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2号新加坡G的，本来想早点写，考的不是很好心情不爽，现在还是做点贡献吧
以下两篇作文是本人自己定时用ETS的Score it Now评分的，正式评分是这个软件和一个老师一起给分，所以有参考价值：
A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how those examples shape your position.
Your Answer:Impeded by unified curriculum, endemic areas with high quality teaching resources have to compromise with inferior regions referring to education. Nonetheless, with the help of same national curriculum, teaching resources can be distributed more evenly and fairly, and uniform standard pertaining to matriculation can be achieved to keep the justice. Therefore, although using the same national curriculum may impair the efficacy in some degrees, it is still a crucial and peerless method for a nation to take into account.
Undeniably, different areas have different resources, such as economic difference, teaching staff quality, financial aids, and so forth. By utilizing those advantages to improve the quality of education, it is obvious that more students in such developed regions would enjoy superior resources, as a consequence of which students would construct their knowledge structure more comprehensively and completely. For instance, in the process of learning and dealing with daily problems with computer, more students get more familiar with high technology and this would increase their core competitiveness when they enter college, compared with those who cannot garner the chance to use such technology.
Scarcely do people, however, especially those who emphasize and idolize too much on high quality of education, consider the fact that differential resources distribution may increase the pressure for colleges to select students they want, because disparate curriculum cause different standards for matriculation, and it is very hard for colleges to choose students that are really experienced and qualified. Additionally, divergent standards cannot assure the justice for every student. Fortunately, once such problems are realized by more citizens, the call for the same national curriculum is around the corner.
If a nation requires all students to study the same national curriculum before college, places with less resources can have the same curriculum with advance regions. Best paradigm for this issue is China, which requires uniform curriculum in every high school. Such requirement provides monumental chances to those impoverished families to send their children to college. By doing in this way, every student has the same chance to change their life.
In sum, a nation should require all students to study the same national curriculum, although some sacrifice must be done. When consider the method and standard way to select students to college, justice is the primary factor that every nation should take into account.
The following is a memorandum from the business manager of a television station.
"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have just canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
Your Answer:In this memo, the business manager concludes that in order to appeal more viewers and to eschew losing advertising revenues, more time referring to weather and local news should be used to former level. The conclusion may seem plausible at first glance, however, close scrutiny of those evidences given by the manager reveals that the conclusion may be inaccurate and untenable.
First, the manager mentions that after the program concentrated more on the national news, most complaints from viewers are related to the coverage of weather and local news. Nonetheless, the memo gives no hints that whether the number of complaints increased or decreased. Perhaps many readers are content with national news, as a result, the number of complaints descent a lot and mainly remaining complaints are pertaining to the weather and local news. If no information about this specific data is provided, the memo might be misunderstanding for many people and the validity of the conclusion would be impaired.
Second, the memo mentions that local businesses revoked advertising contracts with the program after weather and local news were less than before. Yet, it is possible that the change of the program might not be the reason that led to less contract. Perhaps local business ameliorated and improved a lot during that time and there was no need to advertise more. To strengthen the manager's conclusion, the reason why local businesses cancelled contracts should be given in the memo to substantiate that it was the less weather and local news rather than other possible reasons that led to the result.
In addition, even assuming above two so-called evidences are all valid and reliable, it might be too harsh and brusque for the manager to assert that situation would be mitigated if more time are devoted to weather and local news. The evidences given in the memo happened several years ago, so current situation might be totally disparate. If there is less and less local business, it might be useless to reemphasize much on local news because there are insufficient businesses. To strengthen the conclusion, evidence must be given to show that no big changes happened in the local business.
In sum, the validity of the conclusion is not that tenable and strong. To strengthen the conclusion, the manager should provide enough examples and and data to show that more viewers are discontent with the local and weather news, and the reasons why less contracts happened. Otherwise, the conclusion is untenable and misunderstanding.
不敢说写的好，两个给的都是4分
在此我说说自己研究OG AW评分的经验：
只说最重要的一点，看ARGU ISSUE评分标准，突破点在4分5分之间，其中都强调connection（参照OG，绝对无误！！）就是说，展现段落之间的连贯性和思维的渐进递进性是4到5的核心要求，其它的语法 观点 词汇 这些都是屁话，当然越好的得分越高，不过connection绝对是硬伤
所以说，我个人在写ISSUE时正反之间都有一段过渡，然后ARGU多用even assuming that。。。,或While... However, even...很有用。所谓的First, Secondly, finally..这样开头的只能体现思维的同步性，递进性和段落之间的connection少之又少，只是反驳事例的累加，这样很难再上升的（个人意见）
太晚了，仅提供一点ETS给出的成绩参考和我的个人感受，鸡精什么的睡后再说吧。 |
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