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时日无多,刚开作文。TPO17综合一篇,恳请大家不吝赐教。

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发表于 2011-10-22 15:29:35 | 只看该作者 回帖奖励 |倒序浏览 |阅读模式
第一次写托福作文,感觉写得很水;小错误挺多,但都以改正。请大家帮我看看~
The reading material believes that the trend of increasing human population and agriculture activities will make the number of wildlife, especially the birds, continue to decrease; however, the professor in the lecture refutes this idea.She contends that the conclusion stated above is unconvincing.


First, the passage suggests that birds' habitats will keep varnishing due to the expanding of human populations and their settlements.On the contrary, the professor argues that, in fact, the development of urban provides better habitats of birds.Although some kinds of birds fail to adapt the new circumstance, other types' population is growing.For example, you can always see the pigeons flying when you walk in the street.


Second, another important point showed in the listening material is that not only the land for agriculture has been decreasing every year, but also the productive crops that can help increase the yield each field has been researched.This viewpoint is contrary to the idea presented in the reading that the birds’ population in the rural will decline continuously for the increasing of the agriculture simultaneously.


Third, the professor argues against the perspective in the passage that the corresponding surge in the use of chemical pesticides must be occurred by saying that there two obvious changes in the agriculture process.For one thing, the pesticide are becoming less toxic than before; for another, more and more pesticide-resist crops are planted.Therefore, because of the marriage between two changes, the trend of being harmed in birds will definitely be cut.
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 楼主| 发表于 2011-10-22 15:58:56 | 只看该作者
板凳
发表于 2011-11-1 14:37:21 | 只看该作者
该作文我没写过,但是如果听力的驳斥点全写了字数也够了就足够fair了。但LZ也就是fair的级别。
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