请各位帮我看看作文吧。给些意见

请各位帮我看看作文吧。给些意见。这是我第一次写，是综合写作，og上的例子，在282页。马上就考试了（3月），我很急啊，自己知道自己的水平差，请大家多指导。谢谢各位。不用留情面，狠些没关系啊。

这是写的：

The author of the reading passage introduce us a the altruism in the animal world. The author says that it is the opposite of the selfish. But in the listening passage, it gives us anther kind of point of view.

  In the reading passage, it gives us a couple of examples of the altruist behaviors in the animal world, such as meerkat, human, etc. They always sacrifice themselves, even their lives, to ensure others’ safety without repaying. Like meerkat, when they are eating food, there is always one meerkat stand over there for alarming others’ safety. Despite of this, it will get nothing even food. This is a typical altruism. And the passage tells us there are such things in the human’s society too.

  But in the listening passage, it has the opposite points about the altruism. Although it seems like one will get nothing when the altruist behaviors happens, one get a kind of non-material repay, such as the respect, help from others actually. It tell us a more profound thinking of meaning of the altruism.

字数177。我现在就是写不出来什么，比较着急。

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