成肯定句，最好是带有探讨性口气的，比如possible等，这里题目认为是读的速度跟信息摄取能力相关，你提的问题就是是否必然相关，需要什么样的信息才可以说明.; the author overlooks the fact that understanding the contents and absorbing useful information is more important absorbing every bit of information. In this case, why is the course important to people? In what area that is related to work does a person improve from having this course? The author must provide specific detail about what materials the course will teach, and how the course enhances people’s ability for their work, and what kind of work will have better benefit from learning fast reading. Otherwise, I will not support author’s recommendation based on that.
At last, the author provides an assumption that all employees from the company should take the course, when the price is $500 per employee. It may seem exciting that if everyone learns the skill, then it will be beneficial to the company. However, as I mention above, this assumption also fails to realize the fact that not everyone is necessary to take the course. This fact comes with another the other questions: if everyone is necessary to take the course, what will happen to the company during the period when everyone is out of work and having the class? Is the course really beneficial to the company? How many people will be taking the course? Will it be possible that because of the uncertainty of the quality of the course and large number of employees who take the course, the company faces a deficit? The author must answer these questions and provide reliable data such the number of people in the company who need to take the course, how will the company gain advantage from this course, etc. in order to strength his assumption. Otherwise, this assumption will only undermine the author’s purpose.
虽然是关于question的题目，但也不要太多问题，一段里面两个足以，然后给出自己举出的可能性的回答。
It is good to let employees to learn a new skill for the company, as the author proposes, the faster reading course may be useful. However, the recommendation is ambiguous and full of flaws, not only these reasons undermines the purpose of the author, but also telling people that this recommendation is only for commercial processshould not be considered. The author must answer the above questions, so that the recommendation will be even more convincible.

Two examples is not correct;
Faster reading is not good than understand info
Everyone need to take it? Price? Deficit?
作者对语言的运用还是略显生疏，很多地方显得比较生硬，不知道作者准备作何补救，虽然ＡＷ并不直接考察语言，但语言表达的高低肯定会影响分数的

-- by 会员竹林中人 (2012/12/22 0:28:38)

因为我没背模板，所以没有用到特殊的语句，基本上是用自己的话去写。所以显得不够专业。

有一个comment我看不懂：
前面这个例子题目的意思在于这个课程是有效的，能够增加rendering阅读速度的，因此有一个比较的问题，但在这里并没有交代，所以你最直接的质疑是关于比较的问题，有比较才说明问题。
这里你想我怎么改？根据之前的那句话好像连不上你这句comment，所以想问问。

-- by 会员麻倉枼 (2012/12/22 2:25:43)

我的意思是你质疑的方向偏了点，最直接的是题目中没有比较

-- by 会员竹林中人 (2012/12/22 12:32:15)

我懂了，就是我质疑的点错了。。可是我不懂你说的比较是什么，他的例子就是想说明这个课程有效率，然后给了这个例子。。那么我该从哪里去想来抨击这个“课程有效率”的assumption呢？

麻倉枼 · 发表于 2012-12-24 03:59:11

Acme Publishing Company VS. Speed-Reading Course

(33min 18sec, 573 words)

The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company.
"Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a 500-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read would cost Acme only $500 per employee—a small price to pay when you consider the benefits. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, to improve productivity, Acme should require all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.

