[求助]TWE089

这篇文章是我根据前人的作文和pumkin给的资料改写的，请大家看看这样的结构语言可以吗？谢谢！

Countless people made great contribution to our social civilization and improved the social development. Young people can learn a lot from them. If you had a chance to meet one of them from history, who would you choose? People would make different dicisions due to their respective emotional concerns and personal angles. As far as I am concerns, I want to meet Yingzheng, the first emperor of Qin Dynasty. There are numerous reasons why I choose him, and I would explore only a few of the most important ones here since listing them all might use up my time.

The most obvious reason for me to choose Yingzheng is that he was the first person to establish a unified, multi-nationals, autocratic and power-centralized state, Qin Dynasty, in Chinese history. Yingzheng, the king of Qin state, conquered other six dukes through ten years of war and brought an end to the riotous Warring States Period in 221 BC. Although Qin is a short dynasty with a span of only fifteen years, it started 2,000-year-long imperial history in China and exerted a far of influence on the subsequent dynasties. Except for the frontiers in the west, southwest and northwest, Qin's territory has been kept fairly intact up to present-day.

Yingzheng's political achievement is another head and chief reason why I want to meet this great emperor. After unifying the country, he carried out a series of political reforms. He built up a central government to rule all the country, and this government was ruled by the emperor himself. He standardized the measurement of weight and length, written script, legal system and currency. And to protect the northern frontier, he supervised the construction of the Great Wall, one of the most famous architectures in history.

Despite for all great jobs he did, Emperor Qin ruled as a ruthless tyrant. He burnt most of books in the country to standardize human thoughts and prevent freethinking. And he imposed heavy taxes and constrained many people to work on the Great Wall. Furthermore, he also spent much money and labors to construct his mausoleum. But in my opinion, his contributions overweigh his tyranny.

Given the factors I have just outlined, I can only say that I am eager to meet this great emperor, Yingzheng. He was such a myth that I want to dig out what he thought. Was he like the role presented in the movie Hero?

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