大家帮我分析一下为什么我的作文只有3.5？附有我的模板。

昨天刚收到成绩，作文才3.5。虽然知道一定很差，可也没有想到会如此烂。我是机考作文，感觉时间很紧，作文题目的是121（A or B类型），考前没有准备理由，临场发挥，甚是狼狈。先是把模板敲上，然后往上填理由，一共也没写几句话就到时间了。

大家帮我看看我自己准备的模板，（自我感觉还不错；光是模板就占了290字），可是分数这么低，是否一定是我的内容太空洞了？尤其是头尾都挺大的，中间关键的内容只有几句话。－－是否模板并不是如想像中的那般重要，内容才是最重要的？我在今后的准备中应该如何准备呢？

请指点。谢谢。

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I woulk like to know how many word you get in the test. If too less you write, like me it is your desired. NO other reason I can tell you.

But you know a lot of people use the model in China, maybe there is a experienced officer who give you this score.

good luck next time.

是否一定是我的内容太空洞了？尤其是头尾都挺大的，中间关键的内容只有几句话。就是这个原因。

是否模板并不是如想像中的那般重要，内容才是最重要的？

---这个，模版是骨架，内容是血肉。有骨架没血肉的人，和有血肉没骨架的人，一样的不好看。所以模半也不要丢

以下是引用czlovegj在2005-5-17 21:44:00的发言：

I woulk like to know how many word you get in the test. If too less you write, like me it is your desired. NO other reason I can tell you.

But you know a lot of people use the model in China, maybe there is a experienced officer who give you this score.

good luck next time.

谢谢楼上两位的答复。

敲上模板后，我每一段添加的内容基本上就是两到三句的很简单的句子，并且感觉例子很牵强，估摸总字数应该在350左右（我模板的字数已经很多了）。以前一直以为机考作文能容易点，存有侥幸心里。没想到电脑也不是那么好骗的，最终骗的只是我的钱。只能是踏踏实实的好好练习了。

楼主不用灰心。 好好练习， 多写多改多写多改， 肯定可以的。 TWE是TOEFL考试中间最容易提高的部分。

http://forum.chasedream.com/dispbbs.asp?boardID=68&ID=108488&page=3

参考一下。

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