Issue 36 练习,请指点

36. “Businesses and other organizations
have overemphasized the importance of working as a team. Clearly, in any human
group, it is the strong individual, the person with the most commitment and
energy, who gets things done.”

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I agree that businesses and other
organizations have overemphasized the importance of teamwork. However, the
speaker asserts that in any human group that work is done by the strongest
individual in the team, and I think this view is too extreme. In real world, it
is often and common that the importance of an individual plays a more critical
role than that of teamwork, however, real reasons for this is that most of
managers are going with the
stream.

Firstly, the management methods of businesses
and other organization are conducted by the main management theories. It is
hark to say they believe teamwork form their hearts. And yet they continue to
tout their belief in teamwork, as if that alone will somehow make success
magically appear. Patrick Lencioni, an Leading Expert on Management and Leadership, NYT
Best-Selling Author said that he have found that only a
small minority of companies truly understand and embrace teamwork, even though,
according to their Web sites, more than one in three of the Fortune 500
publicly declare it to be a core value. But what choice do the managers have? Imagine
them standing up in front of a group of employees and saying that teamwork
isn't really all that important here. Ridiculous!

In addition, some research indicates that,
contrary to conventional wisdom, teamwork is not a virtue in itself. It is
merely a strategic choice, not unlike adopting a specific sales model or a
financial strategy. And certainly, when properly understood and implemented, it
is a powerful and beneficial tool. Unfortunately, management theorists and
human resources professionals have made teamwork unconditionally desirable,
something akin to being a good corporate citizen.

Of course, none of this is to say that
teamwork is totally useless. There is no disputing that it is uniquely
powerful, enabling groups of people to achieve more collectively than they
could have imagined doing apart. However, achieving such success requires real
teamwork.

In conclusion, I insist that nowadays teamwork
is overemphasized by businesses and other organizations.  

I agree (with the speaker's opinion) that businesses and other
organizations have overemphasized the importance of teamwork. The
speaker asserts that in any human group that work is done by the strongest
individual in the team, {Here, I think you misunderstood the true meaning of  "who gets things done." For me, "gets things done" means critical steps of works-not the amount of works. So I will just copy and paste the original at here. Any opinion?}.  (Although) {A transition here to show your opinion} I think this viewpoint is too extreme,  in real world,  it 
is often and common (is not uncommon) that the importance of (forget your SC-importance cannot play a role) an (strong or capable) individual plays a more critical
role than that  of teamwork (the rest of team). (Try short sentence because time only 30 mins, long sentences are difficult to be constructed) However, real reasons for this (to happen) is that most of
managers are going with the
stream. { I  am lost here}

Firstly, the management methods of (most) businesses
and other organization(s) are conducted by the main management theories (keep everything simple so you can finish on time). It is
hark (hard) to say (that) they believe teamwork form their hearts.  And yet they continue to
tout their belief in teamwork, as if that alone will somehow make success
magically appear. Patrick Lencioni, an Leading Expert on Management and Leadership, NYT
Best-Selling Author said that he have found that only a
small minority of companies truly understand and embrace teamwork, even though,
according to their Web sites, more than one in three of the Fortune 500
publicly declare it to be a core value. But what choice do the managers have? Imagine
them standing up in front of a group of employees and saying that teamwork
isn't really all that important here. Ridiculous! {Here you just go too extreme, then you cannot qualify the arguement. I would rather to place my position at 3:7 or 4:6).

 In addition, some research indicates that,
contrary to conventional wisdom, teamwork is not a virtue in itself. It is
merely a strategic choice, not unlike adopting a specific sales model or a
financial strategy. And certainly, when properly understood and implemented, it
is a powerful and beneficial tool. Unfortunately, management theorists and
human resources professionals have made teamwork unconditionally desirable,
something akin to being a good corporate citizen.

 Of course, none of this is to say that
teamwork is totally useless. There is no disputing that it is uniquely
powerful, enabling groups of people to achieve more collectively than they
could have imagined doing apart. However, achieving such success requires real
teamwork. {This part should go to 2 nd paragraphy}

        

In conclusion, I insist that nowadays teamwork
is overemphasized by businesses and other organizations. 

Here is my suggestion: Don't go extreme, always say that sth is good but anothor thing is better.

{P1- Set your tone}

{P2- Team work is important; (Set up a target)},

{P3-However, Teamwork just overstated because ...}

{P4-, individual makes the difference because}

{Summary, I agree team work is important, but individual roles are more important.}