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709591949 · 发表于 2010-5-28 22:11:51

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107. people believe that a college or university education should be available to all students. Others believe that higher education should be available only to good students. Discuss these views. Which view do you agree with? Explain why.

The popularity of higher education is currently the subject of intense debate in my country-China. It appears that, however, people have paid too much passion on the result of the issue to forget their initial purpose for higher education. As a student of university who majors in economics, I carefully evaluate the profits and cost of popularity of higher education to all students with practical conduct and personal experience, arriving at the conclusion that restricting higher education only to good students would be wiser.

First of all, what a student could attain from higher education would be discounted after popularity of higher education, after all, resource available to education is by no means infinite and a diploma owned by everyone could hardly make its owner outstanding from others. Owing to the policy to “industrialize” education set by government in recent years, more and more students obtain opportunities to enter university. What accompanies such glory is not, however, treatment of “heaven’s favored ones” as they dreamed of, but the increasing difficulty to find jobs.

The improvement of software for education is far more difficult from melioration of hardware since this is never simply a case of money. With increasing number of university students, government could solve the problem of lodging and teaching building with raising expenditure but could not deal with the shortage of qualified teachers. And the result is students seldom have chance to communicate with their professors and the only way they learn from them is through lecture given to hundreds of students once. Most of students resort to internet or library to solve their academic problems rather than exchanging ideas with tutors, and what is worse, quite a number of students just give up exploring. If all issues could be solved by computer and library, what would on earth the function of university education be? The limited resource make it more difficult for a student to grasp a specialize skill or develop academic ability.

Now that the graduates lack practical skill or academic ability, the dream of finding a good job simply with a diploma would without doubt broke up when nearly everybody holds such diploma in labor market once higher education is available to all students. At that time, diploma would be merely a piece of paper rather than a passport to job; seeking such diploma would be solely a waste of time and money rather than demonstration of capability.

Furthermore, from the aspect of society, making higher education to all students would be fairly probable a waste of resource and produces more problems than it can solve. HONG KONG-Opinion polls in China in the past year have generally listed the country’s higher education as one of the three major targets of growing public discontent. The money could have been contributed to, say, vocational education which would solve the problem of factory’s shortage of skilled workers, as well as students’ jobless. At the same time, high education might raise graduates’ expectation of offer which would exacerbate condition.

I do not mean to deny the wonderful expectation of high education available to all students; more people entering university will be a sigh of prosperous of a country’s material prosperity and spiritual values and also the nationals’ quality will be promoted. Whereas, we had better take cost and benefit, the whole society’s welfare and urgent demand into first consideration.

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