[原创]根据11月3日独立作文题目写的文章！诚恳求拍！

Recently, a hot debate rises over whether the rich who do not work are happy or not. When facing this problem, different people hold various opinions due to their distinct backgrounds and experiences. Some people advocate enthusiastically that they should be happy for they have a large sum of money, whereas others are skeptical about it. As far as I concern, in long term, they will not be pleased as people anticipate.

    Admittedly, with such enormous sum of fortune, people will be happy within a short time. since they do not need to worry about anything. Unlike normal people under pressure, they can hang out with their friends in luxurious cars, attend a party in expensive suit and even have a trip around the world since they have no work to do. Just only one thing they should care about, that is how to spend their time and money, which they only own. At first glance, it is in indeed a joyful life that everybody goes in for.

     However, hardly can one people be really happy in a long time if he has nothing to work, in spite of lots of money. People, however, in such conditions will gradually find they achieve nothing but void in their life and they will get lost in life as time goes by. Not much to our surprise, loneliness will capture them in the end and ruin their life. For example, a lot of youngsters in China, who inherit the fortune from their parent, they wander in the street, campus, or just stare at the computer screen for a long time. They do not have life goals. Therefore, it's not beneficial for one who do not work, especially our young people.

      Moreover, it's the work distinguishes animals and human beings. Work can make one perfect and help fulfill his life aim as well. Few can achieve success if he stands in the same point as he did yesterday, just like a ship getting lost in the spacious ocean. We can see many famous people in the history reach their destination through hard work. For instance, Abraham Lincoln, who failed in quite a few fields, finally became the president of USA through his endless hard work. As a result, in my view, hard work eclipse all other elements in one's life in importance,

     To sum it up, for what have been discussed above, considering merits the hard work has, we can safely reach a conclusion that people should work to fill his life, no matter how much money he owns. Otherwise you will lag behind the step of our society.

我跟下帖子吧，我看了LZ的作文，等会我会好好写评语的，然后我也写了一篇LZ如果有空也给我改下吧。。。借LZ地盘了，哈哈

People who do not work because they have money are rarely happy. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.
                

My neighbor is a rich old man who live in a big house, drive a luxurious car and wear name-brand suits, but he has never earned even one dollar through his life. When he inherited the fortune from his father, he thought the huge money could bring him joys and comforts and he did not need to work at all. Time flies, when he becomes an elder man, he always fell empty, no sense of achievement and no aim of life. Now, sorrow, depression and frustration are awash his life. He always tell us how he regrets he did not work when he was young. From the story of my neighbor I strongly hold the claim that people who do not work will rarely obtain real happiness.

On the one hand, although the people who do not work still can maintain a good substantial life, they will fell empty in their spiritual life. We have to recognize that one of the aim of work is to earn money, but, in turn, work will bring us things far beyond money, such as a sense of satisfy, the happiness of success, the respect of others, and the pursue of life, to list just a few. If people who have never worked because they have money, they only can get the things bought by money but they will never fell the happiness beyond money. Moreover, if The pleasures of idleness soon cloy, they may hit some bad habits. For instants, they are indulged in the red wine for forgetting the nonsense of life,  they are addicted in drugs for kicks, or they watch some films are gratuitous violence and pornography. If these small bad habits are not controlled in proper ways, they may the source of some heinous crimes.

On the other hand, if people don’t attend work, they will not experience the hardship of life, namely that they will not know how fantastic their life is. Affluent life makes people more vulnerable. When people who do not work experienced some frustration, they will easily be knocked down. Then they will complain the unfair of life and no courage to live on the world. That is the reason why the survey show us that the rich men, especially who do not work, are more likely get depression. In turn, if people who attend work, they will learn some skills about how to surmount the difficulties, they will know how to face troubles and they can deal with the frustrations easily. When they are in front of difficulties, what they think is how to conquer the difficulties and challenge themselves instead give up life. After they success, they will more cherish the rest life and enjoy the life as much as they can.

In conclusion, if people want to enjoy not only the substantial life but also the spiritual life and want to know the nature of life and happiness ,they would better to work and earn the money by themselves. Then they will get the acquisition far beyond the work itself.

我仔细读了下LZ的文章，觉得语言还挺流畅。我觉得第一段第二段和第四段衔接不上。

从开头写的就是过奢华的日子只能带来短暂的快乐，而不能带来长久的快乐。然后第二段就写了，如何能带来短暂的快乐。用了一个过渡句来承接了一下第三段，又说这种短暂的快乐会很快就过去的，继而被空虚所取代。但是我觉得第四段和前两段衔接的不好。按照你说的好像就是要说快乐是短暂的然后后面都来论述这为什么是短暂的。而你第四段却开始写work怎么样能给人来来成就，压根就没提快乐。

我觉得第四段不妨写，你觉得能让人永恒的快乐不是一个劲的消费，大房子，跑车，穿名牌也就是不是物质上的而是精神上的。比如a sense of achievement, a sense of secuity and satisfication什么的。然后说只有这些才能使人真正快乐，等老了回忆起来才觉得人生有价值，得到了人生快乐的真谛什么的。

People who do not work because they have money are rarely happy. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.

