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TWE061 第一篇写作,请多指教!

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楼主
发表于 2006-11-23 10:07:00 | 只看该作者

TWE061 第一篇写作,请多指教!

61. Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents or other adult relatives should make important decisions for their older (15 to 18 year-old) teenage children. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

 
  
Nowadays, it is not rare to see that parents make important decisions for their children. So far as I know, it will do harm than good, because we must live in the society all by ourselves. Furthermore, parents can not protect their children forever. Children should select their own education, their own friends and their own jobs.

Children should make their own decisions about what kind of knowledge they learn and which profession they plan to engage in. It is children themselves that know perfectly what discipline they are really interest in. May be initially some of children can not figure out which subject they want to learn. But their lack of experience does not translate into naivete. I believe that they can find out the very subject with which they truly hope spend whole life. For instance, LuXun, who is one of the greatest writers of China, wanted to be a doctor initially, but gradually he realized that is not drug but literature could benefit our society. So he gave up the medicine and became a great writer. The masterpices that he had created have proved writer is the best suitable profession for him.

Further, children should have the right to decide their own friends. It seems to be propensity inherent in human nature that all parents do not want to their children mingle with the people from slums.  But, in my opinion, I argue that parents should not force their children. Making friend with “bad boys” will bring about some negative effects indeed, but it will cause children to learn what the real life is. Most important of all, this experience can teach then how to protect themselves from “bad boys”, since their parents can not protect them forever. Thus, parents should allow children to make their own friends.

Eventually, children should have their jobs. Most parent hope their children work near the hometown and employed by “bid name” companies. Quite the contrary, children always think that working far away will broaden their vision. Morover, a small company will give them a good position and can fully develop their potential. For this reason, children should look for job without the parents’ control.

Generally speaking, all parents always want to give their children the best things. However, making important decisions for them will render them as the weak and self-contemptuous people. Giving them an opportunity to make their own decisions will better prepare them to stand on their own feet.


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沙发
发表于 2006-11-24 00:39:00 | 只看该作者
Nowadays的意思指代不是很明确。请LZ斟酌使用该词。
板凳
发表于 2006-11-24 00:42:00 | 只看该作者
最后两段的开头,偶觉得LZ需要换一下。因为倒数第二段的开头给我的感觉是你已经说完了,但是你下面又写了一段。我没细看。我是先看结构的。从结构上看给我的第一感觉是你的最后一段像是个多余的段落。偶水平不好。斗胆拍砖。请LZ斟酌~
地板
发表于 2006-11-24 01:32:00 | 只看该作者
it will do harm than good 这个好像就不大对
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发表于 2006-11-24 10:22:00 | 只看该作者
我昨天又想了一下,昨天的拍砖有误。还是那个关于eventually,general speaking的问题。LZ的文章都已经一二三列出来了,我觉得最后就不应该用“从大体上来讲”这样的开头,因为前面已经有理由了,最后得出的结论不应该是一个大概的,大致上的结论了。应该是一个总结性的开头。我觉得,像“general speaking”这样的放到前面还差不多。
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 楼主| 发表于 2006-11-25 16:44:00 | 只看该作者

 it will do harm than good 这个好像就不大对

少打了一个us 应该是 it will do children more harm than good,不知道这样行不行呢?


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 楼主| 发表于 2006-11-25 16:49:00 | 只看该作者

我昨天又想了一下,昨天的拍砖有误。还是那个关于eventually,general speaking的问题。LZ的文章都已经一二三列出来了,我觉得最后就不应该用“从大体上来讲”这样的开头,因为前面已经有理由了,最后得出的结论不应该是一个大概的,大致上的结论了。应该是一个总结性的开头。我觉得,像“general speaking”这样的放到前面还差不多。

Joypan 的建议很有道理,改成这样行不行呢?

It is naturelly that all parents always want to  ……

8#
发表于 2006-11-25 20:22:00 | 只看该作者
以下是引用terminator8在2006-11-25 16:49:00的发言:

我昨天又想了一下,昨天的拍砖有误。还是那个关于eventually,general speaking的问题。LZ的文章都已经一二三列出来了,我觉得最后就不应该用“从大体上来讲”这样的开头,因为前面已经有理由了,最后得出的结论不应该是一个大概的,大致上的结论了。应该是一个总结性的开头。我觉得,像“general speaking”这样的放到前面还差不多。

Joypan 的建议很有道理,改成这样行不行呢?

It is naturelly that all parents always want to  ……

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