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do you agree or disagree,in twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there is today

As far as my own country is concerning of controlling the disastrous increase of cars, but finally it turns out to be so hard.Some people consider that ,in twenty years,there will be fewer cars in use than there are today because of the development of the life standard,the others put their views on the effort of government who will build some tools instead of cars and suppose that the number of cars will decrese. I would probably follow the latter.in the following discussion I would like to use reasoning and some persuasive evidence to support my argument.
            

No issue is more important today than this one that the pollution from the cars is much worse than before, such as increasing global temperatures and the hole of the ozone. If the increase of cars do not stop, then maybe twenty years later, the environment of the earth will be so bad that many species of animals and plants can hardly survive. What’s more,even people can not live on it. And the pollution which will give us so many punishments will bring many diseases. Bad environment can be the first killer in the world such as it can cause the cancer.For the standard of our life,we should control the increasing number of the cars.

The effort of the government is another chief and head reason that I have chosen to put here. There is no better illustration that can prove this view,the governments of various countries which take account of the pollution of cars put much effort on building the new tools which can submit the function of cars,such as subways. maybe in 2026,there will be so convinent subways that you can go anywhere by them.on that day, you would not need a car.

There are also many other reasons for assuming there will be fewer cars in use twenty  years later,such as ascendence of the price of the cars and  gasoline,ascendence of  the parking fees.

 
To sum up,given reasons discussed above,which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive,we can safely reach the conclusion that in twenty years,there will be fewer cars in use than there is today because of the effort of governments and the awareness of the pollution.

maybe you need to change some spell mistakes first.I only use word, I can find many mistakes in your writing

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是啊，总是不知不觉打错单词，郁闷