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呼唤高手啊~~~170 Why are groups or organizations important to people?

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楼主
发表于 2007-12-29 20:20:00 | 只看该作者

呼唤高手啊~~~170 Why are groups or organizations important to people?

帮我看看有什么比较低级的词可以被替换的,或者中国式英文论证的~~~~~拜托帮我改改啊~~~~~~~~

170 Groups or organizations are an important part of some people's lives. Why are groups or organizations important to people? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your answer

 

The issue of whether the groups play an important part in people’s lives is a controversial one. Facing this question, different people have various answers relying on personal experience and individual preference. I stand with those who extol the merits of organization with potent reasons.

 

One crucial point worth mentioning is that when one joins an organization, he/she will be benefited from sharing information and knowledge with each other. As far as I concerned, the knowledge system of people is vary from one to another. In this world of which the knowledge accumulated multiplying, we may skilled in one or two special majors of which we can give others’ some professional advice, on the contrary, fail to be profession in countless fields. Furthermore, we would be incapable of collecting all the information we interested by ourselves. To give a demonstration, I can share my new works with my friends in organization of painting and have kindly suggestions from them. Via this avenue, I could improve my skill in painting rapidly. This is the case in point.   

 

To such a paramount reason, another must be added. Being a number of a group is an excellent way for us to have a relaxation after a whole day work with more friends who have the same avocation. The purposes of founding an organization are to provide people not only opportunities to communicate
                        
in special themes but also occasions to
have more friends and funs in leisure time. Take the case overhead as an example again, after we talking about the painting, we may have a picnic in the idyllic country, enjoy the twittering of birds, the slight of sun glinting in the tree. During the charming time like this, gradually I got well know of other numbers, eventually, some of them are my best friends till now.

 

From the virtues have been discussed above, I sternly support the statement that organization is crucial for a person’s life.


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沙发
 楼主| 发表于 2007-12-30 17:24:00 | 只看该作者

为什么只有人看,没有人提意见呢?

难道是因为写的太烂~~~~~~~~~~~~~

板凳
发表于 2008-1-5 02:24:00 | 只看该作者
The issue of whether the groups play an important part(role) in people’s lives is a controversial one. Facing this question, different people have various answers relying on personal experience and individual preference. I stand with those who extol the merits of organization with potent reasons.( One is unable  to forget the benifit and merit of the groups which contribute to our human being.)
地板
发表于 2008-1-5 02:28:00 | 只看该作者

You should avoid to use "I" and makes the essay having 5 paragraphy !

intro, body with 3 points and three supports for each point, conclusion!

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www.helpme123.com

I used to use it to improve my writing~

5#
 楼主| 发表于 2008-1-5 22:03:00 | 只看该作者

谢谢.但是如果我中间分三段大概就没时间写了啊

呵呵~~~你觉得这样文章可以得几分呢大概

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