TWE014, 感觉没有出彩之处~请指点

个人对这篇作文的评价是：

1. 逻辑结构不严密，这体现在写作的时候，虽然列过提纲，但还是无法一气呵成，思维经常断。

2. 某些词汇比较贫乏，比如文中我用了不下3次required。。。正在积极改进中

3. 写完这篇文章，感觉平淡无奇，没什么出彩的地方。。。无论是论证之精彩，还是语言的妙用都没有。。。

4. 由于时间有些紧，没有写一个结尾段，不知有没有影响，感觉字数应该是够了~

014.
Attending university classes: required or optional

Time: 28min  Words count: 416

Some people think
university classes should be required for students to take, while others may
insist them to be optional. In my opinion, it's necessary for students to
follow the instruction from teachers in the class, so required courses may be a
good choice, although absolute limitation of students' freedom of choosing
courses is not recommended.

In the very first
place, attending a class can provides students with lots of ideas as well as
the instruction from teachers. Collision of thoughts can ignite the sparks of
inspiration. Nowadays, we have different type of class like seminar, a bunch of
people sitting together to share their thoughts and ideas, not merely listening
to one person. This kind of brainstorm can certainly benefit students with some
thoughts they will probably never consider without taking a class. Moreover,
guidance and instruction from teachers are important in the class, because
teachers are more experienced, they know what the difficult points are, and
what the easy ones are. So we can save a lot of time and energy by following
the teacher, instead of exploring a whole book all by oneself alone.

Additionally, from
a broader perspective, the university is responsible for the students to make
certain courses required. Since one after another grade of students have
graduates from the school, the administration board must be more informative
about what's good for the students and what's unnecessary. Considering this point,
taking required classes decided by the university is far more useful for the
future development than studying alone, for former successful examples are set already.
On the contrary, if students are allowed to choose classes freely, that is to
say set the classes optional for them, a situation of dabbling at many courses
without any concentration may occur to the students, because they don't know what
the best is for them. Besides, when students follow what the school tells, it
would be easier for it to arrange their faculty, to put the best teacher into
the largest class in order to benefit as most student as possible.

Admittedly, we
cannot force the students to follow every step that the university plans. After
all, personal factors cannot be considered in the decision making about which
classes are required for they differ from student to student. Also, university
students are mostly adults; they should be responsible to themselves, like making
decisions for themselves. As a result, I think it would be better if the
university set some important course, according to the preceding experience, to
be required, and meanwhile, leave some freedom for the students to choose
courses fitting their interesting, in terms of setting some as optional.

不知大家是否和我感觉相同，欢迎留链互拍啊~~~

300-350就够了，你写得太多了点

写得多并非不可以，但是要有质量

···我没有说没有质量····

··文章没有大毛病，但是小的还是有的

··writing tips先看看，就可以知道是哪些小错了

Some people think(在TOEFL写作中可以适当的避免如think这类比较不高级的词汇，这里可以用deem, regard这类的词汇替换) university classes should be required for students to take(其实should这样的词汇也是最好避免的，能不写就尽量不要写，因为should的命令语气比较的重，而且直接使用should的句子的结构往往不是很好，这里建议你改为：Some people deem all the university classes as the must-take<用must+v.形成一个表示必须这个概念的词是比较高级的说法> ones), while others may insist them to be optional(如果你写作时发现你的字数是够的，那么最好不要用这样的废话来凑字数，而且更不要在开头第一句就说废话，因为开头第一句很重要，它帮你构成你在阅卷人心中的第一印象，只有在字数不够的时候，才适当的添加废话). In my opinion(把一些初中写作的词汇摒弃掉，这里写from my perspective), it's(it is，在所有的正式写作中，都不应该出现it’s这样的连写，而应该打开写作it is,其余的情况也是这样的) necessary for students to follow the instruction from teachers in the class, so required courses may be a good choice, although （the）absolute limitation of students' freedom of choosing courses is not recommended.