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[作文互改] 求拍!!狠拍!issue33.。。已经崩溃了

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发表于 2012-3-11 15:15:52 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
四月考试,现在写下了第一篇issue,同学看了下,指出了一堆的语法错误,更不用说逻辑了。。迷茫中,改怎么提高呢?望批改着在批改的同时,指导学习方法,不胜感激。我觉得我这篇两分都不一定有。。。恨啊,求助!
As we acquire more knowledge, things do notbecome more comprehensible, but more complex and mysterious.

In the history, there isno period in which people could know such a lot of things about the world. It is no doubt that knowledge changed the world. Consider we live in the primitive society, we know nothingabout the electrical world but conflicting with the wild. Fortunately, We livein such a modern world that we know why a apple just falls down to the groundother than float in the air, and why the sun rise in the daytime and miss atnight.We are indeed becoming more and more wisdom with the increasingknowledge.
        However,sometimes We may be confused about the world because of our increasingknowledge. For instance,Take learning a languagefor a example, when we first know about a language, we may think it is easybecause it is just make up of several words and sentences with which we couldcommunicate with others. Nonetheless, language will become more and morecomplex with the increase of your growing knowledge about it. You will find itbeautiful in a essay but logical in a argument. We, as a human being, like afrog who initially live the bottom of the well, knowing narrowly about a littlepart of the sky through the mouth of well we can see. Once we get out of thewell, we will see much more of the blue sky. 这个例子。。。
Things becomemore complex and mysterious while we know more. It is a long process to acquirelarge amount of knowledge. Now you could stand at another stage of knowledge tounderstand the complexity of them. For instance, before the experiment of Galileogalley`s dropping two different weight ball from the Leaning Tower of Pisa,nobody would doubt the fault conclusion about the time falling down to theground.
It is no doubt that the knowledge make things becomemore comprehensible, so that we could live in a more convenient world. but themysterious of the things make us more curious about the world, which promotethe advance of human absolutely. We should give knowledge a big huge instead ofrejection.
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沙发
发表于 2012-3-12 10:19:05 | 只看该作者
It is no doubt that the knowledge make things becomemore comprehensible,

make 应该是makes。。

这也太短了吧。
板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2012-3-14 11:03:44 | 只看该作者
It is no doubt that the knowledge make things becomemore comprehensible,

make 应该是makes。。

这也太短了吧。
-- by 会员 普渡哥 (2012/3/12 10:19:05)

惭愧。。。。今天在竹林的建议下看了北美范文,收益很多。
语言很chinglish,有什么办法提高,比如背范文?有没好的建议呢~谢谢普渡哥了!
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