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独立写作 I123 写作功底实在不好,求各位大仙狠拍~~!

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发表于 2011-11-2 11:36:19 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式

还剩没多少天就考试了,作文实在不好~ 麻烦大家帮我看看,狠拍,如果能帮我改改,那就万分感激,痛苦涕零了~~~TT...谢谢大家啦~~

123.Do you agree or disagree with thefollowing statement? People should read only those books that are about realevents, real people, and established facts. Use specific reasons and details tosuport your opinion.

Some people believe that people should readonly those books that are about real events, people, and established facts. Butto be frank, I cannot fully agree with this viewpoint. I prefer to say that mayother types of books are also worthy for us to get acknowledge and closely relatedto our lives.

In the first place, there is no doubt thatthose books referring to real events, people, and established facts could giveus much experience about life, we can avoid taking many mistakes based on allthese real examples. Case that by learning about the story of previous hero, wecan be inspired in many aspects of our lives, we work and study hard in orderto be a person as respective as the hero whom we appreciate. Many historyevents show us valuable experience and conduct us to a more efficiency way toachieve our life goals. And the knowledge of established facts would help usestablish our knowledge system and be more logical thinking. All of theseadvantages of reading realistic books do good to our better surviving in thecontemporary society.

However, it cannot deny that some otherkinds of books also play an important role in building up human's mental world.Some books are made up in fiction for special purpose to enlighten people'sthinking. For instance, when I was young, I got into the habit of listening tofable before sleeping. Mom told lots of interesting stories to me, a littleyoung girl. Even I was too young to totally understand the implied meaning ofthem, it have a great influence on the formation of my personal value opinion.Mom taught me what is right and what is wrong by reading these fables to me. Thefictional form of books is more flexible in instructional significance.

In addition, the fictional books helpimprove people's imagination and creative abilities. When people reading a novel,they can easily relax themselves and let the imagination run free with the plotof story. Although the story may different from the realistic condition, theyreally got pleasure from the reading. Maybe that is the reason why so manypeople like reading fiction novels in their spare time. The creative ability isof importance for a country and nation's development. We can never got betteris we are not imagine a better life. Thus, the important significant of readingfiction books cannot be ignored.

In a word, people should not only readbooks referring to real events, people, and established facts, the other kindsof fictional books should also be taken into consideration. Ignoring either kindof books will surely lead to an imbalance in people's mental world.
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沙发
发表于 2011-11-2 20:34:55 | 只看该作者
不废话,我就说一个,LZ你方向没搞对,题目不是fictional和realistic对比,取非之后包括抒情散文啊,浪漫主义诗歌之类都不需要,你这么论述偏面,而且语法、用词错误,语义重复都不想说了,拜托先查查字典好不,就算掐时间写的,写完了也应该查字典,不会的词别瞎掰,道理说了一大堆,就举了个没啥说服力的例子。LZ的一个通病大家都有,应该是中国人都会有且很普遍,就是脑子里的思路什么全中文的,然后想到了在翻译成英语,这可是大忌!你是在改不了就尽量克制,想一种符合你英语水平的同义表达。 我个人给分就2.5吧。3分是基准分,大部分文章都是3,文章中心思想有点偏了,所以低于这个平均。
板凳
 楼主| 发表于 2011-11-2 20:37:39 | 只看该作者
好的,十分十分感谢,我一定好好琢磨琢磨。
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