102.Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives, capitalized on her keen observation and love of the natural world.
(A) Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives,
(B) In her book illustrations, carefully coordinating them with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
(C) In her book illustrations, which she carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter
(D) Carefully coordinated with her narratives, Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations
(E) Beatrix Potter, in her book illustrations, carefully coordinated them with her narratives and
Logical predication + Rhetorical construction
This sentence awkwardly presents two phrases intended to modify Beatrix Potter and loses the clarity and logic of the meaning. In the original sentence, these modifiers sound choppy and create too much separation between the subject, Beatrix Potter, and the verb capitalized Beginning the sentence with in her book illustrations and following that phrase with the relative clause which she carefully coordinated with her narratives allows the subject, Beatrix Potter, to be united with the verb, capitalized, for a stronger main clause.
A The modifying elements are poorly placed and leave the subject too far from the verb
B Phrase carefully coordinating ... illogically modifies the noun that immediately precedes it (book illustrations); Potter, not the illustrations, did the coordinating; awkward and unclear
C Correct. The correct placement of the modifying elements makes this sentence easier to understand; the use of which clearly links the two elements.
D Carefully coordinated ... absurdly modifies Beatrix Potter rather than her illustrations
E Them cannot refer to book illustrations because the plural noun is the object of the preposition in; the relationships among the parts of the sentence are unclear