第一次发issue，求狠拍求板砖！！

meow12345 · 发表于 2012-9-19 00:00:41

Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the wills of the people whom they serve.

The speaker states that government official should rely on their own judgment instead of carrying out the will of the people indiscriminately. Though carrying out of the will of any group in an indiscriminate fashion is dangerous, a government that completely relies on decisions made internally while ignoring the people is synonymous to dictatorship and tyranny.

The main function of any government is to serve its people, whose wills should be placed first priority of that government. Officials may claim that since they have more information on national or international issues they could better determine what is good for the country. People in society, however, are not oblivion to the problems they face. Sometimes interests of the government differ from those of the people; and under such circumstances the government should respect the people and take their interests into consideration.

During the 1960’s, the U.S. government was trapped in a gruesome war with Vietnam. Thousands of young men died in a failed effort to eradicate communism in a foreign country. Many, especially the younger generation and the injured veterans, started questioning the cause of the war and asked for peace. At the beginning the government ignored such protests and insisted on sending more enforcement to Vietnam. The peaceful demonstrations soon escalated into violent unrest in some cities. The government finally decided to withdraw troop from Vietnam, yielding to public interests in peace. That period of conflict between war and peace has been documented in many movies and songs, as a representation of the American freedom and a government that listens to its people at last.

A counter example to the U.S. government is the former Soviet Union, whose government was in control of an elite group not elected by the people. The government of Soviet Union attempted to modulate a Utopian society according to Marxism. Individual freedom and happiness were supposed to be secondary to the collective benefit of the country, albeit the fact that in its last decade the “collective benefits” usually represented profit for the elite group running the government. Such systematic ignorance of public interest led to the ultimate deterioration of the Soviet Union, and in 1990 Moscow announced annulation of communism.

In a democratic society, the people select officials who will serve the public and uphold the interests of the people. Any government that bypasses public opinion in decision making will as a result lose the faith from its people and thus support. This phenomenon is best addressed by Abraham Lincoln, “ that a government of the people, by the people, for the people, shall not perish from the earth".

竹林中人 · 发表于 2012-9-19 09:27:54

例子不应该成为文章的主要部分，它只是辅助作用而已，中间段落你要自己的分论点，另外例子也不要像讲故事那么细致，点到为止，需要分析深入的分析一两句就好。

普渡哥 · 发表于 2012-9-19 09:51:59

加一些连贯次和转折词

meow12345 · 发表于 2012-9-19 23:33:56

Though many believe that elected government officials are outstanding individuals who can make better judgment on their own, completely relying on a group of elite in decision making for a country will lead to ignorance of the need of the people and ultimately collapse of that society. Successful democratic societies are marked by officials yielding to public opinions. And on the contrary, tyrannical governments are being overthrown because the people’s needs were neglected by the dictators.
Being one of the most influential democratic societies in the world, the United States has the long held tradition of politicians obeying the voice of the people and making adjustment to their agendas. There have been times that people in U.S. questioned authority, for example during the Vietnam War. Despite initial struggle to maintain the war, the government withdrew troops from Vietnam and pacified its citizens. Such struggle between the government and the people is not uncommon throughout U.S. history, and the country only becomes stronger after the people’s wills are satisfied.
One counter example to the U.S. is the former Soviet Union, where a group of elite made decision on the nation’s future while controlling behavior of their people. Any resistance to the elites was eradicated, sometimes via brutal force. In the end, it was the neglected and infuriated citizen in the Soviet nations that torn down the iron curtain and established democracy in those regions. This example illustrates that leaving the fate of a nation to a group of elite is not only irresponsible, but also dangerous to the future of the nation as a whole.
The history of any political society can be explained as a struggle of power between the government and the people. Only when the people’s wills are met, will they support the government. Therefore government officials should always keep in mind the wills of the people whom they serve while making judgments.

改了一下，是不是有点短了啊？

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