[求助]请教一篇作文的修改。题目是，是否同意电视给我们带来了正面的影响

television is becoming so important to our daily life more and more that
it has become a social issue. when faced with this issue,different people hold
differet attitude.quiet a few people will consider television as a positive invitation
as the statement said,meanwhile,in contrast,other would disagree the statement
and deem that television has a negative effect on our society mainly which is
also my opinion.there are three conspicuous reasons as follow.

foremost, television lead people watch all the time and make family
members do not talk as much as before.in this way,people all spend time in
front of television after work and focus on the TV play only. in this way,they
do not have chance to talk personal feeling and experince everyday which
will make people do not understant each other anymore.plus,spending too
much time on watching television also let people be lack of sports,that
is why there are so many coach potapos around us.

secondly,some contents  is
related to sex and voilence on television.nowadays,people like to watch
exciting television program which properly including sex and war. but should we
give a thought to our children? too many such programs make them
more mature than they should be or believe that violence is the best way to
solve problem. And what is more,so many commercial advertising on television
cost people's too much energy to
pursuit mertiral desire and let people care about nothing but money.

furthermore,television makes people lack of good taste.television is like
fast food.even thought it is delicious and easy to get which is important in
this fast pace time,but like fast food is fat food,television can not bring
delicate enjoyment like movie does.

certainly,it
is not fair if we do not admit the advantage and convinient that
television brought to us,like we can learn from it,and the
information is faster transmitted than before.but if we take all the
related reasons into count,we will still
reach the conclusion that television bring us more negative effect than
positive one. so I can not agree with the statement.

有一些错别字. 要住易一下.整体感觉还可以.加油.

没有太多时间. 我只改了第一段.

television is becoming so important to our daily life more and more that it has become a social issue. when faced with this issue, different people hold differet attitude. quiet a few people will consider television as a positive invitation as the statement said, meanwhile, in contrast, other would disagree the statement and deem that television has a negative effect on our society mainly which is also my opinion. there are three conspicuous reasons as follow.

(Currently, as rapid development of society and living condition being more comfortable, we our common people more and more deeply rely on TV to entertain or obtain news. However, we never should overlook the negative influence during the process of TV involving into our lives while we are acclaiming how TV colorfully decorates our leisure time. There conspicuous reasons draw our attention to contemplate TV negative impacts.)