My neighbor is a rich old man who lives in a big house, drive a luxurious car and wear name-brand suits, but he has never earned even one dollar through his life. When he inherited the fortune from his father, he thought the huge money could bring him joys and comforts and he did not need to work at all. Time flies, when he becomes an elder man, he often feels empty, no sense of achievement and no aim of life. Now, sorrow, depression and frustration are awash his life. He always tells us how he regrets he did not work when he was young. From the story of my neighbor I strongly hold the claim that people who do not work will rarely obtain real happiness.

（开头例子挺好的，但是最好不要直接以事例开头，可以先议论下）

On the one hand, although the people who do not work still can maintain a good substantial life, they will fell empty in their spiritual life. We have to recognize that one of the aim of work is to earn money, but, in turn, work will bring us things far beyond money, such as a sense of satisfy, the happiness of success, the respect of others, and the pursue of life, to list just a few(这个用法没见过呵呵). If people who have never worked because they have money, they only can get the things bought by money but they will never fell the happiness beyond money. Moreover, if the pleasures of idleness soon cloy, they may hit some bad habits. For instants, they will be indulged in the red wine for forgetting the nonsense of life, they may be addicted in drugs for kicks, or they might watch some films which are gratuitous violence and pornography. If these small bad habits are not controlled in proper ways, they may be the source of some heinous crimes.(然后应该再联系下happy方面)

这段不错，就是最后不说到happy就偏题了。

On the other hand, if people don’t attend work, they will not experience the hardship of life, namely that they will not know how fantastic their life is. Affluent life makes people more vulnerable. When people who do not work but live in a wealthy live experienced some frustration, they will easily be knocked down. Then they will complain the unfair life and have no courage to continue living on the world. That is the reason why a survey shows us that the rich men, especially who do not work, are more likely to get depression. In turn(用过了On the contrary), if people who attend work, they will learn some skills about how to surmount the difficulties, they will know how to face troubles and then they can deal with the frustrations more easily. When they are in front of difficulties, what they think is how to conquer the difficulties and challenge themselves instead of giving up life. After they success, they will more cherish the rest life and enjoy the life as much as they can.

(这段也不错，但是还是要记得最后联系下题目)

In conclusion, if people want to enjoy not only the substantial life but also the spiritual life and want to know the nature of life and happiness, they’d  better to work and earn money by themselves. Then they will get the acquisition far beyond the work itself.

(总结最后也是要扣题，因为这个是讨论型题目，不是自由型的)

People who do not work because they have money are rarely happy. Do you agree or disagree with this statement.

My neighbor is a rich old man who live in a big house, drive a luxurious car and wear name-brand suits, but he has never earned even one dollar through his life. When he inherited the fortune from his father, he thought the huge money could bring him joys and comforts and he did not need to work at all. Time flies, when he becomes an elder man, he always fell empty, no sense of achievement and no aim of life. Now, sorrow, depression and frustration are awash his life. He always tell us how he regrets he did not work when he was young. From the story of my neighbor I strongly hold the claim that people who do not work will rarely obtain real happiness.

On the one hand, although the people who do not work still can maintain a good substantial life, they will fell empty in their spiritual life. We have to recognize that one of the aim of work is to earn money, but, in turn, work will bring us things far beyond money, such as a sense of satisfy, the happiness of success, the respect of others, and the pursue of life, to list just a few. If people who have never worked because they have money, they only can get the things bought by money but they will never fell the happiness beyond money. Moreover, if The pleasures of idleness soon cloy, they may hit some bad habits. For instants, they are indulged in the red wine for forgetting the nonsense of life,  they are addicted in drugs for kicks, or they watch some films are gratuitous violence and pornography. If these small bad habits are not controlled in proper ways, they may the source of some heinous crimes. If theses bad habits parallel them towards life of crime, the crime will cast shadow in their life and the happiness of life will vanish forever.

 On the other hand, if people don’t attend work, they will not experience the hardship of life, namely that they will not know how fantastic their life is. Affluent life makes people more vulnerable. When people who do not work experienced some frustration, they will easily be knocked down. Then they will complain the unfair of life and no courage to live on the world. That is the reason why the survey show us that the rich men, especially who do not work, are more likely get depression. In turn, if people who attend work, they will learn some skills about how to surmount the difficulties, they will know how to face troubles and they can deal with the frustrations easily. When they are in front of difficulties, what they think is how to conquer the difficulties and challenge themselves instead give up life. After they success, they will more cherish the rest life and enjoy the life as much as they can. Only people who has experieced l difficulties, they will know the nature of happiness.

 On the other hand, if people don’t attend work, they will not experience the hardship of life, namely that they will not know how fantastic their life is. Affluent life makes people more vulnerable. When people who do not work experienced some frustration, they will easily be knocked down. Then they will complain the unfair of life and no courage to live on the world. That is the reason why the survey show us that the rich men, especially who do not work, are more likely get depression. In turn, if people who attend work, they will learn some skills about how to surmount the difficulties, they will know how to face troubles and they can deal with the frustrations easily. When they are in front of difficulties, what they think is how to conquer the difficulties and challenge themselves instead give up life. After they success, they will more cherish the rest life and enjoy the life as much as they can. Only people who has experieced l difficulties, they will know the nature of happiness.

修改了一下，不知道为什么改完以后再发第三段老出来重合的。。。

to lz:

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