While it may seems seem the recommendation 这句话不完整啊from the personnel director necessary that Acme Publishing Company should propose every employee to take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course.By taking the不要the close scrutiny of the recommendation, I found it is rife of with flaws in its assumptions, and there are many questions that the author must be answeredanswer in order to prove its reliability.credibility.
First of all, the author provides two examples of people gaining their success to tell that the course is useful and effective. However, the assumption is full of flaws and it is unclear to me. For example, the graduate who reads 500 pages in two hours fails to provide the information of what kind of book he/she is reading; perhaps the book is in elementary level that each page only contains few lines. 前面这个例子题目的意思在于这个课程是有效的，能够增加rendering阅读速度的，因此有一个比较的问题，但在这里并没有交代，所以你最直接的质疑是关于比较的问题，有比较才说明问题The other example is even more nebulous to me – perhaps the person is successful because he is excellent in managing the company, or perhaps he obtains special skills that nobody has in the company. The example thus shows that the author must answer this question: how is the quality of the course? If the author doesn’t provide specific information（如果你能对这个specific information举出一两个小例子就比较好） to answer this question, the recommendation will not be persuasive.
Secondly, the author thinks that faster reading will allow people to obtain more information, thus people increase their productivity in work. However, the faster a person reads, the higher chance that the person miss misses important information，argument中不要有个人认知方面的语句，即使要写，最好不写成肯定句，最好是带有探讨性口气的，比如possible等，这里题目认为是读的速度跟信息摄取能力相关，你提的问题就是是否必然相关，需要什么样的信息才可以说明.; the author overlooks the fact that understanding the contents and absorbing useful information is more important absorbing every bit of information. In this case, why is the course important to people? In what area that is related to work does a person improve from having this course? The author must provide specific detail about what materials the course will teach, and how the course enhances people’s ability for their work, and what kind of work will have better benefit from learning fast reading. Otherwise, I will not support author’s recommendation based on that.
At last, the author provides an assumption that all employees from the company should take the course, when the price is $500 per employee. It may seem exciting that if everyone learns the skill, then it will be beneficial to the company. However, as I mention above, this assumption also fails to realize the fact that not everyone is necessary to take the course. This fact comes with another the other questions: if everyone is necessary to take the course, what will happen to the company during the period when everyone is out of work and having the class? Is the course really beneficial to the company? How many people will be taking the course? Will it be possible that because of the uncertainty of the quality of the course and large number of employees who take the course, the company faces a deficit? The author must answer these questions and provide reliable data such the number of people in the company who need to take the course, how will the company gain advantage from this course, etc. in order to strength his assumption. Otherwise, this assumption will only undermine the author’s purpose.
虽然是关于question的题目，但也不要太多问题，一段里面两个足以，然后给出自己举出的可能性的回答。
It is good to let employees to learn a new skill for the company, as the author proposes, the faster reading course may be useful. However, the recommendation is ambiguous and full of flaws, not only these reasons undermines the purpose of the author, but also telling people that this recommendation is only for commercial processshould not be considered. The author must answer the above questions, so that the recommendation will be even more convincible.

Two examples is not correct;
Faster reading is not good than understand info
Everyone need to take it? Price? Deficit?
作者对语言的运用还是略显生疏，很多地方显得比较生硬，不知道作者准备作何补救，虽然ＡＷ并不直接考察语言，但语言表达的高低肯定会影响分数的

-- by 会员竹林中人 (2012/12/22 0:28:38)

因为我没背模板，所以没有用到特殊的语句，基本上是用自己的话去写。所以显得不够专业。

有一个comment我看不懂：
前面这个例子题目的意思在于这个课程是有效的，能够增加rendering阅读速度的，因此有一个比较的问题，但在这里并没有交代，所以你最直接的质疑是关于比较的问题，有比较才说明问题。
这里你想我怎么改？根据之前的那句话好像连不上你这句comment，所以想问问。

-- by 会员麻倉枼 (2012/12/22 2:25:43)

我的意思是你质疑的方向偏了点，最直接的是题目中没有比较

-- by 会员竹林中人 (2012/12/22 12:32:15)

还有的是，comment我都看了，我该要走下一步呢？是搁置这个topic，选择新的topic做？还是重写？还是现在应该要看issue了？alternative explaination我还没试过写，也不知道怎么写。。不知道有没有范文可以看看？另外的是阅读方面，逻辑十套真的很揪心。。我不知道是不是自己阅读能力差了，现在做题不能够16分解决了。。

麻倉枼 · 发表于 2012-12-24 04:06:12

Acme Publishing Company VS. Speed-Reading Course

(33min 18sec, 573 words)

The following is a recommendation from the personnel director to the president of Acme Publishing Company.
"Many other companies have recently stated that having their employees take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course has greatly improved productivity. One graduate of the course was able to read a 500-page report in only two hours; another graduate rose from an assistant manager to vice president of the company in under a year. Obviously, the faster you can read, the more information you can absorb in a single workday. Moreover, Easy Read would cost Acme only $500 per employee—a small price to pay when you consider the benefits. Included in this fee is a three-week seminar in Spruce City and a lifelong subscription to the Easy Read newsletter. Clearly, to improve productivity, Acme should require all of our employees to take the Easy Read course."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.

While it may seems seem the recommendation 这句话不完整啊from the personnel director necessary that Acme Publishing Company should propose every employee to take the Easy Read Speed-Reading Course.By taking the不要the close scrutiny of the recommendation, I found it is rife of with flaws in its assumptions, and there are many questions that the author must be answeredanswer in order to prove its reliability.credibility.
First of all, the author provides two examples of people gaining their success to tell that the course is useful and effective. However, the assumption is full of flaws and it is unclear to me. For example, the graduate who reads 500 pages in two hours fails to provide the information of what kind of book he/she is reading; perhaps the book is in elementary level that each page only contains few lines. 前面这个例子题目的意思在于这个课程是有效的，能够增加rendering阅读速度的，因此有一个比较的问题，但在这里并没有交代，所以你最直接的质疑是关于比较的问题，有比较才说明问题The other example is even more nebulous to me – perhaps the person is successful because he is excellent in managing the company, or perhaps he obtains special skills that nobody has in the company. The example thus shows that the author must answer this question: how is the quality of the course? If the author doesn’t provide specific information（如果你能对这个specific information举出一两个小例子就比较好） to answer this question, the recommendation will not be persuasive.
Secondly, the author thinks that faster reading will allow people to obtain more information, thus people increase their productivity in work. However, the faster a person reads, the higher chance that the person miss misses important information，argument中不要有个人认知方面的语句，即使要写，最好不写成肯定句，最好是带有探讨性口气的，比如possible等，这里题目认为是读的速度跟信息摄取能力相关，你提的问题就是是否必然相关，需要什么样的信息才可以说明.; the author overlooks the fact that understanding the contents and absorbing useful information is more important absorbing every bit of information. In this case, why is the course important to people? In what area that is related to work does a person improve from having this course? The author must provide specific detail about what materials the course will teach, and how the course enhances people’s ability for their work, and what kind of work will have better benefit from learning fast reading. Otherwise, I will not support author’s recommendation based on that.
At last, the author provides an assumption that all employees from the company should take the course, when the price is $500 per employee. It may seem exciting that if everyone learns the skill, then it will be beneficial to the company. However, as I mention above, this assumption also fails to realize the fact that not everyone is necessary to take the course. This fact comes with another the other questions: if everyone is necessary to take the course, what will happen to the company during the period when everyone is out of work and having the class? Is the course really beneficial to the company? How many people will be taking the course? Will it be possible that because of the uncertainty of the quality of the course and large number of employees who take the course, the company faces a deficit? The author must answer these questions and provide reliable data such the number of people in the company who need to take the course, how will the company gain advantage from this course, etc. in order to strength his assumption. Otherwise, this assumption will only undermine the author’s purpose.
虽然是关于question的题目，但也不要太多问题，一段里面两个足以，然后给出自己举出的可能性的回答。
It is good to let employees to learn a new skill for the company, as the author proposes, the faster reading course may be useful. However, the recommendation is ambiguous and full of flaws, not only these reasons undermines the purpose of the author, but also telling people that this recommendation is only for commercial processshould not be considered. The author must answer the above questions, so that the recommendation will be even more convincible.

Two examples is not correct;
Faster reading is not good than understand info
Everyone need to take it? Price? Deficit?
作者对语言的运用还是略显生疏，很多地方显得比较生硬，不知道作者准备作何补救，虽然ＡＷ并不直接考察语言，但语言表达的高低肯定会影响分数的

-- by 会员竹林中人 (2012/12/22 0:28:38)

因为我没背模板，所以没有用到特殊的语句，基本上是用自己的话去写。所以显得不够专业。

有一个comment我看不懂：
前面这个例子题目的意思在于这个课程是有效的，能够增加rendering阅读速度的，因此有一个比较的问题，但在这里并没有交代，所以你最直接的质疑是关于比较的问题，有比较才说明问题。
这里你想我怎么改？根据之前的那句话好像连不上你这句comment，所以想问问。

-- by 会员麻倉枼 (2012/12/22 2:25:43)

我的意思是你质疑的方向偏了点，最直接的是题目中没有比较

-- by 会员竹林中人 (2012/12/22 12:32:15)

我说现在comment也看了，我下一步该是重写还是找新的一篇做？还是开始读issue好了？另外有没有alternative explanation的范文？好像只有evidence和s/u assumption而已。。

竹林中人 · 发表于 2012-12-24 10:18:43

没关系，尝试着自己写吧。

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